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Mistaken Identity - Part 4


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Donald O. Cassidy
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Fascinating, Carol. This is an intriguing plot, with lively execution. The characters are life-like, dramatic action full blast, and dialogue good.

The sexy stuff seems a little out-of-character for your usual writing. I guess, however, you're versatile, producing good writing in various cultures, etc.


 Comment Written 09-Nov-2010



reply by the author on 22-Nov-2010
    Please forgive my tardiness in replying and telling you how much I appreciate your support. I have been spending the majority of my time in doctors' offices, hospitals and traveling out of state to a University Hospital. My "honey" is seriously ill..We thought it was under control and now this bacteria is back with a vengenance. It's in his sinus cavity and facial skin and if it gets to his brain...well, it could be something they can't control. We are leaving shortly for the hospital again.Please keep us in your thoughts and prayers..Carol
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sis once again your story has moved in so many directions , this brain just doesnt quite know where its heading next. and the plot thickens. great suspense and what a trick to pull on us. twin brothers. my word sis. who would have guessed that.. surely not me. look forward to the next chapter in the lives of these strange brothers... keep up the great work sis. its working wonders.. happy hugs your little sisxxxxx ps. still no sixes available so sorry sis, cant pass on what I don't have. even though your story is worthy xxxxxxxxxxxsis


 Comment Written 09-Nov-2010



reply by the author on 22-Nov-2010
    Don't think this story willhave an ending for a long time..Love ya..Sis
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Oh, man. Talk about all the mix ups in the world. I don't understand how the two guys ended up at the same hotel? Did Nikki arrainge for that, and if so, why didn't Richard ask for his own room? Just some logic points. Great job.


Maybe You(you) want to tell your boss I took my business elsewhere."





 Comment Written 08-Nov-2010



reply by the author on 22-Nov-2010
    Please forgive my tardiness in replying and telling you how much I appreciate your support. I have been spending the majority of my time in doctors' offices, hospitals and traveling out of state to a University Hospital. My "honey" is seriously ill..We thought it was under control and now this bacteria is back with a vengenance. It's in his sinus cavity and facial skin and if it gets to his brain...well, it could be something they can't control. We are leaving shortly for the hospital again.Please keep us in your thoughts and prayers..Carol
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Hello Carol

I like stories where there is Mistaken Identity.
And yes, your chapter is the kind that makes a reader want more and more.
I don't know what else to say, other then great writing as usual.

Gert


 Comment Written 08-Nov-2010



reply by the author on 22-Nov-2010
    Please forgive my tardiness in replying and telling you how much I appreciate your support. I have been spending the majority of my time in doctors' offices, hospitals and traveling out of state to a University Hospital. My "honey" is seriously ill..We thought it was under control and now this bacteria is back with a vengenance. It's in his sinus cavity and facial skin and if it gets to his brain...well, it could be something they can't control. We are leaving shortly for the hospital again.Please keep us in your thoughts and prayers..Carol

reply by Gert sherwood on 22-Nov-2010
    Carol you and your honey are in my prayers.
    Gert
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Okay, this sounds like a real twister. I can see trouble brewing all over the place and someone's going to score from mistaken identity. Lots of delicious intrigue. Did you write some of this before? I'll have to check what I missed.
Well written, crisp and interesting. luv jada


 Comment Written 08-Nov-2010



reply by the author on 22-Nov-2010
    Please forgive my tardiness in replying and telling you how much I appreciate your support. I have been spending the majority of my time in doctors' offices, hospitals and traveling out of state to a University Hospital. My "honey" is seriously ill..We thought it was under control and now this bacteria is back with a vengenance. It's in his sinus cavity and facial skin and if it gets to his brain...well, it could be something they can't control. We are leaving shortly for the hospital again.Please keep us in your thoughts and prayers..Carol
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This is real edge-of-the-seat stuff. You have managed to capture plenty of drama although I had a hard job keeping up with the characters. I loved the way the action moved along so fast.
Giddy


 Comment Written 08-Nov-2010



reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
    Thanks for stopping by and commenting. Your encouragment and support is greatly appreciated. Hope you have a great day...Smiles, Carol PS I hope you will become a fan and continue to follow the story. Thanks
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Yikes! It's hard to tell if Cassandro is coming or going. Wouldn't it be something if the two ran into each other, but I'm thinking Matt must look so much better. This is very exciting.


 Comment Written 07-Nov-2010



reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
    Lola,

    Thanks for stopping by and commenting. Your encouragment and support is greatly appreciated. Hope you have a great day...Smiles, Carol
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Carol,
part four of Mistaken Identity is awesomely written. The plot thickens. Oh, I can't wait to read more. You had me literally on the edge of my wheel chair. I like phrase Sam used 'pushing up daisies.' Great descriptive writing in this phrase: "She pressed against him. His body heat skyrocketed, his manhood stood at attention. He inhaled." Evil Richard is watching Shannon. I wonder who the real rapist is or are they both evil incarnate. Your doing a fantastic job, my dear. Have a blessed day.
Melissa.


 Comment Written 07-Nov-2010



reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
    Melissa,

    Thanks for stopping by and commenting. Your encouragment and support is greatly appreciated. Hope you have a great day...Smiles, Carol
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The plot thickens... I can't wait to see what happens when the two brothers meet. You story is really exciting. I'm enjoying it throughly.


 Comment Written 07-Nov-2010



reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
    Beth,

    Thanks again for reading and commenting..Carol
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Suspense is building.

Mike[Matt?] Cassandro - Philanthropist and new CEO of Never Submit Entertainment

she immediately assumes Mike[Matt] Cassandro is the man who attempted to rape her.

He slammed the door [not needed closed] and strolled away from the car.

The real Mike[Matt] Cassandro walked out of the hotel bar and approached the hotel desk.

Mike[Matt] smiled. Management had trained their staff well.

Roberta


 Comment Written 07-Nov-2010



reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
    Roberta,

    Think there might be a triplet...no, just me losingmy mind. Thanks! Carol
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