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Doc (Part One of Two)


Born in Hell may be more than just a slogan...

  22 total reviews 
Comment by
justjo66
 
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Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level
An intertaining story with very realistic
character development. Your first paragraphs
capture the reader's attention and held mine
until the very end. It left me wanting to read
more.


 Comment Written 07-Feb-2013



reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
    Thank you so much for your reading my post and for your response. I also appreciate your rating and am grateful to you for that.

    Your words and feedback have been most kind...

    greg
Comment by
Bina1
 
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Exceptional
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What a story, what a hard start to a rough life. You do have a way with the written word! Thanks for sharing this compelling story.


 Comment Written 07-Feb-2013



reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
    Dear Bina, you're too kind to me. Thank you for the rating... much appreciated.

    I always enjoy your reads and like the insight you give...

    much, much gratitude

    greg
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Robin Gilmor
 
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Wow, I'm in for this one. Another Roots? Your character description is unmatched and your flow is so smooth, even with the occasional dialect inserts. Just enough to give it a touch of authentic color (no pun) without distraction.
Waiting for Friday. Love, Robin :)


 Comment Written 07-Feb-2013



reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
    My Dear Robin,

    Thank you much, my friend. I appreciate every word 'spoken' by you because you give so much feedback and insight. Thanks, thanks.

    I'll be posting part two tonight and will be curious to see if you recognize some Baltimore landmarks in descriptions...

    be well, I care 'bout cha,

    greg
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Exceptional
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I'm loving this bit of rough history. This backstory provides a lot of the sinew that holds the older Doc together. You managed an evil tone. Less of your wit--fittingly so.
This maybe just me, greg. But I kept trying to read your prologue in the present tense. It feels much more urgent and compelling when I hear it being told as it is happening.
Rueben Sr. seems more real if I can watch the scene as though I'm present. Just a thought, greg.

Looking forward to the next bit.

Peace, Lee


 Comment Written 07-Feb-2013



reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
    Hello, Lee, and thanks for reading this as I am always into your take on things. I am really, really appreciative of your rating on this as I am interested in your thoughts on present versus past... something to look at and the fact that you feel it's more compelling in the present... perhaps there is more of a dramatic, immediacy in that.

    Thanks again, Lee... I do appreciate this

    greg
Comment by
MidnightWriter4U
 
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Very well written biography of imaginary Reuben 'Doc' Douglas! And we all know those kinds of towns existed. And, there are still towns like that that exist even in 2013. I actually think this story of yours would make an excellent movie. A great read!


 Comment Written 07-Feb-2013



reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
    Hi Friend,

    'Preciate your read and comments. And hope part two continues to hold your attention. I do love watching Reuben develop though I've spent a bunch of time writing him as an adult without real back story...

    Thanks much,

    greg

reply by MidnightWriter4U on 08-Feb-2013
    Much welcome! He is an interesting character, for sure! MN :)
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a horse-haired rope - horse-hair

before by these men. Two or three of the men carried - omit "of the men"

Each hurried to individual homes as if chased by Satan. - each fled (?)

The young black man left behind a wife, sixteen-year-old and six months pregnant Ava, - sounds like wife and Ava are different people.

A great beginning, Greg. Needs some minor revisions, which I know you'll do, so I'll give you the 5 now and save having to come back to it later. Excellent story so far. I'm hooked. :) Nancy

He now left it to Lucinda's relatives.- left that

his patients were dirt poor and often bartering replaced greenbacks. - and, often, bartering

talk about the Douglas'. - no apostrophe





 Comment Written 07-Feb-2013



reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
    Dear Nancy, Thanks again for reading and taking time to help me with this. I'll definitely do the do on the corrections and appreciate you as I always do.

    greg
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Well you know FS won't let me give you a six, dammit! loved it! you brought this place and time to life, Greg - as you usually do, of course. Smoooooooth!

The image of Reuben Sr. looked back as though that lynch-rope had failed in its duty. The boy wore those cold dark eyes, that defiant stance, and the small-framed fury comfortably. The fit was perfect.(LOVE THIS! It was like standing before dynamite and knowing it will go off but not knowing when. In spite of the hot summer air the old man shivered.

(AND HERE'S ANOTHER ONE OF YOUR RELIABLY DELICIOUS ONELINERS - LOVE IT TOO)That proved, in his case, you could flunk the third grade three times and still make an occasional good decision.

:)SHARYN




 Comment Written 07-Feb-2013



reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
    My Dear Sharyn,

    You know how much I appreciate you but that doesn't stop me from continually telling you that... so I'm telling you that again.

    Thank you for reading my post and letting me know that it hits you, pleases you and gives you a peek into another world. That makes me happy...

    Gratitude, Lovely Lady... much gratitude

    greg
Comment by
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Well, in the case of Reuben 'Doc' Douglas it is plain to see that DNA played a major role in shaping who he was and would be. In the continuing debate over 'nurture' or 'nature' there are just some cases that are too well defined to be mistaken. Even if one is not inclined to believe in reincarnation, there is something to be said for the possibility of a strong spirit choosing not to leave this world. There are those who are simply forces of nature and they defy rhyme or reason and refuse to take their leave.

As Dylan Thomas' poem says: "Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light."

Reuben Sr. strikes me as being just one of those strong and defiant souls that would find a way to stay and perhaps he did in the form of his small son. It's almost as if young Doc's life was preordained.

This is an enthralling story painted with an artist's brush, so as to vividly reveal the time and place and stark beginnings of the Douglas family and also the strong ties that bind them together.

Through the deft narrative of the writer we see the strength and determination of Ava, a mere child herself, raising children in very hard times and still through it all managing to let her boys know that she loved them unconditionally.

The thing that stands out most to me about Doc is that even in his seemingly dark, cold and soulless demeanor he shows great love and respect for his mother. There seems to be somewhere in the recesses of his being a small pocket of redemption. Thus is the inexplicable and inscrutable complexity of 'Man'.

I am so glad to know some of the back story on Doc and his beginnings. It helps to weave together the past and future stories we are all so looking forward to reading.

Your magic pen has, once again, created a spellbinding story, complete with complex characters and textured settings.

Thank you for sharing your considerable gift for storytelling with us.


 Comment Written 07-Feb-2013



reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
    Dearest Marina,

    Thank you for a most insightful review. Again you peel back the layers and allow me to peek inside with you... You have spotted the dangling end of thread I play with. Is there some supernatural thing going on with these Douglas boys. Are we watching Reuben Sir. Or Reuben Jar. Or a mix of both. Or are we just back in a town and a time where superstitious people drive the narrative. So perhaps Reuben Jr. is simply a bad child, a vicious child but nonetheless a child?

    But isn't this what makes life so fucking interesting? Isn't this what makes people so hard to figure out?

    Hang on, mama!... let's finish this ride up tomorrow!

    'preciate you,

    greg
Comment by
MelReyn
 
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I don't always know the right thing. But somethings are just plain obvious. I am angry. Reuben Douglas was murdered and that's not right. He was so young, and a dad too. This world is broken my friend.

I stayed up late to read this because I had a feeling that it would by worth losing some sleep over. You did not disappoint! This was worth every second. Awesome!

I loved learning about Doc. I am wondering if he is a psychopath. Cold eyes, no remorse-- just doing what needs to be done.

I'm looking forward to Friday now, and not just because the usual reasons! ;) Great work.


 Comment Written 06-Feb-2013



reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
    Hi my dearest friend,

    I'm so appreciative of you and your reading and absorbing my characters, situations and scenes.

    The great thing about Doc and his son, Rayon is trying to figure out if they are psychopaths or even sociopaths. Those these are characters in my head I have the need to make them so three-dimensional that I can't figure out who they are or descriptively what they are... Doc loves... if only his mother. He felt compelled to pay his grandfather's doctor bill and remember he helped Doc Washington. Questions, questions, questions... cookie-cutter characters are often boring and one-dimensional.

    part two comes tomorrow, my dear friend

    greg
Comment by
beccabootie123
 
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a six if I had one. totally engrossing to me and I need more but 1928 its worse then that where I come from they still refer to african americans as colored people. You can hear people yell boy and worse he responds to that language. great piece and easy to read. glad I happened on it

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 Comment Written 06-Feb-2013



reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
    Thank you, Becca... I'm glad you found pleasure in the read and I do appreciate you taking time for it. I most appreciated your feedback and comments as they were both insightful and helpful...

    bless you,

    greg

reply by beccabootie123 on 08-Feb-2013
    ur welcome

reply by the author on 08-Feb-2013
    be well and blessed

    greg
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