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I am a rock!

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May be as you drift you'll see the Beatles in their yellow submarine....
I love Paul Simons song . My teacher taught us poetry using Simon and Art Garfunkel songs ...I am a rock was one....well done..glad it's not biographical...you would need some serious kelp..
God bless


 Comment Written 23-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
    You never know, Jenny. I'll be on the lookout for that and Davy Jones' locker. :) Many thanks for your nice review, and the smile.
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Excellent! I loved the content and presentation. Yes, all of us have felt so down that we can't see the light. You have composed a terrific view of what depression feels like. Drowning in a dark, deep sea sums it up perfectly.
deb


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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
    Thank you SO much, Deb, for your great review, and for your kind awarding of a sixer. I really appreciate it.
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Good use of the sonnet rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with kelp/help. Good alliteration with toad/too...sink/submerge...that/they. Good complimentary photo followed by some creative thinking.


 Comment Written 23-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
    Thanks so much, RR. I appreciate the review.
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Hi Marillion,

I liked this poem and it is almost lyrical the way you picked up Paul Simon's tune. I agree that we all must feel the island sinking at one time or another. But remember: "A rock feels no pain. And an island never cries." ;) Chrisfiore


 Comment Written 23-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
    Thank you very much, Chris. I appreciate the great review! Yes, part of my conceit was proving Paul wrong with the other lyrics. :)
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Yes, some more than others...made me think about changing my will and sleep with the fishes instead of being cremated...
I love the Shakesperian style.First read at you...


 Comment Written 23-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
    Thanks so much, Albert. I'm not sure that's a good idea, my friend.
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Hi, Dave. True enough. We have all been in this position at some time or other in our lives. sink or swim, I maintain. good metaphorical writing, my friend. Bob


 Comment Written 23-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
    Thanks so much, Bob, for the great review!
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I really enjoyed this piece, Marillion. The last quatrain was one of the best you've done. Really loved the imagery in it. Have a six pack.


 Comment Written 23-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
    Thanks so much, Chas. I really appreciate it!
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Not biographical...right now? Your author notes occasionally are as good as your poems.

Favorite line(s) I am the rubble, Simon, roped with kelp - and: A toad too heavy for its lily pad.

You continue to impress me with your word skills. Well done Rogue.

AT=/

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 Comment Written 23-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
    Thanks so much, AT. I appreciate it, my friend.
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Good job writing a metaphorical poem that's filled with imagery, easy to follow, & conjuring up thoughts about a host of life experiences for most people. I'm not 100% behind the use of the song, as I feel the ocean theme is the more compelling aspect. Thanks for sharing.

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 Comment Written 23-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
    The ocean theme is overdone on its own, so I see no harm in adding to it. Thank you.

reply by barleygirl on 23-Feb-2014
    *smile*
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Another beauty! The ideal teaching-tool for anyone who doesn't understand "show, don't tell". I just love "roped with kelp"! Depression, melancholy - this is how to depict them!


 Comment Written 23-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
    Thanks so much, Mike! I really appreciate that, my friend.
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