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PTSD-TBI the ransom of war

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Comment by
Jean Lutz
 
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My heart breaks for veterans and their families today. They sacrifice for out freedom and many are not appreciated. I think I have seen too many changes in my lifetime. I can remember when all who served were considered heroes. Thank you for calling attention to their sufferings. Best wishes in the contest.


 Comment Written 10-Mar-2013



reply by the author on 10-Mar-2013
    Thank you Jean, for your thoughtful review. I greatly appreciate your comments.
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josieg521
 
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Excellent description of what our men go through fighting in wars. No one really understands until you live it and see it with your own eyes. I commend you for sharing this with everyone. Very well done.


 Comment Written 07-Mar-2013



reply by the author on 07-Mar-2013
    Thank you for your kind review. I am pleased that the piece resonated with you.
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elliejean
 
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I came from a career family. My father suffered brain injury in World War II An older brother left his legs and his mind in Viet Nam.. I am a retired police officer. We used to keep a fund so old soldiers could take a trip to the hospital when they felt a crisis coming on. Great work.


 Comment Written 06-Mar-2013



reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
    You certainly belong to a family that has served its country above and beyond the call of duty. I can see where you definitely have a personal understanding of what war does to our soldiers.

    Thank you for your review and for sharing your family's experiences with me. This piece was written, because of families like yours and millions of others we owe our freedom and our very lives to.
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SPOLIN
 
 
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This is a soapbox piece that makes the point. The writing is clear. I don't think there is anything to which someone might disagree.Yet, I don't think the case is made in a creative manner. Essay writing takes a certain tweak to maintain interest but that hasn't happened for me reading this work.


 Comment Written 05-Mar-2013



reply by the author on 05-Mar-2013
    Well, like everyone else you are certainly entitled to your opinion. Thanks for the read.
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Aneesha Roy
 
 
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I do not quite know how to stem this upsurge of emotions running amok in my mind after reading this essay. It is infinitely touching especially due to the author's notes appended at the end..and the essay is all the more relevant as the author herself is inextricably linked to someone that has experienced war at close quarters. The essay exposes our hypocrisy when it comes to war, particularly when it comes to treating those affected by war..it exposes the lack of acknowlegdement and sympathy for injuries that don't show as though the mental toll is any less. I would like to congratulate the author for giving us such a detailed, compelling account of war and the mental and psychological harm inflicted on the young soldiers. A special thanks for embellishing this piece even further through the interspersed quotations by luminaries. The last line of the essay captures its essence and it leaves an indelible imprint on one's mind. A splendid piece of writing.


 Comment Written 20-Feb-2013



reply by the author on 20-Feb-2013
    Aneesha,

    Thank you for this most lovely and heartfelt review. I greatly enjoyed reading your thoughtful comments on this very serious matter.

    It is obvious that you are a very gifted writer in your own right.

    You have been so kind and I thank you for your generous rating.

reply by Aneesha Roy on 20-Feb-2013
    Thank you very much. I am deeply indebted to you for writing such an exceptionally brilliant piece. I am glad I was able to read it and absorb the profound thoughts expressed in it. It touched me infinitely and like I said, I am deeply indebted to you for that.
    Regards, Aneesha.
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Cliff Ashpaugh
 
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Hi Marisa. This essay is very well thought out and very well written. Problem is every new generation appears to need to learn the horrors of war for themselves. That's why young people are chosen and trained to fight, their frontal lobes, the sphere of the brain that generates empathy, isn't fully matured until the age of twenty-five. Until then the youth believe they are invincible and mental illness only happens to others. Man, I could go on and on about this. You really sparked some emotions in me. The suggestions I made are minor. It may look like I made a lot but I do a lot of copying and pasting, so it actually looks worse than it is: the condition of those who had seen and felt horrendous things that the brain could not process--things is a weak noun, might try experiences or conditions.... There are just as many victims who are suffering from the mental stresses of war--omit of war, already assumed.... Many of the soldiers who seem to escape these encounters soon find out that their hell has just begun--seem is a weak verb, might rewrite as: Many of the soldiers who survive these encounters soon find out that their hell has just begun.... This percentage can serve as a rough estimate of the fraction who have TBI.... The true--Use period instead of ellipses.... So many of these young soldiers returning home have the appearance of being 'normal'--So many of these young soldiers returning home appear 'normal'.... How does one spend a year or more engaged in war and then come home and be expected to forget or at least stow away all the horrors of war.--replace period with question mark.... As if the experience alone wasn't enough there are the additional effects of something similar to PTSD that doctors describe as "traumatic loss" and "moral injury."--As if the experience alone wasn't enough, there are the additional effects of something similar to PTSD that doctors describe as "traumatic loss" and "moral injury.".... Great essay. I'm fully convinced of the argument. If you have the time, I'd like to invite you to review my post, Passions Perceived. I'd really like to see what you think. Take care. Cliff


 Comment Written 19-Feb-2013



reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
    Thanks again Cliff for the review and numerous editing suggestions.
Comment by
Perp Ihebom
 
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This is so very true and passionately written. Your voice rings out clear and strong on the damages both physical and mental that are caused by war. I just wonder why the world leaders are not lovers of peace. Some super powerful nations actually go out of their way to engineer war in weaker regions for selfish interests. Pity! Well done


 Comment Written 18-Feb-2013



reply by the author on 18-Feb-2013
    Thank you for this most thoughtful and excellent review.

    I, along with you, wonder about the world leaders and their mind set when it comes to war. They command from on high, so they don't see the tragedy and brutality of war in the same way. I think they should be made to get up close and personal with the living hell and suffering they create when they provoke war in other countries and when they commit their own to such horrors.
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gypsycaravan
 
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This is such a true tragedy in our country. Especially in the Vietnam, Iraq and Afghanistan fighting, there was/is no front line. Soldiers are not returned to the rear for periods of rest and recuperation. They remain in harm's way 24/7 at full adrenalin alert never knowing the dangers close by. With the amount of covert intelligence equipment, there should be NO need for troops on the ground to experience such horrors. Other countries need to fight their own wars. Enough of my ranting. You wrote an excellent piece and I hope you will send it somewhere for publication. Thanks so much for posting.


 Comment Written 17-Feb-2013



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
    Thank you very much for your review and especially your comments, I greatly appreciate them.

    I am most happy that you enjoyed reading this piece.
Comment by
Bobby Jo
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This was an eye-opener. It amazes me the trauma that our soldiers face when they are in war, and then when they come home they are forgotten. I believe this piece needs to published in magazines. Great work.


 Comment Written 17-Feb-2013



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
    Thank you so much for your very generous review and you comments on this piece. I greatly appreciate your thoughts.
Comment by
el twelve
 
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I couldn't agree more. We have friends in Canada that are in the services and I worry constantly. I know that they are not taken care of after they have done their service to their country. But what about the fact that they did and are doing their service for US. I can't tell you how much this piece touched me. Once these young go over to serve when they return there is NOTHING that should not be available to them. These fat fucks that sit and send them over, are their kids or relatives over there, excuse my language, apologies. Thanks for getting me riled LOL


 Comment Written 17-Feb-2013



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
    No apology necessary for the language, I'm certain that 'fat fucks' is the official name for them. I only hope those who are in a position to help these young soldiers will wake up and do what they need to do, before we lose anymore of them to suicide

    Thanks so much for your generous rating, but most of all your really great review.
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