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Biff and Bam


the single father's lot

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Comment by
Susanjohn
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omgoodness I don't have 6 stars left for this one!!!! wow wow...the emotions and feelings expressed...sure picking up on that!!! "tiny replicates of love and joy"...melting my heart.... picking up the pieces...and moving forward with biff and bam...not easy!!...such a heart felt poem!


 Comment Written 31-Aug-2016



reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
    Thank you so much Susan. Wow. I can't believe you found this in my old port. I am so pleased that you did. It reminds me that i actually DO possess a softer side :-) Thanks again. DJ

reply by Susanjohn on 02-Sep-2016
    Of course you do silly!... I knew it all along. :-)
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writeapoem
 
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What an extraordinary experience you write in rhyme about the time you spend with your kids. Saddened by your loss of your wife which some in life must endure. Kids it was meant to be raised together as a family with both parents. But it appears you are all ears and respectfully raise and not neglect their days with you. A special prayer for a courageous father. All the best


 Comment Written 14-Jul-2016



reply by the author on 14-Jul-2016
    My goodness. This is something of a teary wow. I can't believe that you found this in my old port. Thank you so much. God bless - DJ

reply by writeapoem on 14-Jul-2016
    I trust i did not bring hurt back. But your peom was inspirational All the best

reply by the author on 14-Jul-2016
    Not at all. Fond memories is all. God bless - DJ
Comment by
Sharon-Yvette
 
 
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I think that this poem is Exceptional. What a unique way of writing about the topic of one spouse losing another spouse too soon. You did a great job of conveying the emotions involved in such a situation with the right balance of being light-hearted (raucous preteen monsters) yet still expressing the true feelings (cynicism, father parent crap). I was totally surprised to learn in the middle of the poem what topic you were actually addressing! I love the way the poem ends "our love goes on and on." Great job!


 Comment Written 09-Aug-2014



reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
    Thanks Sharon. I am amazed that you found this and am truly grateful for your comments. Love does conquer all sometimes. Sorry for the stupidly late response. I have been off the air for a while.
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Glasstruth
 
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Your couplets with a wonderful, natural flow tells a heartfelt story of teenagers you love so dearly. Your assonance and rhyming is s smooth. Love the sound of it read aloud. The ending line is just superb, "Just Biff and Bam, the sticky jam, our love goes on and on" Superb! Les



 Comment Written 11-Oct-2013



reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
    Thanks, mate. For the generous sixpack and especially for reading it aloud:) I probably went a little OTT with the internal rhyme but so it stands. You inspire me to experiment with "shape". Now that I have this off my chest (sleeve) I intend to work on a visual piece. I have to say that I find your writing awesome! Some of the 'top ranked' FS poets leave me wondering whether I should book in for a brain transplant, or enrol in "Appreciating Formulaic Free Verse 101". Ooops! Bad DJ.
    Cheers Les. Enjoy a creative weekend - DJ

reply by Glasstruth on 11-Oct-2013
    I don't think it's OTT. The rhyming was a blast to read. Thanks for the compliment. Free verse I've done more, while rhyming I have to work at it. Have a nice weekend. Les
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Well said! I'm sorry for the loss of your wife and I applaud you for being a stand up Dad. Loved the humor, rhythm and rhyme throughout. Made it a joy to read. Great job P.S. Send my regards to "Biff and Bam" :)


 Comment Written 10-Oct-2013



reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
    Hi Suzie. My now adult kids Biff(Ben)and Bam(Astrid) salute you! cheers - DJ
Comment by
michaelcahill
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rumours and innuendos
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the humor and good nature is what gives this piece such poignancy. there is a quiet courage and duty mixed in with the obvious love. it is wistful but, not resigned. what a beautiful piece. feelings so beautifully expressed of things that are human and simple and ultimately the very most important. bitter sweet but, much more sweet. wonderfully nostalgic in the very best way. honesty makes for excellence. (you may quote me! ha!) loved it, mike


 Comment Written 10-Oct-2013



reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
    Thanks, mike. I may quote you:) I learned a lot about honesty with this write. Cheers - DJ
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kiwijenny
 
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I wish I had a six.......this is so good...and hard to review because it is your life.......Biff and Bam are very lucky to have you...the love shines through
God bless .........................


 Comment Written 10-Oct-2013



reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
    Hey you:) No sixpack required. Both adults now and still monsters but we do the park thing when they visit. Thank you - DJ xx
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nancyjam
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Under the humorous lines, a very touching piece.
To carry on after losing your wife must have been
difficult; left to raise your children alone but
strength and love carried you through.
Beautifully expressed.


 Comment Written 10-Oct-2013



reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
    Thank you nancy. God bless - DJ
Comment by
Benny Beeharry
 
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Exceptional
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You deserve a six for the fatherly love you are giving the kids. I cannot say anything against anyone but your writing went straight to my heart.nice, tinged with a little despair and remorse, frustration, may it keeps going very well indeed. Congrats
Benny Beeharry


 Comment Written 10-Oct-2013



reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
    Thank you Benny. The Biff in my poem is actually Ben - pretty cool I reckon. Such a strong name. Thanks again - DJ
Comment by
c_lucas
 
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When a beloved partner crosses over, it is difficult for the one left behind, especially if children are involved. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.


 Comment Written 10-Oct-2013



reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
    Thank you, Charlie. I am truly grateful that this has beeen well received. Cheers - DJ

reply by c_lucas on 10-Oct-2013
    You're welcome, DJ. Charlie
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