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The Muse You Never Lose


Pain

  48 total reviews 
Comment by
Righteous Riter
 
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Good use of the aabb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good alliteration with pen/paper...symbolic/sleet...coldly/coincided...haunted/him. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.


 Comment Written 17-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
    Thank you so much, RR. I appreciate it!
Comment by
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Rondeno
 
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I'd love to know how you do it. Complex rhymes, demanding rhythm ... yet it all reads as naturally as (educated) speech. My personal test of a poet is to what extent he/she has to distort the English language, in order to meet the requirements of the chosen meter. In your case, it's all so deliciously tension-free.


 Comment Written 17-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
    Too kind, my friend, to expend two sixes on me so quickly. Thank you so much, Mike,and I would appear that you and I measure poets in the same way. I hate reverse syntax, and if it doesn't read naturally it's one of those poems that fails the form it attempts to display. Many thanks.
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Great musical meter throughout to describe being enlightened by a muse - all to no avail in the end with his love life, though I suspect many happy times before that, David.

Loads of multi-syllable words for even better flow, and top intelligent and apt vocabulary choices, without being too ponsy.

ALL your poems are worthy of sixers, but I have to share them out a bit, so please take this as a virtual.

Best wishes, Ted



 Comment Written 17-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
    Understood, my friend, and just as grateful. Many thanks, Ted, for your always appreciated thoughts.
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The muse, as the woman, is a necessary evil. You can't live with them, you can't survive without them. We men are a cursed and blessed species...Yet you know that all too well..


 Comment Written 17-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
    Thank you so much, my friend. Sorry I haven't finished reading your latest. Today, I hope.

reply by comanalbert on 17-Feb-2014
    No problem....
Comment by
sweetwoodjax
 
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this is very well written, marillion, you did an excellent job writing this quatrain poem about the muse that got up and left when the heart turned cold. i enjoyed reading it


 Comment Written 17-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
    Once again, my friend, thank you so much! David
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He's better when he's losing, and he's better when he is- why is it that it is much easier to write when in emotional turmoil or under duress? It is the muse you never lose, but if it went, what would be left to write? I don't see you doing unicorns and flowers.


 Comment Written 16-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
    Good question, and I wish I knew how to bottle it for inspiration without the emotional stress of it all, my friend. Thank you for your insightful comments, my friend.
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A masterfully written poem.
Good use of alliteration .
Excellent internal and end rhymes
Loved this line most
He sensed a flame inside her and it warmed him into winter,


 Comment Written 16-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
    Thank you so much, emr!
Comment by
catch22
 
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Hi Marillion, I have no idea what this poem's about, but its very soulful and filled with a sad wisdom. Yes, writing's been a coping tool for me for a long time, and has gotten me through some tough times. Your muse sounds like a complicated gal, but you've stuck by her and she by you, through good and bad. The poem itself is exquisite and I really think you've started a trend here on FS with these longer metered lines. Excellent work.


 Comment Written 16-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
    What a wonderful review, Gail. Thank you so much, my friend! I really appreciate the sixer, and your very kind comments. I love my Muse, even when she frustrates and saddens me. Yes, I've noticed a lot of these since I started them, and I'm glad to have hit on something people like.
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This is just amazing. I love the rhyming, which almost sounds like a song, it flows so lyrically. I'm so envious - I don't know how you do this, so prolifically. I've resolved not to give you all my 6's this week, so it's a 5 for now, (but a virtual 6, I think).


 Comment Written 16-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 16-Feb-2014
    No worries, my friend. I appreciate that in your eyes I earn so many of them, and I appreciate your kind words and great reviews. Thank you!
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Oh goodie, more ammo to use against the Rogue!! What's that you say? This isn't the Rogue, but that other guy, David? Goll-dangit! Two different people ... sigh. ;-)

As always your poem reads out to perfection. You make a good point that pain is always present and by definition making it the muse that we never lose. That's one of the many reasons I like your poetry so much, David, is your writes consistently contain seeds of truth, a whole truck load of beauty all wrapped up in an eloquent bow.

Very nicely written dear one.

Gloria


 Comment Written 16-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 16-Feb-2014
    Feel free to try, Gloria, at your own peril. ;-)

    You're very sweet, my friend...at least to David, and this man appreciates you so much for your insight, wisdom, and your beauty. Come to think of it, the rogue likes you quite a bit, too. :)

    Thank you, Gloria. I DO appreciate it.
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