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Jerry Jing-Jang the Lawman


JJJ is deputy for a day

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Cornelius2000
 
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What an absolutely delightful story-poem. Reading "Jerry Jing-Jang" was just too much of a temptation, so I sat here in my office, by myself and read it out loud, grinning the whole time. Your rhyming is impeccable and the poem reads really well. Nice job!


 Comment Written 23-Jun-2013



reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
    I'm so glad you enjoyed Jerry Jing-Jang. He's one of my favorite characters to write. There are more of his adventures in my portfolio, if you're interested. Don't feel you have to review that old stuff for one point. Thanks for the great review, and I hope you have a wonderful weekend.
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-*this is really cute. It should be put to music if you haven't already. I hope you win the contest. Good luck my friend and keep writing.


 Comment Written 23-Jun-2013



reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
    Thanks for the six! I'm so glad you enjoyed JJJ. He's one of my favorite characters to write. There are more of his adventures in my portfolio, if you're interested. I'm afraid I can't set them to music, since I have absolutely no musical talent. Have a great weekend.

reply by zeldasmith on 23-Jun-2013
    Did you come up with JJJ? I'm a retired organist and wrote some of my songs. So when ever I read a little jingle as yours I want to hear the melody. I'll check back later in your portfolio. Gotta get some grub.

reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
    JJJ is my dad. He told stories of his cowboy days when we were kids. Fictional, of course, but when I was six I totally believed him. He never wrote anything down. Now that he's 80 he gets a big kick out of my poems and stories.
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A true courageous, wanderer, nice innocent cowboy is well featured, smooth is the narrative taletelling, natural is the flow of thoughts, fantastic imagery and vivid visual, I enjoyed the story of JJJ. 1/623


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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
    Thanks. JJJ is one of my favorite characters to write. There are more of his adventures in my portfolio, if you're interested. You don't have to bother reviewing that old stuff for one point. Have a great weekend.
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solid rhyming couplets
good assonance in forever remember
good alliteration in rode out to the range and in coward/cowboys and in Rusty the Rustler and in friend has flown
good internal rhyme in draw/outlaw/saw
I like the proximate rhyme of hurry/jury
An exciting story of the old West in good poetic form :-) Brooke


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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
    Thanks. Glad you enjoyed it. Have a wonderful weekend.
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This is a nice story that flowed really well in verse and rhyme. And it was humorous. It held my attention, and there were no yawning bumps. This is the kind of work that makes a reader happy to have read it.


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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
    I'm so glad you enjoyed my little story poem. Thanks for this great review. Have a wonderful weekend.
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Nicely done. Imaginative little story in poem form! Some of the rhymes seemed a little bit forced but it still worked and came together well!


 Comment Written 23-Jun-2013



reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
    I'm glad you enjoyed my little story poem. Thanks for the stars. Have a great weekend.
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I just love this! To be able to tell a story with your poetry without sounding too forced is awesome! The rhyme and rhythm work well without taking away from the story. I will keep this 'on my bookshelf' for a long time.
A truly delightful read :)
thanks for sharing. - Kelly


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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
    I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Jerry Jing-Jang is one of my favorite characters to write. There are more of his adventures in my portfolio if you're interested, but don't feel you have to review that old stuff for one point. It's great to have you as a fan, as well.
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this si very well written, cindy, i see you brought jerry jing jang out of retirement to catch a rustler but to turn him loose so he wouldn't be hung without a trial. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest.

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 Comment Written 23-Jun-2013



reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
    Jerry Jing-Jang is so much fun I thought it was time for him to have another adventure. Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for the great review.
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All praise for your marvellous,interesting and funny narration of the story in this work.
The rhyming is the key you will win a reader's heart
keep up the excellent work

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
    I'm so glad you enjoyed Jerry Jing-Jang. There's lots more about him in my portfolio if you're interestd. Thanks for the great review.
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