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Thy Will Be Done


The Shakespearean Sonnet

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Kingsland
 
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I liked the way you ended this poem.it Has a kinship to fellow poets. This was a well written piece of poetic art that has a love of writing in its thoughts and phrases... John


 Comment Written 11-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 11-Mar-2014
    Thank you very much, John, for your great review. I really appreciate it.
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Phyllis Stewart
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How clever to write a sonnet about the sonnet! Very good job, too, until "In fealty to thy Will, we leech the pen"... because fe-al-ty is three syllables, and pronoucing it feel-ty sounds awkward. Use a diff word there and it'll be great. :)


 Comment Written 11-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 11-Mar-2014
    Thank you so much, Phyllis. I've always felt that 'fealty' is one of those words that naturally adjusts to two syllables, but I went ahead and made a slight change to that line. I appreciate it! David
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very clever, loved the way you have used words from Shakespeare's repertoire, (you've got me checking up)

great entry for the competition
annp


 Comment Written 11-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 11-Mar-2014
    Thank you so much, Ann! I appreciate your great review.
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I like your Sonnet about the sonnet contest entry. My favorite lines are two and three. "A fourteen-line progression of a thought. Da-DUMing through three quatrains til it docks". Nice personification of the sonnet. Nice inner rhyme of rhyme/mind. Well done. 8-)


 Comment Written 11-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 11-Mar-2014
    Thank you so much, Boxergirl! I appreciate it!
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Hello. Okay, you caught me with the title. I almost didn't open it up, until I saw it was by you. Thy William be done, very clever. Billy would be happy with you, I am sure.
padumachitta


 Comment Written 11-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 11-Mar-2014
    Thanks so much, Pad. Yes, I think I wrong-footed you on that one, didn't I? Thanks for checking, my friend, and for the great review.
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Nicely done :-)
A sonnet . . . about sonnets
and the crowned king of them.
In fact, one might say
a sonnetic ode!
To William Shakespeare
and his metered form
that lives on through
to modern times -
forever branded
to poetic minds.
:-)


 Comment Written 11-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 11-Mar-2014
    Thank you so much, Leineco! I appreciate it!
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Hadria
 
 
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This is one for my bookcase, it has everything a sonnet should have and is everything a sonnet should be. I love the idea of it docking adroitly with a couplet, and the idea of a sonnet as a storm, and the tempest tethered and caught neatly
in the couplet at the end
"In fealty to thy Will, we leech the pen
To bleed immortal ink - as mortal men".....if W. Shakespeare was still with us he would be tearing out his beard because he didn't write it. xxxHadria


 Comment Written 11-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 11-Mar-2014
    Hadria, thank you SO much for this incredibly flattering and appreciated review (and sixer). I truly appreciate your kind words, my friend! David
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This one made me grin. Clever play on his name. Good instructions, too. Lol. I like the tip that we've been freed from following his thoughts even if compelled to follow the form. I know I don't do justice to Shakespeare, but it's fun to try. But, you are very good.


 Comment Written 11-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 11-Mar-2014
    Thank you so much, janalma! Sonnets are great fun, and I really appreciate your sixer, and your kind words. David
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Tatarka2
 
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I think this should win the contest. What an original idea - and so interestingly presented, still within the sonnet form. Great idea, congratulations!


 Comment Written 11-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 11-Mar-2014
    Thank you so much, my friend, for that green star and your kind words. I've never been much for contests here, but when I was posting this one I saw the sonnet contest deadline was coming up, and this seemed like a good one to enter with. I really appreicate it! David
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The best part of this poem is the originality of expression. Tho I'm no aficionada of rhythm, I love this line: "Da-DUMming through three quatrains till it docks" . . . definitely never thought of a sonnet this way & might always think of them this way now. Thanks for sharing.


 Comment Written 11-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 11-Mar-2014
    Thanks so much, barleygirl! Since the whole da-DUM thing is one way to explain meter, I took a chance and included it. I appreciate the great review.
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