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Updated with a few new stanzas

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This poem reads like an interesting journey, full of images and experiences, I enjoyed the Frost references, and the different images relating to some of his works, but the work of yours is a creative effort that brings life to your own personal perceptions, an interesting and enjoyable read.


 Comment Written 08-Dec-2013


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Eight good stanzas in unusual abba rhyme. Very well written. I particularly like stanza five and am impressed that this is one of your first attempts at writing. Regards Dorothy


 Comment Written 08-Dec-2013


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The picture speaks a multitude of words. Looking as if a thousand years have passed. But what with it? The race who built the road? Not completely understanding, but has good rhythm and rhyming. Miss Sally


 Comment Written 08-Dec-2013


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I can recognize your erudition but I find your piece hard to fathom. Have we lost touch with our past, our inheritance? Is your piece a form of wasteland? What is your woe? Are we left as wanderers across the face of the earth? Your verses pose riddles to my mind. Who is the earth's custodian. I recognize Frost's dilemma and the path he chose which might have signaled freedom. The path that time remands is intriguing. Modern man is devoid of his past. This might be a freedom in itself. Humanity is left with his greatest strength; his awareness. Is not our present reality, the only reality? I find your final verse intriguing. We still have choices. Our poet has some fine images. Forgive me if I cannot fathom your abstracts.
-Ekim777


 Comment Written 08-Dec-2013


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vow!
nice poem.
you are a very good poet with social integrity.
And passersby the path behold
All well know the path was sold
To the late, the dead and cold
The air once free, sloth cajoled
i love these lines.


 Comment Written 08-Dec-2013


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Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
 
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In your poem I see that It's easy to drift along, not caring to do our bit, not taking care of the chores we perform but just getting the job done the easiest way. Sadly, in the end, the past catches up when realisation dawns that the strong foundations were not taken care of..how to get the message across so that it sinks in, I wonder. Giddy


 Comment Written 08-Dec-2013


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A thousand years pass as days, the Earth's custodian never there, In the end they will not find the elusive Eden of their kind. I enjoyed your poem from start to finish. I think it is the first of your work I have seen. Well done, Carolyn


 Comment Written 08-Dec-2013


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wanderlost,

This poem made for an enjoyable read. Very well reflected thoughts and expressions. Telling things very plain and comprehensible. Informative and enlightening.


It's a very clean piece. I saw no typos or SPAG.

I look forward to seeing you again.

Love you,

Oatmeal


 Comment Written 07-Dec-2013


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This is a nice poem by the author about mankind's path, written in the quatrain style with good rhythm and rhyming throughout the poem.


 Comment Written 07-Dec-2013


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I feel a thread of disappointment and resignation weaving through this,
as if to say "your bright and shiny dreams have been ground with the grain,
and all that's left is the grist"
But intertwined I find hints that hope once existed. But the path
to Frost's promised Land has been bartered for ease and sheepish
convenience - now the road to freedom lies buried in rubble.

Tough poem to clarify . . . but well worth reading :-)


 Comment Written 07-Dec-2013


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