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A refection on getting older.

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the blue pixel
 
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You DO write poetry Barbara. I thought I had better check just to make sure I hadn't just thought you were an author and sure enough, I found some. I am so sorry I made that assumption but better very very late than never. You know how to rhyme that's for sure iand you know how it feels to be me but I can't see you at all as an old lady or even close. You have expressed my sentiments exactly Barbara. A man with the wedding ring on his finger and no toys boys for me either. One of my partners was actually 13 years my junior but funny enough, he looked older than I did. I am really glad that you are not too old for a roll in the hay. My mother, going on 90, whispered to me that being old idoes not mean gthe end of passion and dad is nearly 91. I don't think I want to think about that but there was definitely a twinkle in her eye. You have a lot of company if that helps but you have a long way to go me thinks, before you hit my age. xx Carol


 Comment Written 18-Oct-2011



reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
    I am glad you found one of my poems. I am working on another poem. It takes me forever to write one. Thank you for your support.

reply by the blue pixel on 19-Oct-2011
    That's only because they are not your first love I imagine Barbara. YOu are welcome to my review. Goodness knows you have so loyal and supportive to me. xx
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Judian James
 
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Here I am!! In the first line, I would change out "just" for "am" ... turning it into a positive!! Third line,
"Men may think they should carry my bag" again, more positive!
"For me, my man must have very slow hands." I LOVE this line!!

Next line: "We must also be wearing wedding bands." The thought is so perfect but the rhythm is off. How about:
"And both should be wearing their wedding bands"

Final verse: "I'm not too old for a romp in the hay."
Instead, "I'm still not too old for romps in the hay"

Then: "I still have a lot of living to do" ... "I know that I have more living to do" ...

Just some thoughts to take or toss, with all just gentle, easy tweaks to consider








 Comment Written 14-Aug-2011



reply by the author on 14-Aug-2011
    Like I said I struggle with poetry. It's no where close to your level. I will make the changes. I appreciate you talking a look.

reply by Judian James on 14-Aug-2011
    It's good and fun Barbara and all the tweaks are so simple. YOU wrote the piece. I just played "editor" for a moment. I would want exactly the same from you when reviewing my work. Thanks
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Deejharrington
 
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I think you did a wonderful job of describing growing older but not dead yet! LOL No, I really think the picture looks a lot more like me. Just one difference the "you" in your last line, are two aging cats! LOL They take much less care than an old man. Very well done.
deb


 Comment Written 26-Jul-2011



reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
    Thank you for the laugh and the review.

reply by Deejharrington on 26-Jul-2011
    You're very welcome
    deb
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me_tudor
 
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Wonderful poem, Barbara. It was a really fun read. I wouldn't say that you are an old lady though, far from it. Have a great day today. M.E.


 Comment Written 26-Jul-2011



reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
    Thank you for the kind review.
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Brad Sterling
 
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Tongue in cheek poetry is not easy to write - specially pretending to use yourself as a model! - but you've succeeded rather well - lot of truth peeping out between the lines - not the ones on your brow! - age has compensations - we all learn through experience - an enjoyable flowing story with apt words and rhymes - one old lady certainly knew what to say - and said it well...Brad.


 Comment Written 26-Jul-2011



reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
    Thank you for the kind review.
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fairydancer
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How true - love is not just for the young (and often wasted on them! LOL - I didn't have a clue when I was younger!)
Now we're older we know what is important - loyalty and trust. Good quatrain form and rhymes. Excellent - Cally :)


 Comment Written 26-Jul-2011



reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
    Thank you for your kind review.
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Rose Hearth
 
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I don't know where it came from, but I'm glad it got there! I love the artwork! I am a widow in a small town and have been approached by a few men who are enough younger than me to be considered 'boy toys.' I simply say what you said in your poem, but in a different way..."I've already raised one son, what makes you think I want any more gray hair?"


 Comment Written 26-Jul-2011



reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
    I like your response. I appreciate your kind review.
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MyYiaYia
 
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Barbara, it wasn't you that posed for her, it was me. That's why you didn't remember it. LOL! I thought you did a great job on your poem. I can certainly relate to your thoughts. Maybe someone will see my bee-you-ti-ful picture and look me up. Very nice poem. Deb :0)


 Comment Written 26-Jul-2011



reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
    Thank you for the kind review.
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animatqua
 
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It's romance, all right; especially the "I'm ready to spend my days with you".

I am sensing more poignancy in that line than an "I love you" declaration. Expressions of elder love can be that way.


 Comment Written 26-Jul-2011



reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
    I appreciate your kind review.
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manicblue
 
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I can really identify with your wonderful poem. Just because we're older, doesn't mean we've lost our desires or needs. And yes, we still have a lot of living to do...we aren't dead yet! :) Well done. Please take care. I enjoyed this very much.


 Comment Written 25-Jul-2011



reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
    Thank you for your kind review.
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