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Behold This Child


For my godson's christening

  65 total reviews 
Comment by
Carolyn Reaves
 
 
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This work has reached the exceptional level
I enjoyed reading this. Your feelings are expressed well in the verses. The words seem to flow from the pen to gather your thoughts nicely. You have done a great job with this.


 Comment Written 25-Oct-2018


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Gert sherwood
 
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Hello Marillion
Sorry I'm so late reading your lovely poem
(Behold this Child)
when you said-

We hold this child -- and see ourselves
As we were long ago,
Before that cage of time and rage
Became our mortal foe.
Nice (very nice)

Gert


 Comment Written 07-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
    Thank you so much, Gert! I appreciate it very much.

reply by Gert sherwood on 08-Mar-2014
    you are welcome
    Gert
Comment by
L K Pinaire
 
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This is beautiful. The words flow delicately and the rhymes echo against each other. Very nice. Thanks for sharing. I enjoyed this very much.


 Comment Written 07-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
    Larry, thank you so much, my friend. Great to see you coming around again, and I appreciate the kind words.
Comment by
nancyjam
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This may be "simple" in your view but it
is none-the-less a heartfelt ode to the beauty, innocence
and promise of a child.
I can't help but think he and his parents will treasure
your gift.
It is an exquisite piece. Nancy


 Comment Written 06-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
    Thank you so much, Nancy. I appreciate that.
Comment by
Starlit Ink
 
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This is a nice poem for his christening, and one that he can cherish the rest of his life. You show in your poem how important one life is, and how special it is that he is beginning a journey. Every child is a precious miracle to behold.


 Comment Written 06-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
    Thank you so much, Starlit. I really appreciate it!
Comment by
Emeka13
 
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I don't usually like writing poetry on demand but on a few occasions that I did, I like what came out of it. This, though not your typical style has come out straight from the heart and powerful. 'Behold this child -- entreat your hearts

With faith and hope compiled,

To raise each glass, and wish en masse

For love to hold this child.' I like how you ended '...for love to hold this child. We can't go wrong with love. Well done. Emeka




 Comment Written 06-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
    Thank you so much, Emeka! Now that I've done it, I'm glad I did.
Comment by
Angel Blessings
 
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Excellent home. Excellent presentation. Your versus flowed very easily and the meaning was actually presented by the imagery of your work! Thank you for sharing this lovely piece. Sincerely, Angel Blessings


 Comment Written 06-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
    Thank you so much, Angel Blessings!
Comment by
Visheshta Dahiya
 
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a lovely and a really cute poem.
the message is beautiful. the use of simple and sweet words make the poem more interesting.i loved the paragraph
"We hold this child -- and see ourselves
As we were long ago,
Before that cage of time and rage
Became our mortal foe."
best wishes
Visheshta


 Comment Written 06-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
    Thank you very much, Visheshta.

reply by Visheshta Dahiya on 06-Mar-2014
    welcome :)
Comment by
robina1978
 
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It might not be like your usual work but still very beautiful and utmost suitable for the christening. He looks gorgeous in the photo.


 Comment Written 06-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
    Than you so much, my friend.
Comment by
2014 Script Writer Of The Year
Rondeno
 
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You know what? I think that occasional verse is the hardest of all to write. How to make it fresh and original? How to steer clear of cliche? How to combine sincere feelings with a certain formal dignity, which the occasion requires?

THIS is how.

Every time I read something of yours, I admire you more.


 Comment Written 06-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
    Mike, once again, you truly flatter me, my friend. I feel like I could become a penny poet and write these all day. Nice of you to say it's not cliche, since I do feel it's a rather a common poem.
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