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Lost Angelino: Hollywood 101


The sights and sounds...

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Comment by
paulah60
 
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Your words absolutely capture the essence of this mixed demography...although, it's only really 'mixed' on the surface. Their agenda's the same and is driven by insecurity. I have visited and found it equal parts fascinating and uncomfortable. But I guess when you see it every day, you would become inured to it and bored with it.
Masterfully illustrated as always, David!
Cheers
Paula


 Comment Written 10-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 11-Mar-2014
    Thank you so much, my friend, for this sixer and for your spot-on review! Bored is one word for it, and irritated is another. I don't miss THAT part of L.A., that's for sure. I appreciate you, Paula!
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It's probable that you may the only fool whose lost on the 101, but it's just as probable that you are the only one who knows it. This is a fun write, full of vivid descriptions of the LA scene. We only get to see this in film and TV, but the cast of characters seems just about right. Your great verse made it easy to swing from image to image. I liked: The nouveau riche -- in their Italian toys.. I can just see the bald headed middle aged gut driving the red Ferrari;The pimped-up rides had chromed-out, spinning spokes....oh, those guys with egos pumped up to match their technological windbags..
Great fun, David.


 Comment Written 10-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
    Thanks so much, Mark. I appreciate your vision, my friend, and your enjoyable review.
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Walter L. Jones
 
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Cause to look past words and feel the write, so much we share in the wisdom granted to a group of lines, it is a trip to a place and time that bends way past the moment, your gift adds a flair to the picture, with perfect form..
Walt


 Comment Written 09-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 09-Mar-2014
    Thank you so much, my friend. As always, I truly appreciate it.
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I think you have found a very unique way of expressing yourself. Your word choices are creative and effective in getting your point across. Pic works great as an accent to your work:)


 Comment Written 09-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 09-Mar-2014
    Thank you very much, Patsy, for your great review.
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Cycler
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Nice, clever poem. It has a great rhythm to it and flows very well - telling a nice story of the 101. I enjoyed the ride ... you write very well.


 Comment Written 09-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 09-Mar-2014
    Thanks so much, garçon. I appreciate it your great review.
Comment by
The Death
 
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Film industry is very charming. It can transform one's life fully. But, all that glitters is not gold. It has the dark side too.
Excellent rhyming and perfect meter.
You have well shared your experience here.
It is witty and satirical as well. You make nice commentary here.
I enjoyed reading it.


 Comment Written 09-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 09-Mar-2014
    Thank you very much, my friend. I appreciate it!
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Katzintx
 
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As always your form and meter is well structured. The content is universal "lost and stuck in traffic..." wonder where you all are bound--Am I the only fool who's truly lost?"
lol..gotta love that..katz


 Comment Written 08-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 09-Mar-2014
    Thank you so much, Katz!
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So very accurate. This has been my stomping ground for most of my life. That is how it looked, looks and will probably always look. I doubt many realize that they are lost and that is where the poignancy hits me as I read this. It is a dream world and a world of dreams at the same time. I don't always feel lost when I probably should, but I think that is okay as long as it isn't a permanent state. Everyone needs a drink sometimes, right? mikey


 Comment Written 08-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 09-Mar-2014
    I was hoping you'd get to this one, Mikey, just to see if I captured it well. Many thanks, my friend, for the validation! David

    Absolutely have a drink, and tip one to me.
Comment by
Tatarka2
 
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I love the way you make rhyming seem so natural and also paint such a vivid "word-picture" with just a few well-chosen words. It seems effortless to the reader, but I know how difficult it is. Congratulations - you have captured the spirit of the 101 near Hollywood (I lived there about an aeon ago). A lovely, lyrical poem with an unexpected ending.


 Comment Written 08-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 09-Mar-2014
    Thanks AGAIN, my friend, for catching up on all my work since you've been away. Ahh, another veteran of the 101. I love it there, but hate it, too, if that makes sense.
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Good stuff, good stuff. I sometimes wonder if you're capable of writing a bad poem. :P

Love the mental image of the nouveau riche in their Italian toys and the stoners riding in groups, sharing a toke. Very nicely done, sir.

Bravo.


 Comment Written 08-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
    My friend, it's good to see you again. I was wondering if you were still here or not. I hope you're still writing, my friend, and your kind words are so appreciated, James. Thank you!
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