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Billabong Valley

Native animals saved by Aboriginals

  11 total reviews 
Comment by
Nanette Mary
 
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Hullo Aussie ...

... and yes thank you, I really enjoyed this little story about the bush fires and the animals of your vast country. In appreciation for a tale well told, I happily award you the 6th star.
There is just one small change needed ...

* You have - "Kook-Kook-Kook, lauged Kristin the Kookaburra. You need to close the inverted commas after
Kook," .....

Thank you for sharing this delightful piece of writing with us.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.


 Comment Written 03-Mar-2012



reply by the author on 03-Mar-2012
    Nanette Mary, Thanks so much, I thought you would enjoy the story, especially the Koala! Blessings, K.
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Hi Aussie,
Great story, this, illustrated, along with your author's notes, would make a great school story presentation esp. in areas away from Australia like USA,GB,etc. Great read thanks!

Del


 Comment Written 02-Mar-2012



reply by the author on 02-Mar-2012
    Hi Del, Thanks for reading, glad you enjoyed the children's story. Blessings, K.
Comment by
Galactia
 
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I enjoyed this well written story, I liked how you brought the animals to life it reminded me of old blinky bill. I would of loved a happy ending or one of absolute as they are left still fighting the fire and undetermined what will actually happen to the animals, will they all live or die.

great story.
Regards
Tia


 Comment Written 02-Mar-2012



reply by the author on 02-Mar-2012
    Thanks so much for reading. I have left this open, hoping to write more about the characters. Blessings, Kace.
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adewpearl
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I've always loved the word billabong since learning Waltzing Matilda in school :-)
through the eucalyptus trees, setting them - add comma
wake up now, old man - add comma for direct address
Come down, Grandpa - add comma
Kenny had lived in this old tree for forty years, and - add comma
and sighed, "I'm too old - add that comma
Love the personification of your animal characters
Kenny wasn't worried like the rest of the animals. He - I added the period
the white folks have moved on. They lost - add period
we are alone." The twins cried - we are alone," the twins
I'm the fastest runner," Danny grinned. runner." Danny grinned - grin is not a speech tag- one doesn't grin a word, so you use a period
I'm too busy to worry about you lot. - add period
Screeched Kristin - screeched
he was a camp dog,and so he - add comma
Great use of dialogue
fascinating plot
Love the story and its characters :-) Brooke


 Comment Written 02-Mar-2012



reply by the author on 02-Mar-2012
    Boy, commaville, I need to address. Thanks Brooke, glad you liked the little story. Blessings, Kace.
Comment by
cheyennewy
 
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Hi Kace,

This is a delightful story and one I enjoyed reading. I didn't know the Eucalyptus trees would render the Koala bears drunk and also didn't know they slept 23 hours a day. I saw Koala Bears while in your country and even had my picture taken with them. They are so cute and didn't mind when I petted them. I love your characters and the way they spoke to each other. Your author's notes provide all kinds of information. I am so sorry I can't give you a six as this story deserves one ****** Well done....blessings, chey


 Comment Written 02-Mar-2012



reply by the author on 02-Mar-2012
    Chey, Thanks so much for reading, glad you enjoyed the story. Love, Kace.
Comment by
Chris Tee
 
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Wow!! Kay this is absolutely stunning work for kiddies that you have written here ma'am.. It was a pleasure to read and review this splendid work.


 Comment Written 01-Mar-2012



reply by the author on 02-Mar-2012
    Hi Chris, Glad you enjoyed the story for children. Blessings, Kace.
Comment by
Mara del Mar
 
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I loved the story. I'M sure to young  they liked, and also to the childrens. The animals are very atractives for they, specially the of this  narration. The koalas are wonderfully beautiful, congrats.


 Comment Written 01-Mar-2012



reply by the author on 02-Mar-2012
    Mara, Thanks so much for reading, glad you liked the story. Blessings, K.
Comment by
patsypats
 
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Cute little story, Had me in suspense to whether they were going to get out before the fire came. Imagery was good by your use of descriptive words.


 Comment Written 01-Mar-2012



reply by the author on 02-Mar-2012
    Thanks so much for reading, glad you liked the story. Blessings, K.
Comment by
debskatz
 
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Hi Aussie,

Truly enjoyed this story! It was well-written with no spag that I could see. Children would really like this story.

Thanks so much for sharing it and the educational info with us!

smiles,

deb


 Comment Written 01-Mar-2012



reply by the author on 02-Mar-2012
    Hi Deb, Thanks so much for reading, glad you enjoyed the story. Blessings, K.
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ajdevore
 
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I don't know anything about writing for youngsters, but I enjoyed it. A lot. It should be heavily illustrated with drawing of all the wonderful animal characters doing their thing. I don't know, but maybe the paragraph about the tribes gathering could be expanded, more detail. When I was a teen ager, many many many years ago in New Mexico, I had a short wave radio and listening to Radio Australia struck me as the most exotic thing in the world. It was many months before I found out that the signature sound was not an hysterical human, but a Kookaburra, so you really struck a responsive chord in me. Thanks again!

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 Comment Written 01-Mar-2012



reply by the author on 02-Mar-2012
    ajdevore, Thanks so much for reading, glad you enjoyed the story. Kookaburra's really do laugh! Blessings, K.
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