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Lost Angelino: Hollywood 101


The sights and sounds...

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Nice write about a ride down Route 101. You have described the characters that you observed which in some people's view point seem like lost souls, but in the end, you ponder, if maybe you are the one truly lost. 8-)


 Comment Written 07-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
    Thanks so much, my friend. I appreciate the review! Sometimes I wonder if I still am. ;-)

reply by boxergirl on 07-Mar-2014
    Don't we all. 8-)
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hey, I remeber the times. I drove the Santa Monica and thought the same. On time drove into Watts by mistakes...made it out but my habcaps and my nerve didn't. I went to lee Strasbourg Theatre school. I was fresh out of high school(1977) and thought Vancouver was big.
Ah, L.A. woke me up in a New York minute.
I guess the faces would change but the ideas stays the same...one big Hotel Californication.
padumachitta


 Comment Written 07-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
    Ahhh, I think we've all ended up in Watts (or South Central) at one time or another. Yes, the 405 is actually worse than the 101, but I was able to avoid it often. Thanks so much for the story, my friend, and the great review!

reply by padumachitta on 07-Mar-2014
    Well, it was before King and the riots and most of the real bad gangs, so i think it was almost pedestrian compared to today
    ah yes and gas was 58 cents a gallon...
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Hi, David.

'Like dinosaurs from prehistoric times)' I find 'prehistoric' redundant as obviously that's when dinosaurs existed. Maybe something more connected to a car's technology. A quick sugg - 'pre-mechanic times'

'Observing others through surreal exhaust' - particularly inspired visual line.

Top last line ambiguity to infer 'confused/disenchanted'.

Excellent read, my friend.

Cheers, Ted



 Comment Written 07-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
    Thanks, Ted. I don't really like 'pre-mechanic times', but I'll consider a change there. Thanks for the suggestion, and the great review, my friend. Much appreciated! David

reply by Domino 2 on 07-Mar-2014
    No probs, David. My sugg was very much a quickie. Here's a final one, though I sure won't be offended if you leave as is. 'pre-combustion times'

    Ted

reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
    Thanks, Ted. I may go away from the 'pre' part if I change it, and never hesitate to suggest things. The worst that can happen is for me not to use it, but I always appreciate it.
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You have painted a perfect picture of all those you observed while in Hollywood. Without having been there, I can say 'I have been there', as seen through your eyes.
Some of the words used are foreign to me, but I still managed to get the picture, so to speak.
Loved this description -Archaic cars that belched and bellowed noise Like dinosaurs from prehistoric times).
Truly a gamut of all different types of people and their rather distinct features.
Good job.


 Comment Written 07-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
    Thank you so much, abbasjoy. I appreciate the great review, and the kind words. It's definitely a place one should experience, but I was happy to take you along with me. Sorry for the traffic jam. ;-) David
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I once told my wife by phone that I was stuck in this damn traffic, and only then did I realize that I was part of that traffic. The 101 is a beautiful option if you have to be in traffic. I enjoyed your poem. Don


 Comment Written 07-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
    Thank you so much, Don. Actually, you're right. I'd always get stuck around the Hollywood Bowl, too, which isn't altogether terrible.
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Love this, David!
Did you once write something about LA before, or you in LA? I feel like the theme is familiar...

Only you could put demographic in a poem and make it sound poetic!!

For me this has a story or song-like feel, due to the awesome description.
Back in the eighties, I'd be rocking the Michael Jackson tape with my blown up hair and Keds, probably in a Buick Riviera or Pontiac Bonneville. Lost for sure.

Sissy


 Comment Written 07-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
    Sissy!!! Shockity-shock, baby! Thanks so much. I actually have quite a few L.A. based poems from my time there. What a muse! Great to see you here again. Are you going to be writing?
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The highway, near the big cities has become the world's largest parking lot. Like your descriptions, such as: "The pimped-up rides had chromed-out, spinning spokes & (Archaic cars that belched and bellowed noise
Like dinosaurs from prehistoric times)." Awesome! Les


 Comment Written 07-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
    Thank you so much, Les. I really appreciate that!
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solid use of abab rhyme
love the internal rhyme like stacked-up, backed-up and its assonance with traffic
good alliteration in phrases like rappers and rockers and past their primes
great use of illustrative examples of items that create the Hollywood atmosphere
I just love your final stanza
My daughter lives in Encino and works in Beverly Hills and picks up the little girl she nannies from a school in Hollywood, so I hear about the 101 all the time :-) Brooke


 Comment Written 07-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
    Thank you so much, Brooke. Ah, yes, I know it all so well, my friend. If there's an event at The Bowl, it's even worse.

reply by adewpearl on 07-Mar-2014
    there are car pool nazis at the school Nora goes to - Miranda gets scolded and her employer gets fined if she picks her up late, so the traffic aggravates her to no end :-)

reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
    Wow, talk about increasing the tension!
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I sense some irony here, Marillion. I sense you're even spoofing your own smugness as you recall observations and judgements--soooo Hollywood in their stereotypes. So B-movie in their shallowness.

My first trip to L.A, I met normal people. I was so disappointed.

Peace, Lee


 Comment Written 07-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
    Lee, you've got me there. I do like to make fun of myself, and you're right. When friends would visit, they were always so disappointed at how many people looked like they did. They were used to Baywatch backgrounds, and scenes from the Venice Beach strand. I worked on a TV show called Pacific Blue a couple of times, and they had bikini-clad beauties behind a rope, and they'd pick them out to walk in the background. Hollywood.

    Thanks so much for the great review.
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I think you were the only one normal and sane, but in a land of blinds the one-eyed gets discriminated...Yet those fools gave us Mettallica and Bon Jovi and so many others...so they deserve our respect and your poem


 Comment Written 07-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
    Thanks so much, my friend. You're right, though Bon Jovi was given to us by New Jersey. :)
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