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warped perceptions?

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Rachelle Allen
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I am so mad at myself for having given away my last extra star, because this story SOOO absolutely deserves it. What an absolutely brilliant, searingly honest, cogent piece of writing this is! The words you chose are so vivid (exquisite bone structure, large espresso eyes, slid down until his jeans hit the concrete, boy barreled down the steps) and your message about the ill-effects of well-intentioned PSA's are very wise.

I am so glad I took the time to read this today. You are quite the talented writer, N.K. Wagner. xo


 Comment Written 04-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
    Thank you, Rachelle. Your kind comments are much appreciated. We often forget that the News highlights the unusual, not the commonplace. And it's easy to be influenced by "the big lie" style of propoganda, no matter how well intentioned. If we're persuaded to distrust each other, our country will fall apart without our enemies lifting a finger. And no one's too smart to be taken in. Just a pinch of leavening during a turbulent time. :) Nancy

reply by Rachelle Allen on 07-Jun-2019
    Very well put, Nancy. xo
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this story actually made me feel squeemish inside and sad to think of such a small child moment becoming such a huge adult fear. The author built a challenging story line with a wonderful surprise ending. I really like it!


 Comment Written 01-Oct-2016



reply by the author on 04-Oct-2016
    Thank you, LaRosa. Glad you enjoyed. :) Nancy
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This description rings SO true. Been there; done that. The storytelling skill is evident from the first paragraph. There is a real message here and it should be clear to any reader. My only disappointment is in not having more analysis of the underlying issues. Is it really paranoia to engage our awareness of certain modern-day dangers? Is it bad to be more suspicious of the person who seems to fit a profile that has been planted by both reality and media exaggerations? Have our policies and national self-aggrandizement exposed us to unnecessary risks? Was there any possibility that THIS might have been the one time in your life that the danger was real and might your vigilance have saved lives? What do we do to insure our security and still protect rights? What if you had called the police?


 Comment Written 31-Oct-2013



reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
    This isn't a political lecture or a history lesson, Barry. It's a window into how our thinking has been changed and is continuing to be influenced by the threat of terrorism. How much paranoia is healthy? How much is too much? The answers are up to each reader. If my essay spurs research, so much the better, but I don't draw conclusions for my audience. They're smart enough to do that themselves. Thanks for reading. :) Nancy

reply by Barry1000 on 01-Nov-2013
    You have to define your purpose for yourself and if you are happy with a small window, that isn't for me to argue about. I'm new at this. However, I refuse to allow myself to be squeezed into the confines that seem to be de rigueur now. I know that brevity is seen as the only option and that it is presumed that people will never wade through a lengthy piece and that young people with short attention spans are setting the trends. Still, I think all that is over-emphasized. People figure things out for themselves, yet there would be no purpose in writing at all if writers had no ability to illuminate more than one feature or to stimulate a broader discussion. My sensation of wishing for a little more information to suggest your thinking beyond the obvious may be rare or strange, but if so, I think that is sad. Very, very, sad.

reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
    Barry, I'm writing for an audience who wants the writer to tell the story, provide the experience, make the point...and shut up. Subsequent discussion indicates I achieved my goal of encouraging readers to think about the changes to their own perceptions over the past 12 years. Additionally, it opened a window for our non-American friends to understand the Northeastern mindset.

    I'm matching product to consumer. Short gets read here. Long does not. And, sadly, quality has little to do with it.

reply by Barry1000 on 02-Nov-2013
    Sorry. I'm a dinosaur. You have the quality and ability. I just find it difficult to adjust to seeing such talent cut short. My 5,000 word piece has been reviewed about five times, which seems to validate your position. My writing isn't so good, but the topic demands attention, yet no one can find the time. It truly is sad, in my estimation.

reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013
    Remember, Barry, the readers here are reviewing for $$$. Time is funny money. To post around 80-88 cents (which is where I can get the 26 reviewers I need to earn an All Time Best seal) it costs me 40 FS dollars. The higher the payout, the more reviewers you'll have. But 5K words is twice what the average FS reader will bother with at any payout due to time constraints. Thus the two-parters appearing on the first page or two.

    That doesn't necessarily reflect the realities of the marketplace for either fiction (GlimmerTrain publishes to 7K words) and I'm sure some of the political commentary magazines will publish the kind of expansive article you prefer to write.

    Since you believe your writing needs editorial input, why not write some 2K word practice essays on narrow topics? It will allow you to receive technical pointers and hone your skills in smaller bites.

    If you're working up articles for specific markets, you might want to go directly to an editor for corrections. Norma Howell (Nor8...7?) is a paid professional.

    I don't know if I've helped. I don't want you to get an incorrect view of the writers' market based upon the custom here on FS. You have professional credentials. You should have no trouble being invited to submit an article if you pitch it to the right publisher.

    Good luck. :) nancy

reply by Barry1000 on 03-Nov-2013
    Nancy,
    Thanks for the info and encouragement. I will look into your recommendations. You have indeed helped.
    Barry
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Unfortunately, it is so true in our society today that we have to be careful in so many situations. It's tough to know when to do things and when to not. I've heard from others who have been in your situation as well. Good writing and thank you for sharing.


 Comment Written 05-Jul-2013



reply by the author on 05-Jul-2013
    Gracie, I still resent that they got inside my head that way. Thank you so much for your kind review. :) nancy
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This is very well written. The descriptions were strong and made a mental picture in my mind. The beginning caught my attention, and I stayed impressed throughout. Great job.
Best wishes
Peppy


 Comment Written 29-May-2013



reply by the author on 30-May-2013
    Thank you, Peppy. Glad you enjoyed. :) nancy
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I liked the tension that built as you worried about the contents of the boy's pack. Now that people are used to gun shooting nuts at schools and public events, it's no wonder you were concerned.

I have a friend who was riding a bus in Tel Aviv and heard a ticking sound coming from a duffle bag. He kicked the bag to the front of the bus and an alarm clock fell out of the bag. A week later, he was standing in a bus terminal, and the half he wasn't standing in blew up.

He moved to Canada.

Cheers,
DW


 Comment Written 29-May-2013



reply by the author on 30-May-2013
    Civilized people shouldn't have to live this way, DW. Sadly, the uncivilized won't leave us alone. If we weren't bound by political correctness, this problem could be solved. But the solution is as barbaric as the problem. Decisions, decisions. :) nancy
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Oh Nancy! What a time we live in!
I think you are brave to write this - admit this scenario which played with your consciousness, your fears. We are all guilty of such 'paranoia' but most of us won't admit it. Where is that line nowadays, anyway? You know, the line that separates reality and innocence from reality and evil. Why is it so blurry? What has happened to us?

One can never be too careful.
If you see something, say something.

It really makes me sad. I feel the violation you describe. We all carry a heavy backpack filled with Love and Fear.

Thanks for this wonderful write.

Patti


 Comment Written 29-May-2013



reply by the author on 30-May-2013
    It's hard to know what to be concerned about and what not. Of course, I'm a relative stranger to that neighborhood, so "normal" there is harder for me to read. Glad you enjoyed, kinda. And than you for your generous rating. :) nancy
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This is a thrilling story. Oh to those you see and say nothing! I just posted something with that theme so I know what you are talking about. Very well written, a pleasure.


 Comment Written 28-May-2013



reply by the author on 29-May-2013
    Glad you liked it, amada. Not happy to be thinking like that, though. :) Nancy
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And this is what the terrorists want. Fear. They undermine our security.

To this day, you will be hard pressed to find a trash can on a British railway station platform, or anywhere else that might be a target. That stems from the days of the IRA, when they would put nail bombs in them.

You've captured the suspicion and the fear very well, Nancy.

I love your description of the young man and his knapsack. It's too bad that we are forced to question the most innocent of gestures.

Bravo.

Av


 Comment Written 28-May-2013



reply by the author on 29-May-2013
    You're exactly right, Av. This is what the terrorists want, and we're playing into their hands with the PSAs. Overkill. There's a fine line between keeping people aware, making them paranoid and causing them to become immune to the possible dangers. Thanks for a great review. :) nancy
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Good morning Nancy
This was such a sweet story just to start off my day. I agree we should be more lenient in our judgments of others, someday their misfortunes could be our own
Bear


 Comment Written 27-May-2013



reply by the author on 28-May-2013
    It's so easy to be influenced into overreaction, Bear. It was interesting to watch everything unfold. "The worst" could never happen...right? :) Nancy
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