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Dreams Can Come True...


Exquisite and mouth-watering chocolate

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Hi Carol, I think I'm drooling. I could use some chocolate right now. This is good. I really like the beginning, it draws you in and then at the right moment gets to the point.

I think there's supposed to be 3 w below:
(w)ww.aignerchocolates.com,


 Comment Written 29-Oct-2010



reply by the author on 29-Oct-2010
    Donna, Leave it to me..tried to erase an extra space and wiped out the w as well. Thanks for catching it. Now if I could just find that chocolate bar, I'd be in Heaven. Thanks so much...Smiles, Carol
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And not a piece of chocolate can I find, but I'm not driving to New York today... Wonder how fast their delivery service is? Guess I better go check them out on the web.
Well done, Buck


 Comment Written 29-Oct-2010



reply by the author on 29-Oct-2010
    Buck,

    I'm trying to wipe all the drool off my key board from writing the story...They don't call me a chocoholic for nothing. Thanks for the kind review...Smiles, Carol
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This is a great entry for the contest, Carol. I have read several of the entries and I think this is one of the best. I especially like the last line. Good luck.


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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2010
    Jnetgame,

    I haven't been around for ahile so I've missed the other entries..but as a chocolate lover I was truly inspired. Thank you for the kind words and support. Smiles, Carol
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Carol,
I'm a card carrying member of Chocoholics Anonymous. You make me want to go in search for chocolate. What yummy descriptions you give for Aigner Chocolates. I enjoyed this description: "From simple chocolate tidbits to the gourmet, you're sure to find the purest of chocolates at Aigner's. From real coconut creams, tart jellies, freshly roasted nuts and liqueurs, fruited morsels to sugar-free or delectable holiday treats, they offer exquisite chocolate for everyone's pleasure." The art work looks delicious. Your advertisement is an excellent entry in the Aigner Chocolate Challenge contest. I wish you good luck in the contest.
Melissa.


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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2010
    Melissa,

    You and me both...Take whatever I have but leave me the chocolate would be my dying words. lol Thanks for the wonderful review..Smiles, Carol

    PS I think there justmight be a little chocolate smudge at the corner of your mouth..mine too! lol

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Wow, all of a sudden I have this craving for something and I cant' put my finger on it. Could it be Aigner chocalate? Great descriptions that tantalize the mind with thoughts of- damn, see your piece really worked. I have to go scrounge the fridge. good luck with the contest.


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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2010
    sibhus,

    Halloween was meant for people like me..let the kids do the work and then (in the name of saving their teeth) I can horde all the candy to savor all year..well maybe not all year. That's probably why Grandma is so "plesantly" plump...oh well, at least I'll be happy. LOL Thanks for the wonderful review. Carol
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Nice sweet contest entry, my friend. I think you should stay far away. Well jada is diabetic so I'm bound to go dilly with all the sweetness. Loved your essay. It really tantalises the taste buds and invites you to go and explore.
Well done and best wishes for the contest. luv jada


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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2010
    Jada,

    When it comes to chocolate (preferrable dark chocolate) I'm a bitch in heat..lookout because it's mine..all mine.LOL

    Thanks for the gnerous review and kindness. You put a smile onmy face.

    Smiles back to you...Carol
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Oh how much I enjoyed this write. I am hungry now for chocolate and I wish you well in the contest here. This was a very informative piece of writing you share with us here at FanStory and I commend you for it:) Yummy:) magics


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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2010
    magics,

    I'm glad you enjoyed it. Now I'm sitting here dying for a piece of dark chocolate and none to be had. I think Halloween was created for people like me..horde the kids chocolate and savor it all year....wellmaybe it won't last all year. Thanks and smiles to you...Carol

reply by Magics02 on 29-Oct-2010
    I love this one so much and your response made me laugh:)
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their product is guaranteed TO make you smile - typo
I have read several entries, and I think you do the best job of providing information, like how to order the chocolates, with a warm history of this family business and their commitment to quality. I really like the intro as you equate their chocolate with the finest items found in NYC. Brooke


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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2010
    Brooke,

    Thanks for stopping by and for the generous review. I appreciate and have corrected the typo. Now if you could just manage to send me a tiny bit of dark chocolate I'd be in Heaven. lol

    Thanks so much...Smiles, Carol

reply by adewpearl on 29-Oct-2010
    Hey, if you win, you can opt for the $100 worth of chocolate as the prize :-)

reply by the author on 29-Oct-2010
    My mouth says bring it on, but my mind tells me grab the money and run...Thanks and have a great day! Carol
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I'm a life long chocoholic (I am too, but I have no desire for chocohlate right now. Oh dear, did the chemo take my disire for chocolate away. Now that just isn't fair, my one vice is life is chocolate. HUMMM. I need to investigate. Normally after even the mention of chocolate, I would be running out the door to buy chocolate.)


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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2010
    Barbara,

    I believe Halloween was invented for people like us...Let the children do the work and then we graciously step in to save their tiny little teeth by hording the candy and savoring it all year...well, maybe it won't last all year. LOL Thanks for the review..Smiles, Carol

    PS..I think there justmight be a tiny chocolate smude at the corner of your mouth..lol
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This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very easy read. There is good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your contest.

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 Comment Written 29-Oct-2010



reply by the author on 29-Oct-2010
    Charlie,

    Thank you for stopping by and leaving me such a nice review. Appreciate it very much. Smiles, Carol

reply by c_lucas on 29-Oct-2010
    You're welcome, Carol. Charlie
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