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Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Into the Gathering Storm"

a selection of my best flash fiction

  44 total reviews 
Comment by
baskers89
 
 
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What amazing imagery. I really feel like I am there and have a sense of the characters through the description, Beatifully written


 Comment Written 07-Apr-2014



reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
    thanks so much for the kind review :)
Comment by
arunkrishnan
 
 
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Wonderful work! The lady is sure angel than witch. Some co-incidences make a drastic change in our lives making us wonder if they were a mere coincidence. Excellent prose! Good use of adjectives that bring out more life to the scenes, and aids in visualizing the scenario easily.


 Comment Written 01-May-2012



reply by the author on 01-May-2012
    Thank you so much for the kind words of encouragement and the generous rating.
Comment by
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Realist101
 
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How intriguing! She was a ghost warning him!! I am very impressed with your vivid 'showing' words. I felt the chill, the rain, and the consternation of the main character too. ") Susan


 Comment Written 04-Sep-2011



reply by the author on 04-Sep-2011
    Thanks so much, Susan. I really appreciate the great review.
Comment by
Kokopelli
 
 
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Very nice. I really enjoyed it - your "words - pictures in the mind" were exceptional. I saw them both - and the follow through from the start to finish kept me engaged.

Congrats on winning the seal - as well as the other honors. The story deserves it. -- And in so few words. Great work


 Comment Written 15-May-2011



reply by the author on 16-May-2011
    Wow, thank you so much, I'm honored by the generous rating and kind words.
Comment by
JMRoland
 
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Hi redrider6612,

First of all, congratulations on the Seal of Quality. It was that announcement that led me over here to read. This is a good piece of flash fiction. It is well-conceived, with a provocative setting and interesting characters. The plot line holds tension and reader interest, and the ending is quite satisfying, and some what of a surprise, which is always desirable in a short-short. Two minor things: check the spelling of "mesmerized" in paragraph 12. Also, in paragraph 2, if you were to substitute "pistol" for "gun", it might sound better to the reader's ear, as you follow soon after with "gum boots".

Nicely done story-written on a professional level.

JMR


 Comment Written 15-May-2011



reply by the author on 15-May-2011
    Thank you for the kind congrats and the great feedback.
Comment by
Elaine Westheimer
 
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A very well written story that kept me interested from beginning to end. I had to look up wraith and found it to be Scottish. Is that where you envision the story taking place? I am not sure if this contest is already done, but I hope you had or have good luck with it.



 Comment Written 09-Jan-2011



reply by the author on 10-Jan-2011
    Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed my story. I didn't actually imagine a specific location for the story. My story took 3rd place, but I've already entered it in an off-site contest, so maybe it will do better there. I appreciate the kind good wishes.
Comment by
cheyennewy
 
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Hi redrider,

Oh, I didn't want this story to end! I was hoping for a beautiful love story with the Sean and the mysterious maiden. It is obvious to me you have good writing skills and a vivid imagination....both of which a good writer needs. Good descriptions throughout make this story a pleasure to read. Well done and good luck in the contest. Blessings, chey


 Comment Written 09-Jan-2011



reply by the author on 09-Jan-2011
    Thanks so much, chey, I'm so glad you enjoyed my story, you incurable romantic. :)
Comment by
Writingfundimension
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I just came across this while perusing; and I'm glad I did. This is just a wonderful piece of fiction. I'll admit to being a sucker for ghost stories and have read lots of them. I found this an exceptionally well-written one. Good luck with your submissions.


 Comment Written 09-Jan-2011



reply by the author on 09-Jan-2011
    Thank you very much. I'm so pleased you enjoyed my story.

reply by Writingfundimension on 09-Jan-2011
    Welcome!
Comment by
Rdfrdmom2
 
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redrider6612:

This is a wonderful story -- some may call it an
unbelievable story but I've heard way too many
similar stories which have no plausible explanations
(and I have lived some of them myself) to know these
things do happen.

Your story is well-written and very moving -- a
testimony to God sending His angels where they are
most needed

thanks for sharing
love,
jan


 Comment Written 08-Jan-2011



reply by the author on 08-Jan-2011
    Thanks so much, Jan, I really appreciate the great review. I do believe God sends us his angels when we need help.
Comment by
BethShelby
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This is excellent flash fiction. The lighthouse keeper goes out to save a life and instead his own is the life saved. The story is tight and well-developed. It is full of mystery and has a great ending. Good luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 08-Jan-2011



reply by the author on 08-Jan-2011
    Thank you, Beth. Contest voting is over and I placed third, and I've already submitted the story to an off-site contest.
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