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An Unlikely Tale


How Women's Lib Got Started

  20 total reviews 
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MsPetra
 
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That was funny. You have a very active imagination to say the least.
I liked everything about your prose. You put Adam and Eve in the real world with real problems.
I wouldn't change a thing.
Please keep writing. I will be looking forward to other offerings from you.


 Comment Written 10-Jul-2015



reply by the author on 11-Jul-2015
    What a surprise that this old posting is being read. Thank you so much for your kind words. Lou
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joann r romei
 
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This is very funny, I love the way you took this traditional myth and made it into a modern war of the sexes, no errors noted, fun read.


 Comment Written 01-Mar-2015



reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
    Thank you, Joann. How nice of you to dig this up and send me your comments. Hugs, Lou
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Muffins
 
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Powerful why to start the world. Eve is the boss here and the little nudge from the future was humorous and smart. Enjoyed reading this.


 Comment Written 08-Apr-2014



reply by the author on 09-Apr-2014
    Thank you so much for digging this one up. Hugs, Lou
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A fun humorous read. One sentence captured the essence of the story, "stop trying to change yourself." Great! Eve-Sylvia grew as a character throughout the story, and in the end came out triumphant.

Minor criticism, the wording, "they did it," used several times during the story. Your writing is sharp and witty, and for that reason, this phrase lay flat. As a reader, I wanted a stronger expression to describe their love making.

Your characters were well crafted and fun. An Unlikely Tale is fun and engaging. You have a wonderful sense of humor and insight that shine through in your writing. Thank you for sharing your story. Great job!


 Comment Written 01-Jun-2013



reply by the author on 01-Jun-2013
    Thank you, Rosalyne. How did you happen to find this old posting? You seem to be a really astute reader and I appreciate your helpful comments. I probably won't bother with making changes because 1)Not planning on trying to publish this 2)Not writing fiction anymore. I'm into humorous poems now. At any hoot, again I thank you for a marvelous critique. Lou
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Fluffyhead
 
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lols this is hilarious and well written and all about boobs.the grapefruit comment is especially funny. Peace and happy day.


 Comment Written 29-Jan-2013



reply by the author on 01-Mar-2013
    Thanks again.
Comment by
ZBaron
 
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This is really great. Your style is right up my alley, as well as your humor, which comes across wonderfully in this short work. This was nice and refreshing, providing some great images while keeping it flowing for the reader. And the pacing is perfect. You dedicate the right amount of time and space to each part of this story. Really, one of my favorite reads so far. ZB


 Comment Written 28-Jan-2013



reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
    Thank you so much.
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J. Dark
 
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I must confess to reading this one quite late last night and then not being able to sleep for a while for laughing! It is raucously funny and I can easily imagine it as a brilliant TV comedy sketch.

I have no idea who Gloria Steinem is, but your wonderful description as she introduced herself made it clear she is the American version of our British Gok Wan, This not only made it marvellously funny to read but adds international appeal as you don't have to be local to be "in" on the joke.

I really liked the fact that you are conveying a very good and important message here through fabulous humour. It works extremely well and I find the whole work a clever and laugh-out-loud funny concept.

I'm sorry I am out of six stars but I have a feeling I am going to need quite a few of them following your work.

Bravo - it is refreshing to read a humourous piece that is so genuinely funny and I certainly did not spot any spag to be corrected.

Kindest of regards,

Julie :-)


 Comment Written 11-Jan-2013



reply by the author on 11-Jan-2013
    Hey, Julie,

    I think this is the beginning of a wonderful relationship. Not only are you a good writer, you appreciate my bold and offbeat humor.

    Gloria Steinem started a publication called Ms. Magazine and was very active in the women's rights movement back in the 70's. Are you sure Gok Wan is British? Me thinks that sounds more Asian, lol.

    I thank you most sincerely for taking the time to read this and send me such wonderful compliments. Don't ever worry about the stars. When a reader enjoys my humor, it is very rewarding.

    Hugs,
    Lou
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What a tittie-slinger torcher this was! The attitude in this reminds me of a good book I know! Haha...so anyway, your story: LMAO...sooooooooooooooooooooooooooo well written and I laughed many times. From the start of the piece I could tell it was going to be brilliant. You explained away that initial mistake God made with the Rock of Gibraltar but he fixed it quick smart with the appearance of the ball breaker. Loved her attitude throughout, but when she grew a pair (down there) after the chat with Gloria, I could see she was going back to Adam as a new woman up there (head AND chest)...nice to hear women with a voice and not afraid to keep her man in line and crack the whips and chains, whoops, you know what I mean! LOL Fantastic write, possibly your best me thinks. Two sixers in a row...WTF? That's your quota for the month now. Sorry! LOL
Cheers C.P.


 Comment Written 28-Dec-2012



reply by the author on 29-Dec-2012
    Hey C.P., I can't begin to tell you how happy I am to have a fellow smut soul mate reading this one. There are too few of us here and I need encouragment to continue my naughty quest, lol.
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Terror2s
 
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This was very entertaining. I am usually pretty picky, but I did not find any nitpicks for you. I am looking forward to reading more of your work. T2


 Comment Written 19-Dec-2012



reply by the author on 20-Dec-2012
    Thank you so much for your generous review. Regards, Lou
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What a stroke of genius having Gloria Steinem as the voice of the angel. I thought this was a very humorous piece with all the battle of the sexes going on. Good for Eve Sylvia for taking the bull by the horns and asserting her uh grapefruits. Nice job.


 Comment Written 18-Dec-2012



reply by the author on 19-Dec-2012
    Thank you so much for your generous review. Your time and the stars are appreciated.
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