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Pain

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Comment by
michaelcahill
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rumours and innuendos
rumours of innuendos
 
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So lines 7 & 8 have a feminine ending and "poem" is two syllables, right? OMG! I think I am actually sort of getting it. Hahaha. I love the content of this. No truer words were ever spoken than those last two lines. Half the time I wish she'd break my heart so I could write something good about it. Happy fairies dancing on rainbows get old quick. Love this, mikey


 Comment Written 18-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 19-Feb-2014
    By george, you're getting it! I'm not surprised, Mikey, and I appreciate it very much, my friend. I agree, happy joy joy poems get boring. It needs some meat pulled from the bone.
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A Jesterstear
 
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Yes big M. Why not take something negative and turn it into something positive, we should all do more of that. I can relate to this well written verse. AJ.


 Comment Written 18-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 19-Feb-2014
    Brother, thanks so much for catching up on my work. That means a lot.
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Congratulations! You get a six because this piece is FANTASTIC!
I wouldn't change anything on this one! I am floored! It held my attention all the way through! You amaze me ! Beautifully done!


 Comment Written 18-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014
    Thank you so much, darla, for your incredibly kind and enthusiastic review. I really appreciate it, and the sixer, too! David
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Thanks for writing.........I don't know why but hardship...pain ...makes writing better ..it's easy to win.....but to lose takes internal grit....to lose but come back a winner ....takes courage that is inner....yikes
God bless ...I did like the poem.


 Comment Written 17-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
    Thanks so much, Jenny, for your insights and great review. Pain seems to feel better than happy writing, and more powerful.
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Dirus
 
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Hi there,

nice job on this one. All grammar looks good. Nice choice of words on this poem keep up the good work. Thank you for the good read. Also I liked the picture. :)


 Comment Written 17-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
    Thank you very much!
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I like this poem much better then the one awhile before. For it flows a whole lot better swinging wide an open door. I can give you six stars for this one though it speaks of a love lost. As the person writes a lovely poem telling how he paid the cost.


 Comment Written 17-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
    Thank you very much, crookedtoes, for your kind review, and your generous awarding of a six-star review. Much appreciated. David

reply by crookedtoes on 18-Feb-2014
    You're very welcome!!! Dean
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Adri7enne
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Yep. Every poet relishes a broken heart. Nothing like it to get the ink flowing on a page. Some guys can write about a lost love decades after its demise. What would they write about if not their broken hearts and the women who did them wrong? Pain is, indeed, a great muse.

Loved the rhymes and the nice, easy rhythm. I enjoyed the read.


 Comment Written 17-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
    It's my strongest muse, Adrienne, even years after. Those emotions have so many triggers, just one can bring it all back. Many thanks for the great review! David

reply by Adri7enne on 17-Feb-2014
    I think men, in general, are much more romantic than women. We're more practical. We get back to the business of living much sooner. We're hard wired with that survival gene, and maybe it just makes us tougher. LOL!

reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014
    I would agree.
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Gert sherwood
 
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Hello Marillion
I can see why you got The Seal from Fs
Your writing is very smooth I like the flow and how you told us about your muse .and to me you seem happy she left?

Gert


 Comment Written 17-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
    Thank you very much, Gert. Yes, in this case I was, but the Muse remains. :)

reply by Gert sherwood on 17-Feb-2014
    Mine likes to take off once in awhlie
    Smiles
    Gert

reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
    As long as they don't go far, my friend. :)

reply by Gert sherwood on 17-Feb-2014
    smiles
    Gert
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Alan K Pease
 
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This is a poem that I can laugh at with tongue in cheek. Once I fell in love with a young baresta (coffee house vintage). My productivity in writing increased sharply although as in your poem's case she didn't respond in any way except a friendly professionalism. After a short while I got over it. My writing is not as often as I would like, but my poems are well received.


 Comment Written 17-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
    Baristas are sexy, Alan, so I know the attraction. Friendly professionalism is a good way to say courteous disinterest, isn't it? Thanks very much, my friend. I hear you! :-) David
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Excellent photo that complements your poem very well. Nicely rhyming. And then some internal rhyme. You wrote about your muse that left you. Well, she is here now.


 Comment Written 17-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
    Thank you so much, my friend. She'll always be here, Ine. :-)
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