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Mistaken Identity - Part 1


When the Past Returns to Haunt You

  29 total reviews 
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minopavlic
 
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Carol, I see a masterpiece unfolding itself again within your unique style of suspense. You bring the characters to life, and though we may think we know where its going, we haven't a clue as to the maze you're about to take us through.

Mino


 Comment Written 31-Oct-2010



reply by the author on 01-Nov-2010
    Mino,

    Guess what..with this particular one I am not sure where I am headed either..so let's travel the road together and hope that we both enjoy the ride. Smiles, Carol
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missy98writer
 
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Carol,
what an extermely written premise. Part one sucessfuly establishes setting and ocnflict. Your narrative is excellent and riveting. The art work added to the chills. I like the hurried Shannon. When Richard entered the scene after getting out of prison I felt the tension rise because he's a "free man with an agenda." Shannon is a wise ass. She was a bit short with the new CEO Matt. The guy is no doubt an arrorgant creem. What a chilling warning he issued her; "Don't worry, you haven't seen the last of me." You've set up what appears to be a very enjoyable mystery and crime story. Have a nice day.
Melissa.


 Comment Written 31-Oct-2010



reply by the author on 01-Nov-2010
    Melissa,

    I hope you are right...Don't know where this chapter really came from..I just started writing and it exploded across the page..now I'll have to find out where we are going..Thanks for coming along for the ride...Carol
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dmjones
 
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Hi Carol, this sounds like it'll be a good story. I liked the start of it anyway. And your characters are interesting.

Suggestions:
Her feet screamed for relief and her temples were pounding(this could be condensed to: Her feet screamed for relief and her temples pounded.)

Matt's biceps. (")I think you better come with us, sir."



 Comment Written 31-Oct-2010



reply by the author on 01-Nov-2010
    Donna,

    As usual you are right on top of it and I thank you..This story just wrote itself while I followed along. Now I have to figure out where we are going and I don't have a road map.Smiles, Carol
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Writeaway...
 
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Begin Again, you kept me in thrall from beginning to end, an exhilerating well written read, bravo. I can find nothing to suggest for improvement, excellent job, can't wait for part 2, keep writing!! :)

Happy Halloween!!


 Comment Written 31-Oct-2010



reply by the author on 01-Nov-2010
    Jake,

    As soon as I find that road map so I know where I'm headed, I'll write that next chapter. Thanks for the wonderful review..Take care..Carol
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hotstuff
 
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This is going to be a really interesting story and I can't wait to read on. It is full of intrigue and suspense. Hope you post again soon. It's great.


 Comment Written 31-Oct-2010



reply by the author on 01-Nov-2010
    hotstuff,

    My heads hitting the wall today..can't make the story go the way I think it should...but thank you so much for the review and encouragement. Smiles, CArol
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Belinda
 
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Hi, Carol. This is a promising part one of an exciting story. You've introduced us to three prominent persons for this story, and the characterization is good. You might want to look for missed quotation marks in the para that starts with: Two no nonsense ...


 Comment Written 31-Oct-2010



reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
    Belinda,

    As always, Thanks..Carol PS--excuse my tardiness, please
Comment by
RebelRose
 
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Very interesting story so far. Well written with a good beginning. I am looking forward to reading part 2 and any further parts you have in store. Good read.


 Comment Written 30-Oct-2010



reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
    Patty,

    As always, Thanks..Carol PS--excuse my tardiness, please
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IndianaIrish
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Oh my, Carol! This is absolutely absorbing and makes me scream for more! It sure is glad having you back. It's easy to follow who is who and you juice up the story just enough to have the reader beg for more!
Karyn :>)


 Comment Written 30-Oct-2010



reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
    Karyn

    As always, Thanks..Carol PS--excuse my tardiness, please
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misscookie
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This is some artwork it gave me chils
it is perfect for youe poem I like the flow of the stroy and they way you kept my interest throught the whole story.


 Comment Written 30-Oct-2010



reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
    I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment..I apologize for my delay in thanking you..Carol

reply by misscookie on 08-Nov-2010
    Your welcome, no problem.
Comment by
Trybuck
 
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You have set the stage pretty good. One good twin, one bad. Stubborn woman gets off on what seems to be the wrong foot for sure. I'm sure you'll bring it all together quite well.
Well done, Buck


 Comment Written 30-Oct-2010



reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
    Buck,
    I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment..I apologize for my delay in thanking you..Carol
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