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Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "The Howling"

A collection of short tales of the supernatural

  84 total reviews 
Comment by
snemes
 
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This is a creepy story with a great twist ending. You did an excellent job of building suspense. I really thought she was a goner. I like how you sprinkled her thoughts in among the descriptions of the action. Your writing is polished. I enjoyed this story, as I like scary stories as long as they aren't too scary.


 Comment Written 05-Sep-2012



reply by the author on 05-Sep-2012
    Glad you liked it. It was just a little piece I wrote for a contest. Thanks for reviewing.
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Hi there,

I really wanted to give a six for this, but since it is old and I'm saving my sixes, I decided that you'd understand. I'm really just reading for motivation and energy. Reading your pieces does that for me. I've been reviewing all day and need some inspiration! You're it! :)

as the rain ravaged the delicate marigolds in her new flowerbed.==oh, the memories of losing my beauties to storms...

She laughed at the fearless six-pound ball of fluff's readiness to defend her==Love the image!

Christine kept one hand on the wall and slid along until she came to the bedroom. Relief eased the tightness in her belly, and she ran to the familiar territory of her bed. She barked her shins on a forgotten footstool and went tumbling against the bedpost. For a second, she clung there, grimacing in pain.===! Oh how many times I've done this!

"Come closer, you son-of-a-bitch! I've got two knitting needles and coincidentally you've got two eyes."===HaHaHa.Cool!

Thanks for a great story with no SPAG...lol


 Comment Written 28-Aug-2012



reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
    Glad you liked it. Unfortunately, didn't do well in the contest, but that never worries me. I once sold the story of how I met my husband for $100 after it, too, didn't do well in a contest.

    I appreciate you reviewing for the meager sum of two cents.

reply by jjstar on 28-Aug-2012
    Like I said, I really just needed some inspiration after editing some very difficult material this afternoon. There is nothing better than a good read that needs no editing. Just needed some good writing! Also, Gayle needs to write more quickly. I just finished her Fear on the Bayou. I can't edit any more tonight...just wanted to read a good little story. Contest shmontest...hahaha

reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
    Gayle was gone for a week, visiting the coast, looking at the ocean. She told me she came back to a ton reviews to answer.

    I have a werewolf story in the portfolio besides this one. What the heck did I call it?? It's been a few years. The Lord of something? I'll get back to you.

reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
    Oh yes, it's called The Laird of Castle Dun, on page 3 of the portfolio, I think. It's about a werewolf in Scotland who advertises to share his castle and the person who comes to share it. Of course, I found out there'd been no wolves in Scotland for 200 years, so if I ever expand it, I'll have to import them from Russia! I wrote it for a contest, and I think it won.
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Sharrum
 
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Wow...this story had me gripped from beginning to end. I thoroughly enjoyed it. So well-written. I barely took a breath while reading it...LOL. Excellent throughout. I am going to save it to remind me of how to grip an audience.

I was feeling a bit down from some of the reviews I received on my nonfiction story I posted the other day. I thought I would look at some of your work again to get inspired. So thank you for doing just that. I am inspired again!


 Comment Written 19-Aug-2012



reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
    Thanks for that sixer too! It's music to my hears when I hear "I barely took a beath while reading it".

    Don't let the reviewers get you down. A lot of them didn't like this one either. Just write and strive to improve, as you're doing.
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The beginning of this story is intriguing. The setup is clearly eerie and the reader gets the sense of Chris being alone. However, the ending was a little strange, and kind of threw me. I would work on making the ending a little more cohesive and make an earlier reference to the werewolves. Overall though I like the way you made my goosebumps rise!


 Comment Written 02-Aug-2012



reply by the author on 02-Aug-2012
    Thanks for liking it and for reviewing. It was just something I whipped up for a contest.
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Awesome.
When you said "It's my cousin." I thought WTF?
then... you got me!

The beginning line though... is it your intention to be totally cliche? Please say it is. It must be. The rest of the writing was too good for it to be an oversight.
"It was a dark and stormy night. "
My first thought was "really, I can't read more" But I did anyway. And I'm glad.


 Comment Written 29-Jul-2012



reply by the author on 29-Jul-2012
    It was a This Sentence Starts the Story contest, so I had no choice about that opening. Glad you liked it, Cozy, and thanks for reviewing.
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You did very well setting the scene with the dark stormy night in the home. The dialog was good and you keep me wondering what would happen next.

However, I felt let down when the beast didn't put up a fight. There seemed no reason to shot it, other than Steves word for it that it was dangerous. Maybe give us a clue early on, about the evil in his cousin.

You did have a full story, with plot, climax, and ending!

Blessings! LaVonne



 Comment Written 18-Jul-2012



reply by the author on 19-Jul-2012
    Thanks for reading, LaVonne.
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This was a wonderful writ ad would have been glad to read it for two cents. I loved the beginning. The ominous tone that something unusual was about to happen. Very clean and uncluttered writing. The only simile that didn't work for me was the coffee turning into a slab of ice, unless it was iced coffee. Wonderful. Good luck in the contest. Reads like a strong contender.


 Comment Written 18-Jul-2012



reply by the author on 19-Jul-2012
    thanks for reading, forest.
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Good story and well written. Fun to read, with rising tension and a good, well-rounded ending. I guess it's still possible to tell a "dark and stormy night" story. Good luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 18-Jul-2012



reply by the author on 19-Jul-2012
    Hi and thanks for reading. I love doing these dark and stormy night things, although one reviewer told me that should be my 2nd paragraph. Why don't they read the contest rules?

    Well, contest over and I did poorly, so I can tell you who I am.

    nor84
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Well, I'm quite sure I got the real story here but none the less it was a gripping horror story. And it has a very peculiar ending, possibly the author might "flesh" out the cousin a little and make this story more interesting than it already is.


 Comment Written 18-Jul-2012



reply by the author on 19-Jul-2012
    thanks for reading, Val. I appreciate it.
Comment by
Donya Quijote
 
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Wow! Intense. This is a very well written werewolf tale in the timeless tradition, almost, of one the original werewolf tales from France, Bisclavet. The werewolves are just like people, good and bad. But, what a way to find out the you have married a werewolf! Very nice twist at the end. Nice choice in vocabulary. I liked the use of barked and even looked it up to make sure it meant what I thought it meant based on context. I love words that make you think and improve my vocabulary... Transitions between paragraphs and dialogue are smooth and seamless. I also liked the use of a word bleated although at first I thought of sheep and then realized that other animals bleat too and it (bleat) has other meanings too. This was a fantastic tale, and an enjoyable read. I couldn't stop reading it, and I do mostly avoid werewolf, vampire, and zombie tales as they are little more than a feast of gore and mayhem, the same old, tired, worn tale of yuck. This was different and I give the author praise for originality. Love it. Now if we can get vampires to stop having babies and sparkling, maybe then I'll get back into the genre. Thanks for sharing this absolutely engaging tale...


 Comment Written 18-Jul-2012



reply by the author on 19-Jul-2012
    You are just about the only person to recognize "barked her shins." Thanks for the sixer, too. the contest's over, so I can tell you who I am.

    nor 84

    Norma

reply by Donya Quijote on 19-Jul-2012
    Well, I did have to look both bleated and barked up to confirm their contextual meanings. I thought it deserved and earned a sixer. I don't give too many of those out. Sure wish I could keep the ones I don't use every week. I'd have a pile... As I said before, this was a very well written tale and a pleasure to read. Is it a part of a larger work? I know you have said before that you like these occult tales and characters. I used to until just very recently...

reply by the author on 19-Jul-2012
    No, this one's just for the contest. I do like them, but mostly the paranormal romance ones.

reply by Donya Quijote on 21-Jul-2012
    Are you a Twilight fan?

reply by the author on 21-Jul-2012
    Not really into that one BUT True Blood -- Yeah!And I've always liked vampire tales. By the way, if you write them, there's a site contest coming up in October that I recommended to the site. The winner takes home $100 REAL dollars. If interested, look under contests and at October. There's a definite plot, having to do with a new neighbor in 'your' apartmenthouse that MAY be a vampire. What do you do? What happens?

reply by Donya Quijote on 21-Jul-2012
    I read about the contest. I have a tale in the works but I can't entered it in the contest even if it's ready by then. I just can't get it comply with the rules... And it's still stuck in my head and refuses to come out. I have to fight with my muse, but since joining this site, however, it gotten easier but I still don't have control... But I will keep the contest in mind if something else should break. Is True Blood a novel series or a TV series on cable? I liked the Ann Rice series. Not fond of Twilight...

reply by the author on 21-Jul-2012
    true blood is a TV series based on a huge set of novels by Charlaine Harris.True blood is the title of the TV series (HBO Sun nite) and I think the first book came out some years ago. Just look up Charlaine Harris on Amazon, and there should be a way to find the first book in the series. They all have 'dead' in the title. The premise is that the Japanese have invented synthetic blood, and vampires are seeking to live among humans. They have their own nightclub (Fangtasia!). It's about a girl with the ability to read minds, a waitress named Sookie Stackhouse. You'd probably like the books. The TV series follows pretty closely, but sometimes takes off on its own.

reply by the author on 21-Jul-2012
    Twilight's too young.

reply by Donya Quijote on 21-Jul-2012
    I'll have to read the novels, can't afford cable right now... thanks I will look for the novels when I get some more funds and the budget fairies are kinder. Sad thing is I won't be able to be a generous with my students this year with some of the things I do in my classes. But I will look for the books....

reply by the author on 21-Jul-2012
    Try eBay for them. Might be able to get most of the set from somebody cheap.
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