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Updated with a few new stanzas

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Tina McKala
 
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mainly the end was very strong. the visions and pictures were well built up throughout the poem. very good job. strong words choices and very creative expressions (loved multitudes of empty eyes, resigning sighs)


 Comment Written 07-Dec-2013


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Righteous Riter
 
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Good complimentary photo. Good end rhyming. Good alliteration with extended/echo...woe/way...fix/from...passersby/path...with/wanderlust...scouring/sand...frost's/forgotten...elusive/Eden...state/severe...faces/fear...empty/eyes. Good clear message that holds my attention from start to finish.


 Comment Written 07-Dec-2013


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Difficult to believe this is one of your first endeavors. The meter and rhyme tell a different story. Based on the meter's irregularity, the use of archaic language, and contractions, I'm guessing you hadn't been studying or practicing meter or language long though.

I don't know when this was written but the narrator is definitely aware of the worlds present and precarious situation. A prophetic write, shades of revelation see our plight, the problems we've created, and face, as irreversible, and hopeless. Not exactly biblical, but sees the end of mankind as personal choice, I guess. Repent or perish. Not bad and makes for an interesting read. Kenny


 Comment Written 07-Dec-2013


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My God you are poetic genius. Your poem is disposed to exercise or flaunt tutorial of purity and a way to override any protestation or another words you're just simply masterful. And if you don't know by now I'm telling you. Your rhythm just needs a tad bitter work but otherwise it flowed quite well. The couplet rhyming quatrains were done so well that the rhymes were neither forced, labored or strained. You have a good one and God bless.
AK


 Comment Written 07-Dec-2013


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Once thought to be a noble race
And copious, with perfect grace
Passing years have hid their face
Conformity now giving chase

Not sure what this awesome poem is based on, many interpretations can be had. But, is not that the beauty of words of poetry, they are tools to touch hearts no matter where they are or what situation they may face. Well done.


 Comment Written 07-Dec-2013


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Mastery
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Hello, wanderlost. (different name for sure) Nice. I liked your poem and in particular these lines:

"With wanderlust a few now stand
Scouring mountains, turning sand
In search of Frost's forgotten land
The path that time remands"

Bob (Mastery)


 Comment Written 06-Dec-2013


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victor 66
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I thought the poem had good rhythm and flowed smoothly. It seemed very clearly expressed. I enjoyed it and I didn't expect to find any technical discrepancies. Thank you for sharing your poem.


 Comment Written 06-Dec-2013


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Empty eyes too often do conformity create. This poem serves as an important warning of that. It is also very well written. Yes, it is time to leave the path of conformity and complacency.


 Comment Written 06-Dec-2013


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ELumpkins
 
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Very good piece, It is structured to make it easy to read. I enjoyed reading it while I was thinking about the road less taken.. Good thought. A good reminder to folks they better know which road to take. Good job


 Comment Written 06-Dec-2013


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Alena Smith
 
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"Once thought to be a noble race
And copious, with perfect grace
Passing years have hid their face
Conformity now giving chase"

what a beautiful work filled with such great descriptions, made a great effect on the theme, plus the picture fit the poem beautifully.
great work


 Comment Written 06-Dec-2013


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