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The Quietude of Love


Happy Valentine's Day...for real

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Yer killin' me. (I missed this one!) Now how in the heck am I supposed to roast that Rogue?

David, you are a master, and this is the most touching of poems - tender, sweet and so very real, it hurts. :)


 Comment Written 18-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 19-Feb-2014
    Exactly, Dawn. Just as you're ready to kill me, I'll do something that makes you want to kiss me, or both! :) You're very sweet, Dawn, and I truly appreciate you. Thank you.
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I was completely melted by the final verse in this poem. How sweetly you describe the kind of love that lasts a lifetime and undoubtedly evolves in different ways according to the various personalities of the two lovers. Your skill in observing and understanding human nature is obvious. Your ability to describe in poetic ways what you observe is phenomenal. I am constantly and repeatedly impressed.


 Comment Written 18-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014
    Thank you SO much, MissMerri, for your amazing review and for the sixer. This is one of my favorite poems that I've written, and it means a lot that it affected you in this way. There's nothing I enjoy more than chronicling what I see through my poetry.
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Your poetic observation is very moving. I think someone watching my husband and me out at a restaurant meal may also have a feeling that distance exists between us. However there is a very practical reason why we appear to converse little....he is deaf and hearing aids in a busy place intensify all the sound and don't really help under those conditions!


 Comment Written 17-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
    Thank you so much, persevere. You punctuate the point that many things are not what they appear. I appreciate your insight and great review.
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this is very well written, marillion, you did an excellent job writing this poem about the servitude found in true love. i spent the whole weekend with my husband at the hospital. he didn't want me to leave him so i slept (a little) in the recliner by his bed where he kept reaching out to hold my hand. last night i just broke down from being so tired and he just held me while i cried. i had to work tonight so i left at 300 and when i was almost home they called to tell me they released him. i got two hour sleep before i had to come in--now i have to go to the doctor myself tomorrow and i hope she doesn't give me a hard time like she did him because i need my medication


 Comment Written 17-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
    I know of what you speak, my friend, and my heart goes out to both of you. Please do get some rest, and I appreciate you reading my work despite what you're going through. You're in my thoughts.
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It's funny as I read this and realize that Donna and I are probably viewed that way by much younger people from time to time as we bicker over shopping at walmart and nothingness. But what you describe is exactly how it is. It is all those smaller things like the woven fabric of a shirt as opposed to the shiny buttons. Hey, the Rogue is an old softy, I'll never tell! mikey


 Comment Written 16-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 16-Feb-2014
    Please don't, Mikey, although that's exactly what made me post this one on Friday along with the rogue poem. I couldn't let Valentine's go by with just a rogue poem out there, so I posted this one. Thanks so much, my friend, for your understanding and appreciation of it.
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This is truly a wonderful piece on what love is. Flashy displays are not necessarily superficial but as we mature and time passes to test the meaning of what it is to continue loving day in and day out, "in good times and in bad," we deepen the meaning for ourselves. It become purer as we face and overcome trial just like the couple in your poem .Rubylou


 Comment Written 16-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 16-Feb-2014
    Thank you so much, Rubylou. I really appreciate your very kind words and great review! David
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Hello Marillion,
In the light of Author Notes,
Lovely piece of poetry beautifully depicting its theme!
Wording is simple, impressive, perfectly matching the theme.
Smooth and interesting flow.
Nice rhyming scheme with lively imagery and pictorial quality.
It displays the keen observation quality of the poet and it's worth appreciating.
The most striking lines are:
"...explained for good that truly knowing love
was not a grand display, like spring in France."
Excellent!


 Comment Written 16-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 16-Feb-2014
    Thank you so much, RPSaxena. I really appreciate it!
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Well, you definitely fell off the rogue wagon to capture what love is all about. That detail , smoothing the wrinkle in his jacket, the smile on his face- when you grow old together, sometimes not having much to say is just a comfort level set on high. This one really spoke to me. Just had a poetry reading , loud with , well, poetry and laughter...And the old couple sitting quietly at a table were my folks fresh from celebrating their 50th anniversary.


 Comment Written 16-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 16-Feb-2014
    Thank you so much, ravenblack, for the kind use of the sixer here, and your excellent review. Glad to know the couple now, my friend. A beautiful thing to see, really. :-)
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You've really captured a different dimension of couple love here. Valentine's emotion can so often be expressed in shallow, meaningless displays of commercial romantic fiction. But, yours is authentic. You've captured a moment in this old couple's life and sensitively described what you observed and the new understanding you came to after closer analysis. The poem showed a transition of feeling and knowing in the character of the voice; critical stuff in a good narrative. Your technical side of the poem is immaculate as per usual, but the one thing I really noticed was that the clever enjambment between many lines, gave the poem a true sense of prose, a story unfolding.....deceptively well done.


 Comment Written 16-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 16-Feb-2014
    Thanks so much, Mark, for your sixer, and for the great review, my friend. I really appreciate it! David
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Okay, this one is now my new favorite and sad wave goodbye to rogue -r-us. It is often to easy to allow the nature ease of mock or jest fill a moment, when comfortable silence can serve as well. Katz


 Comment Written 16-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 16-Feb-2014
    Thank you so much, Katz, for that sixer, and for the very kind words. I truly appreciate it.
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