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The Tripod Of Priapus


It's FRY (the rogue) DAY

  25 total reviews 
Comment by
L K Pinaire
 
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Nice. A little strange but a fun read. Better than a cane. For what this is, I think it works. Best of luck to you.

Good Writing,

Larry


 Comment Written 03-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
    Larry, your line about the cane cracks me up. Thank you so much, my friend, and I'm delighted to see your name pop back up again. Hope you'll be around.
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Donya Quijote
 
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Oh my! My favorite rogue has taken his fan for a walk on the wild side!

I popped in on Friday while at school again during a lull in the day to see how the Friday frying was going. I clicked on your poem only to be greeted by the notice of age restricted material behind the door. I didn't dare open it then.

After my day's labor was done I thought I'd take a peek believing that there was a hidden gem worth the wait behind, but as the screen filled with your posting I found my eyes had been pierced by a schlong having more meat on it than poor Priapus ever had been his ears. Thus, my old prudish defenses (my nick name while in the Navy was the Nun) were raised and forced me to retreat. Where on earth did you find that picture?

After a brief respite and recovery I thought I would take another another peek as curiosity and a good sense of humor got the better of me.

I must admit the I found this devilish romp through the henhouse quite amusing and engaging. I found myself laughing and inside I still am as I write this review. I only hope that I am able to read the rebuttals of the three called out hens.

It is your internal rhymes and your oft unique references to that beloved part of the male anatomy that I find most engaging in this romp. Every stanza is replete with examples and a few have one in every line. You are a true word artist.

Tone is both humorous and daring, as indirectly or directly you challenge the hens to more verbal banter. There is a bouncy feels also to this ditty, a product of your meter.


The mention of saltpeter as a way to curb the male libibo made me bust out with a howling laugh. It was a rumor when I boot camp that the scrambled eggs were laced with saltpeter for that very purpose. Two recruits, however, were subsequently caught in the act the of a dangerous liaison. When someone ask how it was possible with saltpeter in the eggs, the two replied that they hadn't had a serving of scrambled eggs. At the time they were caught, they had been at the camp four weeks. Boot camp is eight weeks.

I'm sure that this naughty, slightly raunchy post will ruffle a few feathers. Take heart and don't become deflated and sullen over the criticism of a few naysayers and humorless. The nun gives you her stamp of approval, a six if she could...


 Comment Written 01-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
    You make me laugh, Donya! :) Sorry for the shocking revelation with the pic. I just googled Priapus and there it was in all it's glory.

    What a great review, and I truly appreciate it. I also appreciate that you took this poem in the intended manner and can recognize the difficulty of crafting this, despite its whimsical nature. It means more than I can say to receive your stamp of approval, and your words carry a greater weight than most. Thank you, Donya!
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Some shocking reviews you received on this my friend. I had to take a break before I could review this. My initial response was to fall out of my chair laughing and while there bow to the amazing skill it took to compose this. I almost feel like one upping it in some private messages to some select reviewers, but I guess I have become slightly wiser over the years. But, not much!! Well, I enjoyed the hell out of it even though it appears I will be going there for reading it. The laughter was worth it!! mikey


 Comment Written 01-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
    Yes, it was a bit of a disappointing day, Mikey, but I guess it was inevitable that I would once again draw the ire of those who have stilted views of art, as well as parameters.

    I appreciate your defense, my friend, and that you even considered doing so. I'll see you in hell, brother.
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Hey big M, it was worth the wait. You should have made it Rogue Sundays instead of Fridays you would be bathing in yellow stars. Brilliant, funny, thanks for infecting me with the penis envy that will probably haunt me for the rest of my life. Excellent. AJ.


 Comment Written 01-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
    It's such a divisive series, my friend, that I'm not sure about that, but I sincerely appreciate your support.Thank you.
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David, David, David...absolutely a brilliant, bawdy post. Love it.

Took me a bit to read since I concentrated on your artwork for a bit, but when I finished I was not disappointed.

You have a masterful command of the language and I am always amazed at your rhyming ability - with the most obscure words. I must admit I will have to leave the ripostes to the other ladies since this is well beyond my reach - but, at least I can enjoy the fray without being in the center.

Terrific work on this one! Oh, if you need help in finding more artwork give me a - heads up!

AT=/


 Comment Written 01-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
    AT, you're cracking me up. Thank you very much, my friend, for your kind and entertaining review!

reply by Acquired Taste on 01-Mar-2014
    I try - perhaps sometime I'll post some of my satirical work. For that I usually get comments like: great writing, bitchy broad! Am just a sweetie at heart. AT=/
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this is excellent writing, marillion, and I want to roll in the mud with you but my upbringing won't allow me to post a ribald reply to your post, lol. I just can't do that but it did bring some responses to mind.


 Comment Written 01-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
    I understand, my friend, but thank you all the same for your review.
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Aw geez, Marillion. It's a funny poem. Rhymes and has a pleasing meter. Lots of metaphor and innuendo. Funny funny funny. And thanks for putting the NSFW labels on it.


 Comment Written 01-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
    Thank you very much, my friend. Even with the labels, I still catch flak.
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LOL Speaking of raunchy wads...holy snappin' willy-nillies Batman...no, no hang on, Superman! My my what magnitude...what range...my god what a sterling piece of manhood on display here. I THINK I get the tripod thingy now haha. No doubt the moralists will have your sexy hide for this one, my Pygantisaurus...but look, the warning is there, it's a bit of fun for chrissake and to be quite honest...as far as lyrical stoushes go, this is quite a brilliant serving up to the ladies. They will love this I'm sure. What inspiration!
Your poetical endowment is certainly appreciated, I know the gravity of these sorts of writes...I've done a couple myself but as a 45 year old woman who NOW knows what she actually wants to read, write and be-mused by, you my friend are a serious contender for Naughtysville. Your talent is downplayed by the content (in some peoples eyes) and thats a crying shame.
Anyone can see the verbiage and absolute fun contained and I'm thinking this is perhaps a serious case of fuddy-fuckin-duddy syndrome, anal retention...OR just plain iambic envy. Hey, I always said you give great meter...haha
I think you're sense of fun not only titillates, but excites, inspires and at the very least gets a few of the ladies wet. Christ knows we f**king need it. Did I just say that? Yep, it appears I did. Good day to the moralists! *waving madly*
You're the whole package mate...as a poet, I mean...your range is phenomenal not to mention girth and lenghth...indeed you're right, we'll NEVER keep down salt peter...so what's the point in trying? That's why I've bowed out of Fry-days...I realised I'm quite simply wasting my time! haha
So anyways...as long as you keep that stash of blue pills hun, we'll be wet and rolling in the isles at FS. Don't EVER stop being yourself...I've just had to recently bitchslap our missing one from the trio and tell her to let it all hang out. I can do nothing but that and at times it gets me barely any reviews but boy...the ones I DO get are worth it.

Anyway, it's about time we had some fuckin' entertainment around here. And you're it, baggy eyes! Well, maybe a couple of others haha No hints now!!
I'm now heading off to try and wipe the smile off my face and to view that image that is now burned permanently onto my retinas of a camera stand that just ain't layin down. Your flawless rhythm well, not to mention racy narrative got this well and truly past go!
Although you better tell slick to get to the fuckin hairdresser...NOT that I was checking out that head! LM(.)(.)OFF
Great post. Favourite stanzas: any that mentioned Paula LOL, also your proprietry of prickness and the unforgettable banana rig. I know some aren't gonna want to hear this but this is seriously some of your best work. I feel like me, you dip a toe, shit, maybe a foot in the water...stir it around a fair bit and take the reader on a ride to the edge of Titillationsville, but without quite turning the erotic aspect onto the seedy road into Porn City. Again Dave, so well done. Forget the haters, mate...you have SO many more lovers! hahaha
You have a least one fan here. I'll help keep that tripod upright ANYtime...metaphorically speaking of course...
Hugs P


 Comment Written 28-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
    Thank you, P, for feeling my pain, my friend. As always, your reviews and comments in general are a work of art in and of themselves, and I always get that 'lift" when you pop in. So glad you liked it. Though it's lighter fare, it's not easy fare, as you well know, and I'm grateful to your fine self for recognizing that.

reply by closetpoetjester on 01-Mar-2014
    Nope not easy at all I wouldn't think. Well I just got penilised for using the f bomber and perfect iambics.
    For chrissake, when will people realise there is an art to swearing?

    There is an art to Naughty mate, and you are well endowed with talent...grrrrr.
    X

reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
    As are you, m'lady. Unbelievable that someone graded it down for an F-bomb that went perfectly for the tone.

reply by closetpoetjester on 01-Mar-2014
    What you do my friend is just RISE above it.
    Or to meet it.
    Which I ultimately did. I just revamped it and put it in the last line...so now it's

    I'm FUCKING tired!

    I think that review seriously helped me improve it...haha. Maybe I'll cut and paste that improvement and pm him with it...heehee

reply by closetpoetjester on 01-Mar-2014
    What you do my friend is just RISE above it.
    Or to meet it.
    Which I ultimately did. I just revamped it and put it in the last line...so now it's

    I'm FUCKING tired!

    I think that review seriously helped me improve it...haha. Maybe I'll cut and paste that improvement and pm him with it...heehee

reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
    Or you should post "Thank you, Huge Anus" on his page. That's what his name sounds like, anyway.

reply by closetpoetjester on 01-Mar-2014
    LM(_|_)OFF

    And don't I just lurve you?
    Yes, indeedy Clarke.

    THANKS mate. Your support is a wonderful ASSet to me. I'm gonna take my own advice and forget the haters. Well, the swear pot haters! LOL

    PBooty
    x

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Green Lake Girl
 
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Okay, you've outdone yourself on this one. It took me 15 minutes just to get past the "artwork"! His hair-do is a little weird, but I can get past that.

Seriously, you are a very skilled writer. I know it's not easy writing anything, even "silliness", which actually is still a decent read. Very funny and entertaining. I look forward to "Fry-Days". As you can tell, I didn't throw together a short story in spite of my "threats". I ran out of time. :)


 Comment Written 28-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
    Thanks so much, GLG, for your kind words, and I'm glad you were entertained, as that's what this is about. I appreciate that.
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Just2Write
 
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Well, well - what a mighty endowment on Priapus. Most women would faint if they knew they would be its sheath.

I can't think of a thing to say. You've left me speechless.

LOL
Rose.


 Comment Written 28-Feb-2014



reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
    I would imagine it would be hard to talk if it were being sheathed, too, my friend. Thank you for taking a look, and for taking it in the manner intended.

reply by Just2Write on 28-Feb-2014
    Oh, I did think of that you naughty thing.
    And yes, I did think of how so formidable a weapon could still fill the mouth when inserted elsewhere.

reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
    :)
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