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The Storm


8 and 6 weeks out from 2 brain surgeries

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Hi Jimi

I love that quote so full of hope and acceptance.

I read with shivers this story. My own son had a horrendous accident on his skate board ... he had a shocking head injury, a subcutaneous hematoma and was in intensive care for seven days. Fortunately he survived without any complications. It happened on the last day of high school exams. I can empathise with what your family has gone through ... your anguish was so much longer and with surgeries as well ... we were so lucky to avoid that. My greatest worry was that the doctors told him not to go to his schoolies vacation in case he re-injured his wound. ...... of course an 18 year old won't miss out ... his family sweated it out while he enjoyed his vacation. All was well.

He is twenty one now and all that is behind us ... a place where you all will be soon ... time moves so fast. A great analogy used to compare your quote with your family experience. Fairy twinkles *********** Hugs - Lovi xoxoxoox



 Comment Written 30-Nov-2013



reply by the author on 02-Dec-2013
    Lovinia, once again a big big thank you! Oh my, thank you for sharing your story and I am so thrilled your son had no complications.

    again thank you.. jimi

reply by Lovinia on 02-Dec-2013
    You're most welcome ... I really enjoyed catching up with your work. xoxoxo
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That really is a lovely quote, but I don't think it's something that most of us would ever entertain in practice. I think the real dancing starts with the first break of sunshine. Otherwise, most "dancers" would be seen as troubled souls who are in need of a good doctor. :)


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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013
    Edwin Baldwin, thank you for stopping by to read and review. I do not quite understand what you mean. This is actually part of my journaling when my SWEET 9 year old granddaughter suffered a brain bleed from an AVM, with two brain surgeries. Again, thank you.
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Beautiful update on your Sarah. I like how you carry the theme throughout the brief writing - storm, dancing in the rain, anchor, Captain. You have unusual talent for stringing together just the right phrases! Excellent. I'm so happy I had a six - my last one - to give this wonderful update.


 Comment Written 20-Nov-2013



reply by the author on 29-Nov-2013
    Eleanor, thank you ever so much for stopping again and for the wonderful encouragement. Sarah is special and she is very strong. again thank you.. jlsavell

reply by Eleanor Buron on 01-Dec-2013
    You're welcome. Blessings, Elly
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Although the metaphor works well in this documentary about your granddaughter, you mention disabled compass twice. It is a strong visual and the briefness of this essay makes it stand out too much as repetitious.


 Comment Written 20-Nov-2013



reply by the author on 29-Nov-2013
    Spiritual ERcho, once again thank you ever so much. You are right about the repetition. I will correct.. again thank you for your imput and for following Sarah... jimi
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Dance in the rain or...dance on a shifting carpet. You feel helpless just standing there and wondering what is going to happen next? Twelve weeks out and Sarah is laughing at her accomplishments and probably the look on your faces (mentally willing her on to walk like you do) strokes take time and lots of rehab - plus the will of the person to 'come back' from the brain bleed. Well done Captain Sarah.


 Comment Written 20-Nov-2013



reply by the author on 29-Nov-2013
    Aussie, again thank you. such wonderful encouragement from you. Yes, she is laughing at her accomplishments. thank you friend... jimim
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Hello Jimi :) it is always nice to see your name in my message box friend. Children can amaze us adults sometimes, their capacity to look death in the face and smile and say not today, not today! is incredible. Sarah is a remarkable little girl for sure :)She is the same age as our Ashlee, long may you all... keep dancing!


 Comment Written 19-Nov-2013



reply by the author on 29-Nov-2013
    Hitcher, thank you so very much. Sarah has been through more than her share of trials. She is one strong victorious little girl. Please read about AVM. Sarah's brain bleed was in the right temporal lobe of her brain. Three weeks into her medically induced coma the neurosurgeon operated on Sarah. An 8.5 hour operation to remove a blood clot a little larger than a golf ball and it had moved her midbrain .5 of an inch. Second brain surgery 2 weeks later to control horrific seizures even while in coma. She is strong and we are finally able to breathe. She went home Tuesday!!!!!!!!!! again thank you... jimi
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A very difficult journey but with a very happy ending. Sarah can be viewed as a true hero, there is no doubt. She has been through so much yet her strong spirit and determination assisted her to overcome her situation. I know many have prayed for her and I recall that 150 to 200 had a Rosary prayer meeting for her. This shows the outward feelings of love for her as well as faith placed in God. God heard all those prayers and voices requesting help for Sarah and He followed through for her.
I can only imagine the pain and worry that you have been through, Jimi. Sarah is a fortunate little girl in many ways...One of which is having you. May God's Blessings be with Sarah, you and family.
Newsome


 Comment Written 19-Nov-2013



reply by the author on 29-Nov-2013
    Newsome, once again sweet friend, thank you ever so much.. I am ever so humbled... jimi
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Dear Jimi,
A storm that definitely altered my own life. And yet with prayer and love miracles so small helped remind us the sun was still shinning behind that storm.
Thanks so much for sharing your journey with Sarah's healing.
Much love
Maureen
xo


 Comment Written 19-Nov-2013



reply by the author on 29-Nov-2013
    Maurenn, once again thank you ever so much. jimi
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Hi Jimi,
I'm so glad to hear that Sarah is on the road to recovery. I like the metaphor of a storm at sea being her illness. But you fooled me with the reference to "Captain". Of course, I assumed the Captain was God. But I think the Captain for you is Sarah herself.
I remember the Bible story in Mark 4:35-41 when Jesus calmed the storm.
That day when evening came, he said to his disciples, "Let us go over to the other side." Leaving the crowd behind, they took him along, just as he was, in the boat. There were also other boats with him. A furious squall came up, and the waves broke over the boat, so that it was nearly swamped. Jesus was in the stern, sleeping on a cushion. The disciples woke him and said to him, "Teacher, don't you care if we drown?"
He got up, rebuked the wind and said to the waves, "Quiet! Be still!" Then the wind died down and it was completely calm.
He said to his disciples, "Why are you so afraid? Do you still have no faith?"
They were terrified and asked each other, "Who is this? Even the wind and the waves obey him!"

When our first child was born, back in June of 1976, he had trouble breathing. They rushed him for x-rays right away, and told us that his liver and spleen were swollen for some unknown reason, and pressing against his lungs. After six days of tests, and no answers, the doctor at the Saint John General Hospital told us that we would have to take him to the Izaak Walton Killam Hospital for Sick Children in Halifax, Nova Scotia. They wanted us to take him by plane. We were stunned. But within 24 hours, we found ourselves in a strange city with our sick baby. We were in a "storm". Jesus was there in our boat, and we didn't even realize it, as we stumbled around in a daze. I can't begin to tell you all the ways He revealed Himself to us. But I will tell you this part.
The doctors were marvellous... Dr. Bagnell and Dr. White. One day, (we were there in Halifax for 10 days), they told us they were going to do a biopsy on Matthew's liver the following day. That night we lay in bed, realizing that Matthew's plight was out of our hands. There was nothing we could do, but pray. The storm was raging around us, yet the Captain was sleeping. We needed to wake Him up. What we really needed to do was understand that He was in control of our situation. He was there to help us. We decided to pray. I was a new Christian, 25 years old and just baptized on Easter Sunday that year. We had never prayed together before. But it was peculiar. We didn't plead for his life right aaway. We found ourselves thanking God for so many blessings during those last two weeks. We realized that He was there the whole time, right by our side. And then, as I prayed for Matthew, I had the strangest feeling. I've never experienced anything like it again. I found myself shrinking! My arms, legs, hands, feet... to the size of a baby! I know that in those seconds, God was healing Matthew. Now 37 years old, he is married (September/12) and in good health. He works out through the week at the YMCA, and not an ounce of fat on him. He is a graduate of the New Brunswick College of Craft & Design, where he specialized in Graphic Design. He has been employed with T4G for over ten years, their best "color man" and imager.
I guess you might say that Matthew was our boat that was about to sink. We were passengers in his boat, but the Captain was Jesus. We thought He wasn't an important passenger, but He revealed Himself to us on a grand scale. Provider. Healer. Deliverer.
I especially like this line,
"Today, twelve weeks out from this life-threatening storm, we rejoice greatly and we exhale." That says so much.
Bottom line, we can't avoid storms in this life. They will come. The important thing is to know the Captain.
We'll continue to pray for Sarah.
God Bless your family.

your friend,
Kimbob


 Comment Written 19-Nov-2013



reply by the author on 29-Nov-2013
    Kimbob, what a moving story. Thank you ever so much for sharing with me. Sarah is doing phenomenally. jimi

reply by Father Flaps on 29-Nov-2013
    I'm so glad to hear this news, Jimi!
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Children are so resilient and teach us so many life-lessons...so happy she is safely ashore and getting her land-legs. I loved how you used the quote for the "lesson" in the end. I also like the metaphor of Sarah being the captain of her ship. There are a few spots that could use editing and a few wordy spots, but overall, great job.


 Comment Written 18-Nov-2013



reply by the author on 29-Nov-2013
    maggieadams, thank you ever so mcuh for stoppng by to read about my dear granddaughter. She is a strong and inspirational sprite. After 14 weeks of hospitalization, 11 in ICU and 10 in a medically induced coma she has now come home as of Tuesday. again thank you... jlsavell
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