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Just Shoot Me


I have days like this.

  21 total reviews 
Comment by
Samuel Dickens
 
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Oh, my goodness, that is one horrible waking up experience. I think if it'd been me, I would've turned over and gone back to sleep, confident it had just been that extra piece of cheesecake I'd eaten the previous evening. No, it didn't really happen.


 Comment Written 11-Jul-2013



reply by the author on 12-Jul-2013
    Thank you Samuel, I really appreciate the review and comments.
    Beth
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lorijean
 
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This made me laugh, I could just picture all the turmoil as that phone rang, once thing after another just insanely rolling along.....


 Comment Written 02-May-2013



reply by the author on 02-May-2013
    Thank you so much for the review and comments. I'm so glad it made you laugh.

    Beth S.
Comment by
conroy11
 
 
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This was a very funny piece about the beginning of a terrible day. They title is apropos and I love the domino effect of reaching for the switch,knocking the water, spilling the pills,phone opening, battery falling out, Nice touch. And of course the coup de grace of missing the 20k giveaway. I would suggest changing "the ungodly hour" to "this ungodly hour" and "phone clattered to (the) floor" But that stuff is minor Good job on a limited word choice!


 Comment Written 02-May-2013



reply by the author on 02-May-2013
    Thank you so much for the review and wonderful comments. I'm especially grateful for you catching the spags. I can't believe I missed them. Much appreciated.

    Beth S.

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Titanx9
 
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A very funny piece you've written. This would be bad luck indeed were it to happen in reality. It's a real hoot, thanks for the laugh and good luck in the contest!


 Comment Written 02-May-2013



reply by the author on 02-May-2013
    Thank you for the review and the comments. I'm so glad you see the humor. Everything except the prize money has happened to me more than once. LOL.
    Beth S.
Comment by
LadyGuyse
 
 
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Nice, good humor. I think you did a good job with this prompt, good luck on the contest. Hopefully your computer will not crash and leave you out of the vote! Lol. You even manage dialogue on a short piece.


 Comment Written 02-May-2013



reply by the author on 02-May-2013
    Thank you so much for the review and nice comments. I'm glad you like the humor. These things are only funny in retrospect but stuff like this happens to me all the time. LOL

    Beth
Comment by
EmberSnowcat
 
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That was beyond hilarious! I love that story, only because I had that day just yesterday. (Minus winning the money LOL) I wanted to cringe for the poor person in your story due to I just knew it was going to get worse for them LOL. You used every word they asked for the prompt, awesome job! The only edit I would make is remove the period after $20,000. Other than that, no spag. Great job and best of luck in the prompt contest!


 Comment Written 01-May-2013



reply by the author on 02-May-2013
    Thank you so much for the review and funny comments. I have a lot of days like those (minus the money) I'm so glad you liked the humor.

    Beth S.
Comment by
reconciled
 
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Wow...man they shouldn't leave messages like that...the most heart wrenching "Dear John" letter ever recorded....hmm...what a shame. Alright...I need somthin' to drink...-wink- love Michael


 Comment Written 01-May-2013



reply by the author on 02-May-2013
    Thanks for the review and the funny comments. That would be a bummer message wouldn't it. The rest has happened to me more than once. LOL

    Beth S.
Comment by
2014 Short Works Writer Of The Year
Evelyn Fort Stewart
 
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Oh now that would be a real bummer to say the least, if it were true. It was pretty eye catching even being fiction. Good luck in the contest. God loves you and I do too.


 Comment Written 01-May-2013



reply by the author on 02-May-2013
    Thanks for the review and the comments. The money part wasn't true but the rest is pretty typical for me, if the phone wakes me. LOL

    Beth S.
Comment by
donaldww
 
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Nice story. Too bad you didn't answer the phone. Better luck . . .

Better luck nest time.
(nest time? do you mean next time?)

with the voters.

Cheers,
DW


 Comment Written 01-May-2013



reply by the author on 01-May-2013
    Thank you for pointing out the typo and for the review. It is much appreciated.
    :)
Comment by
Charlene0513
 
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This short story was packed full of enthusiasm and a upsetting/discouraging feeling at the same time.
I enjoyed the read and satire effects were great.
Charlene


 Comment Written 01-May-2013



reply by the author on 01-May-2013
    Thanks Charlene. I appreciate the review and nice comments.

    :)
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