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Updated with a few new stanzas

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wow! this is a great poem. I like the message sent in this poem. If this is your first writing, I image what your works look like now through improvement.


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    Thank you so much for your kind remarks!
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A wonderful work done with fine flow of thoughts and deep philosophical strings. I specially like the mono-rhyming scheme you employed to achieve this.

ola thomas


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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2012
    thank you very much for your great review and kind words!
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I enjoyed these apocalyptic nicely structured quatrains. They're very sophisticated for a beginner and contain some nice lines. You must be a reader and I notice the references to both Shakespeare and Frost. Good work. cvc


 Comment Written 23-Nov-2012



reply by the author on 23-Nov-2012
    thank you very much for your excellent review!
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So do all people feel this awful sense of resignation as they get older? I wonder if bitterness comes with the territory. I certainly hope not. How old were you when you wrote this piece? Certainly is thought-provoking!


 Comment Written 23-Nov-2012



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    You're gonna hate me for this, but i wrote it just two weeks ago, and I'm only 18 years old.
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i can't believe this is one of your first poems! you are a natural talent. it took me a year to come to my level..
thank you for sharing!

rebekka x


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    Thank you very much rebekka for your kind comments!
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This is a very impressive poem, especially considering you said it was the first one you wrote. I like how you have drawn on the idea of the road less traveled. I think my favorite part of this poem, though, has to be the first stanza - what an opening! Very strong imagery evoked throughout.


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    Thank you so much for the great rating and comments!

reply by Ideasaregems-Dawn on 23-Nov-2012
    You are very welcome.
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This is a beautifully constructed poem. It possesses great imagery, keep on writing . It is rhymed very well with a wide variety of words. Not only did it rhyme but It flowed very well with no abrupt pauses. Good metaphors about life within it. Brilliant!


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    Thank you so much for the great review and kind comments!
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So moved and impressed with how you took the idea of the road less traveled and took me on an incredible journey of imagination. "Faces showing muted fear, they know their end is near." Apocalyptic.


 Comment Written 22-Nov-2012



reply by the author on 23-Nov-2012
    Thank you tremendously for the exceptional rating and kind words. I'm speechless to see how well my work has been received!!
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A thousand years past by like days,an extended echo desert days. the picture goes well with the poem. The flow is good. Nicely done. Deorre


 Comment Written 22-Nov-2012



reply by the author on 23-Nov-2012
    Thank you so much deorre for the kind rating and comments!
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Wow, it's an eponymous poem. There's real power and vision here.

A thousand years pass by like days
An extended echo, desert haze
And ne'er in all of Shakespeare's plays
Did this woe impede the way << Nice opening gambit.

The road less taken's often bare
The Earth's custodian never there
To fix the tears from lack of care
And reknit the stitches wear << Interesting use of a derivative opening line. This well said and quite poetic.

With wanderlust a few now stand
Scouring mountains, turning sand
In search of Frost's forgotten land
The path that time remands << I really like this. In has many meanings. People get old and travel, trying to find youth in them selves and the land, which has aged through human traffic and abuse.

They stop pursuits with hearts austere
They know their state to be severe
Faces showing muted fear
They know their end is near << Yes, elephant graveyards, like in Hemit Ca, or Sedona Arizona. Depressing. Great stuff.

So off they go with intrepid pride
Past multitudes of empty eyes
A barren land of resigning sighs
Those of the path must leave or die. << Yeah, it's like there's rally no choice. You get old, people stop acknowledging you. What's left but to take off and find some identification with nature, a more nourishing, if not infinite, source of solace.

I like both the form and content tremendously. Got to give it a six. Cheers, JS


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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2012
    Thank you so so much for the great review and exceptional rating. Your comments are incredibly insightful and very very helpful!!
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