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The Crown of Heroic Sonnets 3 contest entry

  50 total reviews 
Comment by
watergirl
 
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Oh how succinct you are. So much to the point, well how did you know I thought privately so? Very well done, how we are all so easily trained. Or led. Or polite. The best conformers ever there was. Thankyou for an insightful piece.
I thought it was great.


 Comment Written 19-Jun-2013



reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013
    Thank you so much for the kind review, Watergirl. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars. Welcome to the site. I'm glad you liked the piece.

    =]

    Ron
Comment by
cturner1103
 
 
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level
This is an exceptionally well written piece that could be read over and over again by me..I really enjoyed reading this. You just made me understand why i write..to one day express myself in words like you done so easily..great job


 Comment Written 27-May-2013



reply by the author on 27-May-2013
    Hey, cturner, hello. Welcome to the site. Thank you for the great review and gracious sixer. The words seem like they came out easily but they took many many hours of work to turn out like that, lol. This was really just a contest entry where I decided to bitch about some of the crap that flies on this site, haha. Even when I'm complaining, I try to do it poetically. I've been on this site nearly 6 years now and still have fun in the contests. If you ever have a question about anything just ask, I'll do my best to help. You're welcome to check out my portfolio if you want. If you liked this one I'm sure you'll find other stuff you like. I really appreciate the generous rating, friend. I'm humbled. Again, welcome to the site. You ever have any problems or questions just give me a shout. Have a good one.

    Ron
Comment by
wade coaltrain
 
 
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It is irony at its best that this poem is so highly recognized since it is really about a 4 star entry. the very thing that it is about has happened. if rhyming well were the sole criteria then a six would be due, but beyond that it just a rant. it is good and enjoyable and the again the irony is amazing. I AM REVISING MY RATING TO 5 STARS.


 Comment Written 23-Mar-2013



reply by the author on 23-Mar-2013
    I'll be sure to go out of my way to give you a four on one of your sixers someday. Yeah, it's a rant but a lot of work went into it. That's why it has the rating and rank it has. Thanks though, I'll keep it in mind.

reply by wade coaltrain on 24-Mar-2013
    EASY...I SAID IT WAS GOOD. MY REAL OBJECTION TO THE SIX STARS I GUESS IS THE SUBJECT CONTENT. THE QUESTION I HAVE IS.."IS A TRIVIAL MATTER SUCH AS POETRY RATING WORTH THE AMOUNT OF WORK THAT WENT INTO WRITTING THIS, OR, IS IT EVEN A SUBJECT TO BE MUSED WITH POETRY. YA KNOW? IM ONLY BEING HONEST AND THAT IS WHAT WE ARE HERE FOR. IT IS CLEVER BUT CLEVER COULD HAVE BEEN BETTER SERVED WITH A SHORT "THWICK" WITH AN ALMOST CYNICAL TONE. DO YOU KNOW WHAT I MEAN? I DONT MEAN TO BE OVERLY CRITICAL AND IN THE WORK I DEFINATELY RECOGNIZE YOUR TALENT, I JUST FEEL THAT IN LIEU OF WHAT I HAVE POINTED OUT I DONT FULLY AGREE WITH THE RATING. IT THINK THAT MY DISAGREEMENT SPEAKS WELL TO RESPOND TO YOUR "RANT" VERY SPECIFICALLY. IT'S ALL VERY INTERESTING AND AGAIN "IRONIC". IM SORRY I HAVE TO DISAGREE WITH THE LARGER PORTION OF FOLKS. LET THEIR VOICE BE YOUR COMFORT. FORGET MINE...IT DOESN'T MUCH MATTER.
Comment by
K.W.
 
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How can it be that I don't have a six for this masterfully wrought epic?!? I'm amazed and awed by your craftsmanship. You wield a powerful pen and have a wonderful pride. I stayed with this long piece ( I usually don't because I've had enough after the first stanza or two) because I could not pull away. I'm new to the site and have quickly figured out at least part of the game. I appreciate the content of your work as much as I appreciate the voice contained within. Your meter is outstanding, your rhyme is impeccable, your language choices are precise and filled with a graceful intent. I don't know what else to say except thank you for sharing your talent. all of my very best, k


 Comment Written 19-Feb-2013



reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
    Thank you so very much for the excellent review and big six offer, K. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and kind words. First off, let me say hello and welcome to the site. Despite my rant I still love the site though. Been on here 5 years and have learned a lot. You are more than welcome to check out some of my stuff in my portfolio if interested. I have a wide variety of writes. Thank you again for the great review, K. I'm humbled. Have a great day. /Ron

reply by K.W. on 19-Feb-2013
    The pleasure is mine:) I thank you for your offer and for your welcome. you do the same:)
    very best, k

reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
    I surely will.

reply by K.W. on 19-Feb-2013
    glad I am to hear it!
Comment by
Mark Brucato
 
 
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level
This poem is perfect to me. Crafty intelligent ,beautiful love it. Perception is something I have been pondering.I love how you expressed how they will put stars then comment. So true. Screw grammar Raw is what I like but perception is thrown off when the grammar is off. I have a high school education.people are so Hypocritical. Here is something I just wrote:

Isn't crazy how the people who seem to make the most sense are the most hypercritical.Why?Is is to sway people.To keep em on there toes shall we say.Is The strength of it in the fact that being undecided is such a human trait that everyone can relate?Or is it that when people need help or hope they will follow anyone.Even if there views were totally different to begin with.Most people with there backs against the walls will follow anyone who gives them hope.Thats what makes artist what they are the fact that they express themselves no mater with the hypocritical majority thinks.Artist are becoming a minority.


 Comment Written 19-Feb-2013



reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
    Hey Mark, hi. Thank you, my friend, for the excellent review and big sixer. "Artists are becoming a minority" Brother, ain't that the truth? I tire of reading the same old crap every day on here. Open up your mind, people. Use at least a portion of that brain God gave you. Lol. I greatly appreciate the generous stars, Mark. I'm humbled. I'm glad you liked my lengthy rant. Thank you again. Even though I bitch sometimes, I still love the site. Been on here 5 years and have learned a lot. You're welcome to glance through my portfolio if interested. Glad to see someone with a brain and opinion had joined. Welcome aboard, M. Have a good one. /Ron

reply by Mark Brucato on 21-Feb-2013
    Follow back if you don't mind. I have some stuff I think you'll enjoy. I'm a huge fan of you're work. It is excellent.
Comment by
jgemini
 
 
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level
Well, I missed this gem back when, but I had to check out the number one poem, so I'm here, now. You've said it all, except for the words: "VANITY, thy name is fan Story."

I have no better venue at this point. How about you? I'm still trying to figure out what to do. I find I enjoy doing reviews more all the time. I'll probably just keep playing around here, without paying for recognition. It rings rather hollow when it's been purchased. And when looking at some of the highest ranked, and finding... well, you know. I have to admit I've had a lot of fun here, and I'm writing much more, though not submitting. You wrote a masterful work of truth. So if truth is beauty and beauty is truth, you've nailed it all. It needs no critique from me. Congratulations! -Jgemini :)


 Comment Written 17-Feb-2013



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
    Hey Jgemini, hello. Thank you so much for the excellent review and the big sixer. Might I ask how in the world you found this piece? It was posted 4 months ago. I don't really remember when the contest was but it was a while back as well. I see other people reading it but I don't know how they're being able to do that besides going through my portfolio. Is that how you found it? This has always baffled me. So please, if you would, send me a reply or PM letting me know you read this.

    I dearly appreciate the gracious stars. I'm humbled. I'm glad you liked this silly thing. I've been on this site for 5 years and I have learned a lot from it. It's great fore sharing and all that but what I said in this piece is, from experience, fact.
    But even though, I still love it and have had a great time on here. I just have to bitch once in a while, lol. I see you're fairly new, so welcome to the site. I hope you also end up liking it as much. If you ever have any questions, I'll do my best to help.

    Oh, and I see you live in Florida. I live in Tampa. What's not to love, lol. Have a great night, J. Get back with me on how you found this if you would. Thanks again, Jgemini. ;) /Ron

reply by jgemini on 18-Feb-2013
    Hey, Ron! :) Thanks for your quick response. I found this by clicking a "BEST POEMS" button. Hmmm... where was that. Over in the left column, er, uh. I'll see if I can locate it and get back to you.

    We're in Cape Coral, FL, and it's marvelous here. We used to have a place in St Pete.

    I plan to stay with Fan Story, but your poem certainly clanged some clappers for me. But, as you say, it's a lot of fun. Many people here are terrific, and there are some top-notch writers.

    You're very welcome for the 6 stars. I don't give them lightly, only to the truly deserving. Your poem certainly qualifies. It's ranked number one for good reason.

    Great to meet you. Thanks for your offer of help. I may take you up on it. I'm still feeling my way along. Meanwhile, be well & happy! -Jan :)

reply by jgemini on 18-Feb-2013
    Ron, look under "READ" in the purple bar at the top of the page. You'll see "Stand Out Writing," and under that click Best poems. Then look down through the buttons on the left side of the page and you'll find Top Poems (or some such thing). Yours is number one! Must have rung a lot of bell, eh? -Jan:)

reply by the author on 18-Feb-2013
    Hey Jan, hi. For some goofy reason, under "Stand out Writing" there is only "Recognized, All time best and Seal of Quality." I don't have a "Best Poems" option. That's messed up. I have to get with the site owner to see what's up with that. Or maybe I'm just doing something wrong. If you liked this piece I'm sure you'd find other stuff you'd like in my portfolio if interested. I have a wide variety of crap. Lol. Have a great day, J. /Ron

reply by jgemini on 18-Feb-2013
    Hi, Ron! :)
    Hit the "All Time Best" then look over on the left side, go down to "Recommended" (in purple barred square)and find BEST POEMS under it. CLICK! Yours is number ONE!

    I will check out your other work as soon as I get a chance to spend some time. I have travel and company crowding me for a few weeks hence. But I'm sure I'll find a kindren spirit in your stuff. Be well! -J :)

reply by the author on 18-Feb-2013
    Very cool. Lol. Love it. I can't believe that a poem belittling so many things on this site is what's actually the top poem. Hahaha. Thank you for your help, Jan. Made my day. Hope all goes well with the company and traveling. Nice to meet you. Be safe. /Ron

reply by jgemini on 18-Feb-2013
    Shucks, Ron, it's nothin' at all. My pleasure, entirely. Yes, I find it very fitting that your revealing verses struck gold here with the fans. Truth! It's really just that simple, isn't it? Be well. -Jan :)

reply by the author on 18-Feb-2013
    ;)
Comment by
Lylise
 
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Wow. Phenomenal. You are extraordinary. Loved the rant. Perfect form. Really good, dear. Lynda

We can talk about this. Really, really superb.


 Comment Written 08-Feb-2013



reply by the author on 08-Feb-2013
    Thank you, Lynda. Yeah, Had be sure you read this one, lol. Just got home. Only here long enough to post something and take off again. Things to do, places to go, money to spend, lol. I'll gab with you later, L. ;) /Ron
Comment by
isurp
 
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Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level
Amazing! I've only been a member on this site for two days but I already have felt some confusion as to ratings and contest voting. Clearly some of the gushing and raving received by reviewers doesn't translate to the voting booth.

I love the line: 'But storm and worm will clearly never rhyme.' As a reviewer I was called pathetic for questioning the rhyming of 'difficult' and 'fickle' but I'm starting to grasp how devastating a 4 star rating can be to someone. My bad.

Thank you for having the courage to share this poem and for inspiring me to expand my own writing past the Jack and Jill stage. Write on!
- Steve


 Comment Written 21-Jan-2013



reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
    If someone lashed out at me because I said difficult and fickle didn't rhyme. I'd have to instruct them that they needed to go back to first grade to figure it out, lol. Thank you for the excellent review and gracious sixer, Steve. Let me one of the first welcome you to the site. I've been on here for 5 and a half years now and love it. I've learned a lot of stuff from this site. I hope you enjoy it as much as do. I mostly just join the contests on here. That's how I got better. Yeah, the going rate for stars on here is usually a five. If you give someone a 4 be sure to have a valid reason before you hit 'save.'. If I find something wrong in a piece I still give 'em a 5 but tell them where it need corrected. Again, welcome to the site. If you ever have any questions feel free to ask and I'll help the best I can. I really appreciate the generous stars, S. I'm humbled. I'm glad you liked the piece. Have a good one. /Ron
Comment by
el twelve
 
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Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level
well, well that was absolutely brilliantly written, definitely kept my attention and if truth be told, was true, you hit the nail on the head. thanks for sharing


 Comment Written 31-Dec-2012



reply by the author on 31-Dec-2012
    Thank you so much for the excellent review and the big sixer, El 12. I couldn't resist, lol. When the contest came up this was the first thing that popped in my head and I just went with it. I'm sure it rubbed some folks the wrong way, but hey, the truth hurts sometimes. I really appreciate the generous stars, friend. I'm humbled. I'm glad you liked the piece. Thank you again. /Ron
Comment by
Jane Johnson
 
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Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level
Very nicely written and so much truth in what you say. The artwork you chose complimented your work nicely and the words and rhyme were also very good. Thank you for sharing such a long and worthy piece.


 Comment Written 30-Dec-2012



reply by the author on 31-Dec-2012
    Thank you so much for the kind review and big sixer, Jane. When the contest came up this silly idea popped in my head so I just ran with it, lol. I really appreciate the gracious rating. I'm humbled. I'm glad you liked the piece. Thank you again. /Ron
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