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You're the man! The versification is immaculate, as always, and you really are THE writer when it comes to analyzing the man-woman thing. Endlessly fascinating ...


 Comment Written 06-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 06-Feb-2014
    Thank you so much, my friend. Lots of time invested in the learning curve, so I appreciate the acknowledgment.
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Dedicated to Vanna White and Dick Clarke??

You are a gifted poet - there's no doubt about it.

I like the fact that you adhere strictly to the traditional forms, but imbue your poetry with such an avant garde flavour.

An accomplished student of the English language, evidently...

Sonali :)


 Comment Written 05-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
    Thank you so much, my friend, for the kind compliments. I really appreciate it. Avant Garde...I really like that!
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Impossible!You've met a smart woman who does not want to marry and have a kitchen carrier.Check her, she might be a man underneath; in the heart for sure...


 Comment Written 05-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
    I never even thought to check for an Adam's Apple, Albert. Be right back!

    Thank you very much! ;-)
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ExperiencingLiphe
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You gotta spin the wheel to find love and I wish you all the best. I went out with my fianc© not expecting anything more than dinner and a movie and now 3 1/2 years later we're planning a wedding. Great job with this


 Comment Written 05-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
    Congrats! Thank you very much for the review, and best wishes on your pending nuptials! David
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David: Oh, what spins the minds of men pursuing conquests to play then throw away. . .You still write like the Rogue but make it sound prettier. All of it is well written, however, and always a joy to see how you have written, "____ her" yet, another way, in another form. Linda


 Comment Written 05-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
    Thank you, Linda. I do try to cloak the ugly underbelly of the rogue on occasion. ;-) I'm trying to break the Guinness Book record for most different ways to say "_____ her". Much appreciated! David
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Maria C.
 
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This is going to take a while I can tell. So much to mention. What makes this overall is the wit in which it is written. The 14 syllable lines with internal rhymes between lines give it a strong sound. Good strong rhymes too. I have tried to find flaw in your meter, but of course that is not possible. Since I am lazy I am going to number your lines and say lines 1&2 are excellent. I like the wording "stiletto-chiseled truth." Also nicely worded are lines 7&8. I had to look up benumbing and of course it is a word. That couplet is very good too.
Well, you have done it again. I don't give up these sixes that easily, but I had to on this one too.
Blessings,
maria C.




 Comment Written 04-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
    Thank you VERY much, Maria, for the sixer, and for the specific references. I like to know what works as well as what doesn't.
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Love breaks then heals itself, breaks then heals agin, like an ever revolving wheel just like you described , its the perfect metaphor


 Comment Written 04-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
    Thank you very much, Dionysus!
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rumours of innuendos
 
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This is mind blowing to me. It is perfection. I am pretty damn good and I can't even fathom coming up with the sustained sense and perfect flow of this. It is not just the perfect wording either. It is also witty, charming and makes perfect sense and has a great message. It is just damn good. I shall print it out and eat it and hope for osmosis. mikey


 Comment Written 04-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
    I take a mind-blowing read as a very good thing, Mikey, and I really appreciate it. You've already got what it takes, but take what you need, my brother. Thank you.
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Hmmm. I believe a fourteener is Iambic Heptameter vs. Hectometer - which I think is a measurement of land equal to 100 meters...
Let me know if I am wrong (or right for that matter.)

A great poem none-the-less.
Superb use of multi-syllable words that do not confound the reader or the poem.

Rose.


 Comment Written 04-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
    Did I say Hectometer again? Jeez, my brain. Thanks, Rose. I'll change that.

    Thanks so much, my friend.
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Tatarka2
 
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The longer lines really work for me here. I don't know how this could possibly be improved. The message is so clear, and the reader feels with the poet. It also moves along so poetically and lyrically. Congratulations on a job very well done, in my opinion.


 Comment Written 04-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
    Thank you so much, my friend, for your generous use of the sixer, and for your wonderful comments. I really appreciate it!
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