This is a moving piece of poetry, with a powerfully somber mood. There is respect and gratitude. That's clear. Along with a deep appreciation of efforts. All of this done with a terrific rhyme scheme.
Nicely done, my friend.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
Thank Edward for your heart felt review. With regard to your video message, first I know well the toilet seat situation, I have four daughters, second, I would add an ending thank you Lord for all my blessings.
Yours in God,
It's a fine sonnet well done and the feelings deep and honest. Only children's poem have to match meter and rhyme perfectly adult poetry allows for literary conceit sometimes as long as it's kept to a minimum. It would have been alright to have used "Bravely". A fitting tribute.
I enjoyed this dedication to medical staff, who unfortunately are often taken for granted. You show an appreciation for the valiant effort, even if the result was not what you wanted. The imagery of grass on the grave creates emotion and empathy.