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The perils of drunk-dialing

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Oh, this is an extremely hard lesson to learn. I know two people that have fallen victim to the "demon spirits" - thankfully, I am not one of them.

Very much like your poem and it really is a cautionary tale for those that frequently imbibe.

AT=/


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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
    Neither am I, thankfully, but I've been on the other side, and they're embarrassing to get, too. Thank you, my friend.
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This is a very clever scene - you SHOULD try it (smiling). I wonder how many turn out this way verses another, more passionate way. I guess it depends on the delivery. I am smiling a bit because I read another poem or story about someone who did this to multiples and got positive response from most of them - which is another problem.

Anyway, about your poem - it is very well written, flows perfectly. Your passion for language and writing are very evident.

And your ideas for the story are nicely creative - I have not read many of yours, yet (not many of anyone's yet). I am sure you must have some spicy ones in there, too - even if not from experience.


 Comment Written 23-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
    I think I'll just write about it, garçon. :) Thanks so much. Yes, there's quite a bit of spice in there, mostly in my Rogue series. I appreciate the look!

reply by Cycler on 23-Feb-2014
    OK .. I will look up Rogue! Thanks!
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Bummin', and way to lose a good friend. Now she's going to have to avoid him like the plague because this is beyond the friend-zone. Hopefully he wasn't her professor or something or there goes that class down the tubes.

Seriously, David, this is quite fun. Nobody and I mean nobody should ever drink the wicked whiskey, not even rarely. I'm still hoping I get more. I mean more from the lucky leprechaun certificate. ;-)

Gloria


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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
    You nailed it, Gloria. The poem, that is. ;-) Thanks so much, my friend. As always, you "get it", and I truly appreciate that.
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Glad it wasn't a true story. Still, you've managed to capture what must be a common experience in a whimsical, yet realistic and lyrical way. Good job.


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reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
    Thank you very much, Tatarka!
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First of all, great picture! Secondly, a great sonnet and thus is love and loss for many people. Best wishes to you, david. Pete :)


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    Thank you very much, my friend. I really appreciate it, Pete!
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rumours and innuendos
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Well, it is for a host of other people. Hahaha. I hate the phone, thank God. I don't even like conversation! I made it through high school by being dark and mysterious. It works. Great piece. The language of this makes it so hilarious. The eloquence of the piece compared to the doltish approach of the subject is perfection. Love it. I was going to say juxtaposition, but it sounded pretentious! mikey


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    Be pretentious anytime, Mikey. I'll just summon the rogue to explain it to me, as he knows. ;-) Many thanks, brother.
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OUCH. LOL. I would hazard a guess that the object of his affections did not appreciate his late-night, drunken call. "I see" is not very encouraging, let alone the dial tone...:)


 Comment Written 22-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
    Yes, I think he should have known at that point, don't you? Thanks so much, my friend. :) I hope you're having a great weekend.

reply by Ideasaregems-Dawn on 22-Feb-2014
    Hahahaha - I suspect the "Nightcap" had much to do with his lack of understanding. Thank you, David - I hope your weekend is good too.
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Good perception of a dilemma. There isn't anything good that can happen to a guy who is, at once, under the influences of booze and solitude. Deadly combination. Well done.

Bill


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    Amen, Bill. Thanks so much, my friend.
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Excellent iambs and sonnet rhyme/structure, David. Very original 'feel' for a sonnet too, rather than the usual flowery romantic stuff, though you still manage 'unrequited love' in the theme.

I'm rather confused by her rebuff in view of the fact I sensed she WANTED to hear his words of love -

'Until she knew he felt the same way, too'

Oh well, women are strange for sure. :-)

Excellent!

Best wishes, Ted



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reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
    Thanks so much, Ted. The line you refer to is more or less explained in the previous line, albeit subtly. He was hoping she was holding back until this moment, and was obviously wrong, as we men often are. That being said, you're so write about their strangeness.

reply by Domino 2 on 22-Feb-2014
    Thanks for the explanation, David. I see what you mean now. Ted

reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
    That damnable enjambment can be confusing as to intent, brother.

reply by Domino 2 on 22-Feb-2014
    I'm easily 'confused' - I just like to sometimes pretend I'm not. :-)
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Yeah yeah not a bio. You are so full of it. I KNEW I shouldn't have given you my number hahaha.
Sorry hun but your bold pronouncement via the old telling bone sure hit a sour note. LMAO
With that said, I do like the way you take an uncomfortable situation / rejection and give it the 15 minutes of fame it so thoroughly deserves. Haha
Sirriusly, great job. Remind me NOT to give you my skype handle...now go sequest someone else in slurry yet expert iambics. LOL
Cheers P


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reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
    Too funny, my friend. Thanks so much, P. I had a great time with this one...which doesn't seem right, considering the misery of the protagonistic antagonist. :-)

    Hmmm...skype. Now THERE'S an idea you don't want to follow through with.

reply by closetpoetjester on 22-Feb-2014
    Not a chance hun.
    Not a f**kin chance.

    Hell would have to freeze over. Then again, I'm sure you've got something in your repertoire to alleviate that. roite?
    LMAO

reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
    Let's just say that I have the key to the boiler room of Hell, so if I really need to create a miracle... ;-)

reply by closetpoetjester on 22-Feb-2014
    Ooh the plot thickens...I knew I could count on you.

    Is there NOTHING you won't tackle?

reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
    Well, I won't say there's NOTHING, but I will say there's NOBODY I won't tackle if I feel it's worth the lumps, bumps, and bruises. :-)

reply by closetpoetjester on 22-Feb-2014
    Well between your man bump and my lady lumps there's gonna be a lotta bruising.

    Mmmmm.

reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
    Count on it.

reply by closetpoetjester on 23-Feb-2014
    Oh I had. LMAO
    Quite a few times, actually. LMAO
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