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The Memory Blanket


Remnants of the past

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Maria C.
 
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Hi David,

This is one we all can most certainly identify with in some way. I still have our original quilt made with some fabrics of clothes that belonged to my father-in-law and his siblings. We have used it for 35 years. Fortunately, our marriage is holding up better than the fabric.
I like the simile in line one. That's a good one. Good 'g' alliteration with greeted/Goodwill. Love the sentiment of the second verse. Sad third verse. I like the wording in the last line. Great rhyme and meter. Different for me with the syllable count as it is, but I like it.
Blessings.
Maria C.


 Comment Written 20-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 21-Mar-2014
    Thanks so much, Maria, for checking in and for your great review! Nice to hear from you!
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Dean Kuch
 
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Those thing in our lives that bring on such melancholy musings, 'eh? An old blanket, as you've written about here, or a pair of cracked and peeling baby shoes. Whatever it may be, the memories they can evoke within our minds and psyche are powerful. Sometimes, we can almost hear and smell the times those worn, antiquated and obsolete objects harken us back to.

Nicely done, David. Well rhymed, expertly composed as always.


 Comment Written 19-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
    Thanks so much, Dean, for your great review. I hope the darkness is treating you well, my friend.
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The Death
 
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I like the simile you used in the first line. The next line shifts the scene dramatically. It is poignant yet a bit satirical.
Excellent use of rhyming and meter, as always.
Nice use of alliteration and consonance throughout.
I loved the last verse which has elements of truth in it and a strong message too.
I enjoyed reading this sweet-bitter poem about the changing love.


 Comment Written 19-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
    Thank you again, Anupam, for your great thoughts. I appreciate it!
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Hi Marillion

I love the way you have given great significance to the worn blanket and then casually dumped it in the canvas bin
that greeted patrons at the Goodwill store. Goodwill being for the greater good so that one might carry on living again perhaps without the baggage.

Another fabulous read

kind regards
tracey :)


 Comment Written 19-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
    Thank you so much, Tracey, for taking the time to read and review a couple of my poems this morning. I always appreciate your excellent thoughts.
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I used to have a red pillow that I moved from house to house for years. Like a love lorn Linus. (involuntary alliteration)
I came home one day and found it in the cat bed ripped to shreds. I realized how appropriate that was. Nice piece. This will trigger some feelings in quite a few people. Might surprise a few too. mikey


 Comment Written 19-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
    Thank you very much, my friend. Love that alliteration, brother.
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This lambic is interesting especially in the last lines."to love's cohesion, torn in half, and sentiments hued bright, but cued to fade." suggests that no only did the blanket become useless, the relationship split?" Hopefully the new owners will put it to use again.


 Comment Written 19-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
    Thank you very much, sea glass!
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this is very well written, marillion, the second and third stanzas stand out the most to me. most specifically the first line of the second stanza. cast away to be someone else's security blanket


 Comment Written 19-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
    Thank you so much, my friend.
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Cute and thoughtful ode to a blanket written in iambic meter.

Like many people, blankets are tossed aside when no longer needed. In this case, since it is now at the Goodwill store, some other person/s will get some use from this old throw.

The personification of the blanket in the final stanza is excellent, whereby the blanket itself composes the epitaph and weaves a metaphor of the worn and frayed nature of longstanding love.

The poem reads beautifully, with enjambment and caesura contributing to the distinct rhythm of each stanza.

Cheers,
DW



 Comment Written 18-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
    Thank you so much, DW, for your sixer, for your wonderful insight, and for your great review. I truly appreciate it!
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Lucky thing the dog didn't shed on the blanket or you'd have had to wash before donating it to Goodwill. (Love the oxymoron) I like the punchy beat to this poem. Excellent rhymes that seem to fall into place naturally as the poet lets the feelings flow without maudlin sentimentality.

It's good to recycle those items from painful love, the ones that can be recycled. It's a long and arduous process learning to fall out of love with someone as beloved as the one you've described.

Nice work, David. :)

Gloria


 Comment Written 18-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
    Thanks so much, my friend. I really appreciate your great review. I got your email, by the way, and will take a look as soon as I can. Feel free to drop by for a fresh snack, if you like. ;)

reply by Gloria .... on 19-Mar-2014
    Be right over. :)
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Dom G Robles
 
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This poem is significant in that it gives meaning and pleasant memories to a blanket that he donated to charity. The blanket which was used once in winter is now given away for people who might need it. The writer describes pretty well the blanket, a Shar-pie's skin which makes the body warm during winter time. The poem is neat and the picture of a man and a woman using the blanket significantly portrays the theme of the poem. It is written well written. Congratulations. Dom


 Comment Written 18-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
    Thank you so much, Dom, for your great review!
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