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  51 total reviews 
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Mrs Jones
 
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Rating of Chapter 24 -
A Tuesday Rose
Implanted deep in no-man's-land,
It writhes in darkness, parched and bland,
To wilt away by Saturday,
Exactly how this Rose feels after a week of it. Lol

Lovely verse and perfect structure, flow etcetera etcetera
A good write as always.
Rose


 Comment Written 11-Apr-2005


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giftsun
 
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A Tuesday Rose
Kaleidoscopically divine, > i'm not sure that isn't out of meter, unless you prounounce it differently than I do. I get seven syllables + plus 2 for divine which would be one more than your other stanzas which follow a 8,8,8,6 count.
Fabulous poetry anyway. Interested to hear your thought on the syllable count.


 Comment Written 11-Apr-2005


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Pili Pubul
 
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A Tuesday Rose
No matter what the theme, it always carries your signature of perfection, it is so much behind the lines in this poem ! Great images, sadness and joy ,and food for thought. Great style.

"The water and the sun entwine,
Kaleidoscopically divine,
To cause a tamed and crystal-framed
Endangered rose to bloom."

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 Comment Written 11-Apr-2005


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SterlingPeony
 
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Rating of Chapter 24 -
A Tuesday Rose

What beautiful imagery! A fragrant rose sitting on a window sill, with the sun reflecting off the vase in a rainbow mosaic of colors.

Of course, this only acts as a frame for your deeper themes--everpresent in your writings--of how those chemistry and roguery combatants find serene and nurturing resolution in the mystical entwining of water and sun. What sweet blooming!

A lovely poem, technically spot-on as always. What? Me biased? Naaah!

:o)


 Comment Written 11-Apr-2005


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Wendyanne
 
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A Tuesday Rose
I like the style that this poem is written in. It is unusual in form but it works very well. It contains some lovely imagery, for example, "The water and the sun entwine." Well done.


 Comment Written 11-Apr-2005


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Ebon Owl
 
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Rating of Chapter 24 -
A Tuesday Rose
This piece says so much. Also, to use a rose as a metaphor, that is just superb. There are many facets to this piece as the many petals of a rose. This is full of depth and passion. Oh yes, your rhyme scheme here is gorgeous. A very lyrical metered form. I've always enjoyed this type. Bravo! My friend.

Take care,

Michelle :)


 Comment Written 11-Apr-2005


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Black Wren
 
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A Tuesday Rose
It is kind of funny that your "Tuesday Rose" came on a Monday.
I like this and the way you have a hint of the rogue who dominated so many poems here.


 Comment Written 11-Apr-2005


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giftsun
 
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Rating of Chapter 23 -
Hollow Wood
Just great with the internal rhyming ( you know I am a fan of that). It's getting hard to critique your work without being repetitious. Suffice it to say whenever I read your poetry, I feel inspired to write. This is no exception.


 Comment Written 11-Apr-2005


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Walter L. Jones
 
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A Tuesday Rose
A voice lingering in thought, perfect form, easy on the ears and the mind, mellow fits, triggers escape from tasks a head, dream a bit, coffee goes down with a smile..Thanks, Walt


 Comment Written 11-Apr-2005


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A Tuesday Rose

Marillion's roguery
Kaleidoscopically
Each rose a beauty

Ever blooming divine.
Fragile is love's baseline
When chemistries align

Tuesday's rose to ignite
Saturday's candlelight
Temporary delight.

So sad to reminisce
Chaotic iwis
Dismiss this dark abyss.

There's more but not today!
With words it's fun to play.





 Comment Written 11-Apr-2005


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