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Lost Angelino: Hollywood 101


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barleygirl
 
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This is a great study of people, thru what they're driving & how they're looking in their rides. Nice selections of the various subjects. Reminds me of people-watching in airports, without the exhaust belching. Your poem put me right into the (unpleasant) thick of it . . . making the best out of a stuck situation. Great read & thanks for sharing.


 Comment Written 07-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
    Thank you so much, Barleygirl! You're so right about airports, too, and LAX once again takes the honors for that! Hope you didn't have to stay there after you finished the poem. ;-)

reply by barleygirl on 07-Mar-2014
    *smile*
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Well this was fun and reflective. Were you sitting in traffic when this work came to you? I couldn't help imagining lines of this poem bursting into your mind as you inched along 101. Very well done! My favorite being:

The limousines would seem to stretch for years--
The pimped-up rides had chromed-out, spinning spokes
And rear-view mirrors decked with chandeliers.
The stoners rode in groups while sharing tokes.

Seemed the perfect narrative for the opening of a movie. Thanks for sharing... Robert


 Comment Written 07-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
    Robert, I truly appreciate that sixer, my friend, and your great review. I can't say it came to me while in that traffic, but a lot of poems did start out there. I'm back home in NC now, but L.A. will always be with me in many ways. Thanks again! David
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Good use of the abab rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good alliteration with surfers/still/so...rappers/rockers...belched/bellowed...spinning/spokes...observing/others...wonder/where. Good simile use with like dinosaurs...like/demons. Good rhythm and flow. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.


 Comment Written 07-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
    Thanks very much, RR.
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LOL 101 observations from the Hollyworld beat. From barbies, to gnarly dudes, from rockers and rappers, to knockers and slappers LMAO...oops got carried away there. Think I've been hanging with the stoners WAY too long. This was a truly funny post D and I enjoyed you astute and most detailed observations right down to the pimp-my-ride chandeliers and limousines that stretch beyond the years. So, how long did you say you were stuck in gridlock? I have a great way to pass the time LMAO


Travel Scrabble! LOL
Had you going, I know. LMAO So a small NIT for moi:

Re you're near rhymes with "exhaust" and "lost"...So over here mate it's "egg-sauced" and "lossed"...so I'm assuming your accent has this take "eggs-zawest" and "lawest". LMAO
Correct? *smirk*

Great stuff anyway. You're such a talent and I never get sick of reading you.
P


 Comment Written 07-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
    Thanks so much, my dear, for your amusing and thoughtful review, and if I'd only had you there to pass the time I'd have been fine with the delays...you could even drive, pursuant to our last convo.

    Thanks for reviewing, and you'll notice I used the old format so you wouldn't have to skip it. ;-)

    As for 'exhaust/lost', honey, they're actually a true rhyme (if you consult a rhyming DICKtionary, I'll think you'll find that to be so, and no!, my accent is NOT that heavy. ;-)

reply by closetpoetjester on 07-Mar-2014
    LMAO
    Just giving you cheek re the rhymes.

    Oh, and I like to drive

    :D

reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
    Yes...DO give me the cheek...and I'll spank it. ;-) The keys are yours, P.

reply by closetpoetjester on 07-Mar-2014
    LOL Naughty boy.



    Now gimme the keys.
    You bad. LOL
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Living in Hollywood must have made a young man feel like he had his finger on the beating pulse of the universe. Of course the movies told us who and what mattered. To be surrounded by the culture must have been heady stuff. Must have given one a false sense of what was real and what mattered. A glimpse into that surreal world. Well done, David. You survived unscathed, so it seems. LOL!


 Comment Written 07-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
    Thank you so much, Adrienne. I didn't stay long enough to lose my soul, but it was nip and tuck for awhile. :)
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Firstly: What is a Lost Angel? I really enjoyed the ride. LOL Thank you. Your poem ran very smoothly as it took me down the 101, and all the eclectic offerings that it presented. It was fun for me. Your rhyme scheme is good, and as I mentioned, the flow is smooth. You have some good nostalgic memories for yourself. An excellent write.


 Comment Written 07-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
    Thank you, Tony. Lost Angel is a play on Los Angelinos, which is what residents are called. Just a play on words. Thanks for the review.
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You just get better! I'm sorry I don't have a six for this delicious slice of Americana, with its richly evocative visuals, perfect versification and telling final line!

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 Comment Written 07-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
    No worries, my friend. I just appreciate the salve of your kind words and the time, Mike. Thank you.
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24chas
 
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Have my last six, Marillion. You deserve it for this excellent observational poem of driving in L.A., and all the characters you'd see when you did.


 Comment Written 07-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
    Thanks so much, Chas. I really appreciate it.
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