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Dobyns Chronicals


A semi-ficional story as told by Charlie Dobyns

  17 total reviews 
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Dave M
 
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Rating of Chapter 64 -
Charlie Looks at Property
This is an excellent chapter about people facing hard times. I enjoyed the read and have one suggestion:


"No, just lookin'." (This end quote should come out since Mila keeps talking.) I want to know what's around. How far is it to this place?"

Dave


 Comment Written 30-Oct-2011



reply by the author on 14-Nov-2011
    Thank you so much for the help and the kind review. I do appreciate it very much. Shirley
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purrfect tale
 
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Rating of Chapter 64 -
Charlie Looks at Property
This is a great story. I may have to start at the beginning and read it through. Very good character development and your made them "real". I cared about what was happening with these people. I did find a couple of things. I hope they help you.

Notes:

he said it was it was a ways - typing fingers stuttered

Is it all right, if I bring her - no comma in this


 Comment Written 27-Oct-2011



reply by the author on 14-Nov-2011
    Thank you so much for the help and the kind review. I do appreciate it very much. Shirley
Comment by
Adri7enne
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Rating of Chapter 64 -
Charlie Looks at Property
"He wasn't kidding when he said it was IT WAS a ways back there." Remove IT WAS. You have it repeated.
That was a nice read. Clean, simple prose, written in the vernacular of someone who might have lived through it. Has a good mix of dialogue and narrative. I had a glimpse of a solid couple facing adversity together. Well done. I enjoyed it. I'll keep an eye open for more.
Good luck in the contest.



 Comment Written 27-Oct-2011



reply by the author on 14-Nov-2011
    Thank you so much for the help and the kind review. I do appreciate it very much. Shirley
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The Stranger
 
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Rating of Chapter 69 -
A Way of Life is Over
well this was certainly a family that suffered more than most, but throughout all their problems, they stuck together and that is the true value of being "a family"


 Comment Written 09-Oct-2011



reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
    Thank you Stranger for your kind remarks and the stars. I do appreciate it very much.
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TammyGail
 
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A Way of Life is Over
Wow this was a great ending to your
Story.. This chapter was well written you kept my att
throughout the read.. Thanks for sharing and for the note it was a pleasure


 Comment Written 09-Oct-2011



reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
    Thank you so much for your kind words Tammy. I do appreciate the support.
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Scornwell
 
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A Way of Life is Over
Shirley, I have enjoyed your story from beginning to end. I believe your writing is getting better too; this is the second chapter in a row where I didn't find any mistakes. I almost hate to see the story end, I will miss Charlie, Mila, and all the other Dobyns.


 Comment Written 09-Oct-2011



reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
    Thank you for continuing the journey with me. I'm going to miss the active writing also. Now it's rewrites ect.
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Linda England Bonam
 
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A Way of Life is Over
This, I think, was the only part of the story I read, but I can see that this is well written, easy to understand and follow, and must have been an interesting story all along. I intend to go back and read more of it when time permits!


 Comment Written 09-Oct-2011



reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
    Thank you so much Linda for your kind words and the stars. I hope you enjoy the read as much as I enjoyed writing it. Shirley
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Herb
 
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A Way of Life is Over
I don't know the story so can't review properly. What i can say is that i Had no trouble following your final small chapter.


 Comment Written 09-Oct-2011



reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
    Thank you Herb for the stars, I do appreciate it very much.
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Permelia
 
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A Way of Life is Over
This is ridiculous as this is the only chapter I have read. I am tired, and wanted something to read, and the title caught my eye. So what it is worth_ I loved the way you ended your book by telling where different people ended up living. I hope you get it published.


 Comment Written 08-Oct-2011



reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
    Hi Permelia, thank you so much for your review and I am glad you enjoyed the chapter and i do plan on getting it published. Thanks again. Shirley
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A Way of Life is Over
'A Way of Life is Over' is a very appropriate end to your family story. You do generations in your family a huge favor by telling Charlie's life story in such detail. Surely you have a thankful family for the work you put to it. Thanks, too, for sharing it with us, Shirley. Great job! Marie


 Comment Written 08-Oct-2011



reply by the author on 08-Oct-2011
    Thank you Marie for you very kind words. Most of my family knows nothing of it, so it will be interesting when they get to read it. Thank you for all your help and support. Shirley
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