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Ecstasy Is The Soul's Escape


An essential experience of oneness in sensuality.

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Babette Francis
 
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Husband and Wife
We merge as incandescent rays
Into a beam of glistening light.
In whirlwind pleasures, show displays
Of penetrating souls in flight~~~~~ This is the best line of all the perfectly worded lines in this MASTERPIECE !!!


 Comment Written 28-Jun-2006


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BeautysMessenger
 
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Where does one start to review an almost perfectly formed traditional poem with subtlly presented theme and powerful imagery. It does exactly what it was intended to do; the author completely immerses the audience and holds it without bump or bruise but with only smooth sailing.

I only think that one image could be improved:

We merge as incandescent rays
Into a beam of glistening light.

Incandescent rays when merged and transformed can do a lot more magic than just "glisten". In fact it's the "surface" that glistens by virtue of light reflected from its wet surface, but the beam of light itself does something else: it bursts or prisms or refracts (is what it does underwater). And with your power to image, I'm sure you could think of an even better idea.

Wonderful work


 Comment Written 28-Jun-2006


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cutie
 
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Husband and Wife
very deep.
given efforts not enough to sink into emotion ocean....going to end of eternity.....
glinting happily heart with wise soul.
great poem
thanks so much!


 Comment Written 28-Jun-2006


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CaseyMezera
 
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Hi Karina,

Great language and creativity. Nice sentament. However, I'm not quite sure why you repeated the first stanza in different font colors, but I'll take it as a mistake and not actually part of the poem.

Ax


 Comment Written 28-Jun-2006


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A very beautiful poem with much emotion. It flows easily and ends with at the right spot. The images are strong, especially paired with the graphic, and the choice of words is outstanding. Excellent job. Best wishes. Ray.


 Comment Written 28-Jun-2006


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aBoxofBrokenCrayons
 
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Beautiful imagery from start to finish, Karina. Your use of verbiage was Pro. I am pleased to hear you and your husband have such a bond. It's just another fine example that love truly can exist. Thanks for sharing this mastered piece.

"Enriched by divine nectar's spark," <--Great!

Paul-


 Comment Written 28-Jun-2006


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I loved this extremely written piece; i found it to have a smooth flow and the poem was a partial easy read, got deep in parts; thanks for sharing


 Comment Written 28-Jun-2006


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Nice, Karina J. Belkin. I love your rhyme and cadence to this poem. It flows easily off the tongue. Your imagery conveyed is stunning. The whole poem is professionally written with a lovely sentiment. Thanks for sharing. Have any new ones to post?

Foxey


 Comment Written 28-Jun-2006


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I'm not a poet, so don't expect a very helpful review from me. I can just give my opinion, nothing more, nothing less.
I liked the poem, the flow of the words.
I liked the atmosphere it creates, but I won't pretend to really understand your poem.
I can understand that it's about the love between a man and a woman, but that's about all. I guess it's enough though.
Enough to like your poem.


 Comment Written 28-Jun-2006


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Husband and Wife
As currents move our love to shore,
Enriched by divine nectar's spark,
Our sated vessels amply pour
Aurora's flux through passion's ark.
In effervescence springing life;
Baptized as one, husband and wife.

Now why don't they give you this as an option over current bible dribble at weddings?
I really love the way you captured the union of two souls and two bodies and two halves to make a whole.
I can see why you already have a book of poetry on the market. ;)


 Comment Written 28-Jun-2006


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