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My Grandfather's Hands


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Beautiful memory portrayed here. I love the last two lines showing the gentleness of both hands and heart. Had to check out more of your stuff. I think I'm your newest fan :)
Antia


 Comment Written 24-Aug-2013



reply by the author on 24-Aug-2013
    Hi Anita,
    What a nice surprise! I used to help my grandfather at the woodpile. Then we'd go in and have a bowl of my grandmother's homemade turkey soup. Dee-licious! She made the best rolls too. He was a true woodsman, but in later years fell victim to Alzheimers. Robbed of his true identity. An awful way to finish a wonderful life.
    Thanks so much for stopping by to review this poem! I appreciate your kind remarks, and the gift of stars.
    cheers
    Kimbob
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Hi Kimbob,
This is a delight and well penned post. Your grandparents would love it. I surely did and it allowed me a few moments of remembering my own ones who were so loved in my heart though they lived in Scotland.
Thanks for sharing this one and thanks for the smiles this one gave me.
Maureen


 Comment Written 20-Aug-2013



reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
    Thanks, Maureen! I'm so glad you enjoyed this one. I really appreciate your kind review, and the gift of stars!
    cheers
    Kimbob
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Oh - that's just beautiful! Pull all the right heart strings. Lovely that you have such strong and warm memories of a loving grandparent. I never had a gran-dad to take me for an ice cream, although my mother's uncle Howard used to fill in the role nicely when I was a young child!

Smiles on this one!

PF


 Comment Written 19-Aug-2013



reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
    Thanks so much, Piper! I appreciate your kind remarks, and the gift of stars. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Working at the woodpile with my grandfather is a great memory.
    cheers
    Kimbob
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What lovely memories you have of special grandparents, but especially your grandfather. When you think about his hands, you knew you were looking and grasping the hands of a man of worth and values who was imbued with integrity and honor. Thanks for sharing a great poem about another time and place!


 Comment Written 19-Aug-2013



reply by the author on 19-Aug-2013
    Thanks so much, Titanx9! My grandfather was a great guy, and a true woodsman. Unfortunately, he spent his latter years with Alzheimers. I really appreciate your kind review, and the gift of stars!
    cheers
    Kimbob
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The emotion in this piece is lovely..we who have been lucky enough to have a grandparent with the strength of working hands, can all relate to the love and tenderness in this piece! thanks so much for choosing my artwork, I am honored! donkeyoatey


 Comment Written 19-Aug-2013



reply by the author on 19-Aug-2013
    Thank you, Don! Your picture was just perfect for my poem, exactly what I was hoping to find. I really appreciate your kind review, and the generous rating!
    cheers
    Kimbob
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This is very well written and just reading it brought back so many old memories. Wouldn't it be great to turn back the hands of time, even for a little while. Great job. Bill


 Comment Written 19-Aug-2013



reply by the author on 19-Aug-2013
    Thanks so much, Bill! It sure would...I'd love to see my grandparents again. A couple of times I've seen my grandfather in a dream, and he looks terrific. I'm glad you enjoyed this piece. I appreciate your kind review, and the gift of stars!
    cheers
    Kimbob
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Hello Father Flaps, I enjoyed reading your poem, an ode to your grandfather and his love for you. The love and bond between a grandparent and a grandchild is a bond that time cannot erase or change. FF, your poem has great imagery. However, I have one small suggestion for which I deduct no points as you have poetic license:

"Yet his tough crocodile fingers
(I thought that by adding the words, "Yet his," those words would bridge the flow of the poem ... just a humble suggestion)

The ending of this poem was beautifully penned:

Tough crocodile fingers
delicately held my hand
on the way for an ice cream cone

(Great imagery and you leave the reader/reviewer with that
ahhh feeling and that makes this a winning poem.

"Free-verse is free flow from the heart ~ LateBloomer)


 Comment Written 19-Aug-2013



reply by the author on 19-Aug-2013
    Thanks so much, LateBloomer! I will consider adding the bridge, and I appreciate the suggestion as well as the twinkling stars.
    I'm glad you stopped by today!
    cheers
    Kimbob
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the things we remember and it brings us joy. I too remember my grandfather his hat and how he smoked a pipe with a stone on top to keep it from going out. brings nice thoughts to mind. thank you adele


 Comment Written 19-Aug-2013



reply by the author on 19-Aug-2013
    Thanks, Adele! I appreciate your kind review, the gift of stars, and the memory you shared with me of your grandfather.
    All the Best!
    Kimbob

reply by beccabootie123 on 20-Aug-2013
    your welcome
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I love the line about the palms of his hands:Palms cold and fissured
as the surface of Mars,
It also gave them color.

And then you have these tough working hands take your small one and take you for ice cream.

Wonderful visual piece Great descriptors( leather hands, hard as horses hooves, cold and fissured, crocodile fingers)

Perfect picture too.


 Comment Written 19-Aug-2013



reply by the author on 19-Aug-2013
    Thanks, Ellie! I'm so glad you liked it. I appreciate your kind review, and the gift of stars!
    your pal,
    Kimbob
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What a great description, I hope you share this with your grandparents because it is a beautiful testiment of your love. The free verse format has no rules so I will comment on the 2-2-2-3 concept pattern ( of ideas expressed in # of lines), my comment is think about adding or subtracting one line to bring a more stable feel.since there is no rhyme, it leads the reader with idea groupings.. It may be your intent to have the last line create a feel of wanting more,,,,good work.


 Comment Written 19-Aug-2013



reply by the author on 19-Aug-2013
    Hi Katzintx,
    Actually, I was going for contrast in the last grouping of three lines, building on the strength of his hands and ending with the image of him holding the small soft hand of his grandson.
    I really appreciate your kind review, and the gift of stars. It was so nice of you to stop by this morning.
    cheers
    Kimbob
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