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Silent Wake Up Call


Silence isn't always so silent..

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Gungalo
 
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LOL seems you have a funny bone too. This is hilarious and I'm gonna remember it to tell a few friends. Beautifully put together girl, and such a witty presentation too!!!


 Comment Written 03-Apr-2011



reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
    This actually happened with my next door neighbor friends...LOL.
    he is a business flyer...so this one really put an end to their
    'silent treatment' needless to say. I roared when I heard them
    tell me about it...now they think it is funny too, and ok'd to
    poste as a reminder that 'silence' sometimes costs more than
    just pride and ego. Glad you enjoyed and good lesson. Thanks
    again sweet gal!

reply by Gungalo on 03-Apr-2011
    LOL well so glad to hear it is real and hope many decide not to be so quiet!!! Loved it you!!!
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Eternal Muse
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OMG! It was too funny. I too, have the grave fear of not waking up on time; so I solved the problem with setting my cell phone alarm to ring three times at intervals of 15 min. After a recent phone call at 3:30 a.m. (it was urgent, but notwithstanding), I set the thing to "Alarm only."

Your piece was just too funny! "It's 5:00, Ted, wake up!!" Imagine that - the poor guy missed the plane. Loved your alarm clock too with a rooster image. (You may want to replace a semicolon after 5;00 with a colon 5:00). If that happened to me on my last trip to Vegas, I would miss my first class flight! ROF.

Adorable, Ronni. It brought a big smile to my face.


 Comment Written 30-Mar-2011



reply by the author on 30-Mar-2011
    Thans Yelena, sometimes silence is carried a bit too far, and
    too late. This was actually my two neighbors spat, and of
    course, she was noticeably absent when he woke up, starting
    at her polite OK note, and that wake up one on his side....
    Don't think they will pulling the silent treatment anymore.
    Will fix that time typo...thanks again. Best always.

reply by Eternal Muse on 30-Mar-2011
    When that happens in a marriage, I'd say it is on the rocks, and may be beyond any marriage counseling! One party must despite the other to pull that one.
    Whew... I am glad I am not a recepient of that note.
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Very funny. I can relate to this story. There is a typo in the second line. I think you mean they "had a spat."
Eighth line I think would read better with "He had an early flight the next morning for a business meeting." Also check your spelling of "business." That may be just a typo. Another small correction ":" rather than ";" at 5:00 A.M.
I enjoyed the story.
Patti :)


 Comment Written 30-Mar-2011



reply by the author on 30-Mar-2011
    Thanks Patti, for thoughtful review, and notes for typo's...
    sincerely appreicate it...will fix... Best always.
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Cletus Hardiman
 
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Now this is really cute! Cute for lack of a better word at the moment. This kind of silence is NEVER golden! Nice work, Ronni! Clete


 Comment Written 30-Mar-2011



reply by the author on 30-Mar-2011
    Thanks Clete, sometimes people make more noise in silence
    than they do yelling at each other..LOL..thanks for stopping
    by again....have a great day!!!

reply by Cletus Hardiman on 30-Mar-2011
    Party Pooper! I know a "GOODBYE" when I hear it! LOL You have a good one too. I have been out working most of the day, and just run in and out of the office and see where my poem went....Not high enough! Oh, well, there is tonight! Have a good one! LOL PS...Hope you know I am kidding!
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Hi Ronni

Your, well the above has confused me. Is it a poem or a short story, plus should 'lintered' be lingered?

Love the picture of the clock and chicken

Have given 5 stars incase the fanstory has messed up.

All the best. Pete



 Comment Written 30-Mar-2011



reply by the author on 30-Mar-2011
    Thanks Pete, I was still checking for re-edit when you were
    already reviewing, keep forgetting to push 'preview' button...
    darn it...but thanks for great review! Yes that word needs
    fixin' and will do. Thanks again. Have a great day friend!!!
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