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I am a rock!

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Petriesan
 
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glad it is not biographical


Paul SImon has a gift with words. . .

you finished them off in a different direction and did them justice



 Comment Written 24-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
    Thank you so much, my friend.
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fairydancer
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be yourself
 
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Some clever word play here, Marillion. Good rhymes, rhythm, and sonnet form.
I particularly liked these lines:
"I am an island, too, and gone to stone?
A toad too heavy for its lily pad."
Great poem :)


 Comment Written 24-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
    Thank you so much, fairydancer, for your nice review. :)
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Hey you. A good poem of the way we can all feel at some point. Well, for me the point is today. Homesick and wanted ice cream.
And one of my favoirte horses is being put down as I write this...life.

I am the rubble, Simon, roped with kelp,

Beyond all light, all sight, and calls for help.


 Comment Written 24-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
    Thank you so much, Pad, for taking some time with my work today, and for your excellent review on what I'm sure is a tough day. I'm so sorry to hear of the loss of your horse. My sincerest condolences.
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Dawn of Tomorrow
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Always dreaming
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Do you know how hard it is to keep up with reading your work? Take a weekend off every now and again, would ya? LOL I like this one. Kind of sad, not a very good way to feel about oneself but I do understand where this comes from. Nice job working on those old forgotten lines.


 Comment Written 24-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
    Sorry, my friend. The muse has been in my ear constantly, and I just wrote a sonnet at lunch. As always, JL, thank you! D
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Nice job on this one. I liked the rhyme you used. good choice of words. Thank you and keep up the nice work. I liked second to the last part the most. :)


 Comment Written 24-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
    Thank you very much for the great review, Dirus.
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Alan K Pease
 
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Simon says stake one step backward and two steps forward. Your poem was at least three steps forward describing Simon's lyrics and an encounter with life deep in the sea. Many deep sea creatures are engineered not to be easily seen by predators above or below by having light organs along their sides that break up their outline. The pattern of the light pores also define species and potential mates so be careful where you land.


 Comment Written 24-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
    Thanks so much, Alan, for your insights and your great review. I appreciate it.
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A clever play on a well known song. Quite the twist and makes this piece stand out strongly. Definitely can identify with the piece. Great description both for the mind to picture and for the heart to feel. Well done.


 Comment Written 24-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
    Thank you very much, ragamuffin, for the great review.
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Kashif Ali Abbas
 
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?I am a rock!? Paul Simon would intone.

?I am an island!? he went on to add.

I am an island, too, and gone to stone?

A toad too heavy for its lily pad.[ liked the style and poetic flow, good read]]

K


 Comment Written 24-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
    Thank you for the review, K.
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This one resonates strongly for me, David. Such a heartfelt, deep place you describe, as only others who have visited there can relate entirely to.

It's a change of meaning, but when I read through (the first time) I unconsciously made a word switch on this line:

and I'm afraid I'll sink, submerge, and drown,
and I'm (resigned to) sink, submerge, and drown,

There are some dark places we visit in our lives where even fear gets left behind.

Wonderful and poignant,

Christina


 Comment Written 23-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
    Thank you so much, my friend, for your amazing review and for that coveted sixer. I appreciate it all so much, and I LOVE that word suggestion. I gratefully accept it, and will integrate it right now. D
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J. P. Egry
 
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Interesting that you say it isn't autobiographical "right now". I can understand the feeling, because you're right, we've all had this feeling at least once. Metaphors abound that give the poem depth of feeling and make it sing (even if a sad song). The last stanza is deftly original, poetic and a very powerful edging. Excellent read.


 Comment Written 23-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
    Thank you so much for your great review, J.P. and for your understanding of the emotional application of the conceit. Much appreciated.

reply by J. P. Egry on 24-Feb-2014
    You're welcome. Sorry about the misspelling in my review. edging should be ending.

reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
    I knew what you meant. :)
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