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Mistaken Identity - Part 1


When the Past Returns to Haunt You

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Carolyn Hilliard
 
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GREAT CHAPTER; YOU'VE GOT MY ATTENTION; IN FACT I JUST PLACED YOU ON MY FAN LIST SO WHEN YOU WRITE SOMETHING I'LL KNOW. BELOW IS FROM YOUR STORY
biceps. I think you better come with us, sir."
Need " before[ ... I think...]


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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
    Feisty,

    I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment..I apologize for my delay in thanking you..Carol
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Oh, maybe Matt is more like his twin brother that he's care to admit. Cocky and thinking that no matter what everyone should repect him. Great beginning. Can't wait to see what happens next.


Her dedication earned her the respect and admiration of everyone she (delete who) came in contact with (delete her), but more importantly, it kept her sane.

The sultry voice could only belong to (one) person,

You take all the fun out life, Sam(.) What Nikki don't know won't hurt him."









 Comment Written 30-Oct-2010



reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
    I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment..I apologize for my delay in thanking you..Carol
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Hi Carol,

This is going to be a wonderful story! I really enjoyed part one and can hardly wait to see what happens next. Your characters are interesting and well described. A criminal, a CEO and a no nonsense production assistant...doesn't get much better than that. Well done and keep it coming. Blessings, chey


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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
    I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment..I apologize for my delay in thanking you..Carol
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I doubt if Shannon should have dismissed him in any way shape or fashion. Am I right? I can't wait for the rest of the story. You have done a good job with this.


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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
    I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment..I apologize for my delay in thanking you..Carol
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Hi, Begin Again.

Looks like she should have read that newspaper that was given to her. I enjoyed reading this. She appears to be one spunky lady. Hopefully, he won't fire or murder her. Imagine that, he's the twin brother of a rapist. Wow! This story sure kept my attention. I thought this was very well written.

April


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    I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment..I apologize for my delay in thanking you..Carol
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This was really good, it held me from the beginning. i like the natural way of storytelling and this writer is expert in some ways; also nice to see no spag at all. one small thing; i've yet to read it all. but if he owns the company a bright girl would know? and i didn't get the sudden reference to a cougar, was it meant to be wildcat? all in a good write.


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    I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment..I apologize for my delay in thanking you..Carol
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Your beginning is full of promise for drama to come about. It's well written and not packed with useless words. Can't wait to see where you are going with this story. Betcha there's love in the air!!!


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    I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment..I apologize for my delay in thanking you..Carol

reply by Gungalo on 08-Nov-2010
    My pleasure, Carol. Keep at it, girl!!!
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Intriguing. I'm definitely interested in reading the scene where Shannon discovers the guy she threw out is actually her new boss. You use a lot of telling but top it off with dialogue. If Shannon is a procrastinator then show her twiddling her thumbs. Perhaps she left at the last minute because she thought traffic was going to be light; however life rarely works that way. She could be complaining about be stuck in traffic. "I can just see it now: my mother's thin reedy voice saying you're got to be proactive." Or something like "she'd be late to her own funeral." Looking forward to next chapter.

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    I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment..I apologize for my delay in thanking you..Carol
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once protected it's namesakes - drop the apostrophe
make sure the lightning crew is ready - lighting crew
Ain't blood suppose be thicker - to be
You certainly have this story off to a dramatic start - the cop turned rapist, now ex-con and his twin brother, the philanthropist now the owner of a movie studio - lots of possibilities! Good dialogue, too. Brooke

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