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Along the Jericho Road


Murder Mystery

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Hi. Well, quite the round up. It would appear all is good in the spirit world...it is always nice when a story has a good twist:-)
the notes at the end helped with it all, I admit I have not read all the chapters...so the roundup at the end...is super.


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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
    Thank you so much for this great review, Padumachitta. I appreciate your kind words of encouragement. :) Bev
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As I have told you before whenever I've dropped in to catch a chapter here and there, I sure wish I have been with your story from the beginning. You are an outstanding writer and I hope to tune in to your next offering from the start. Great job. :-)


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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
    Thank you so much, Ric, for your wonderful review. It's really gratifying to read your words of support and encouragement. That means a lot to me, and you are really most gracious.

    :) Bev
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Rating of Chapter 70 -
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What a satisfying ending, Bev. Now to find a publisher! It would make a great movie. Wouldn't that be great?
Just curious... what's the final word count?
Congrats again for staying the course on a wonderful novel, my friend.
I hope you get book of the month. I just voted. :) e


 Comment Written 30-Aug-2014



reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
    Hi Ellen! Hey great to see you back on the site. I'm so glad you found the ending satisfying. I didn't want to cheat all the people who had followed for so long.

    The word count is too high and I'm going to need to trim like crazy. I'll be doing editing for some time to come LoL. But I'm not sending out queries on anything that I don't think is as perfect as I can come to it.

    I've stayed the course because of folks like you, Ellen. Your kind words of encouragement and gentle suggestions of how to make things better spurred me on. I'm amazed at how far I've come and humbled by how far I have yet to go.

    And thank you so much for your vote. I'm excited with the 'field' of writers offered this month. Some of my favorites in there!

    Hope to see something from you very soon!!

    Hugs, Bev

reply by barkingdog on 01-Sep-2014
    Ah, editing. I found that by the time I had reached the end of the novel that the beginning was structurally weaker. I'd grown. As you have. I'm not done yet. I keep going back with a fresh mind and find more to do.
    Patience is the word. Nothing really worthwhile can be hurried. Your novel is really worthwhile.
    Hugs. :)e

reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
    Ellen, thank you so much for this! I'm feeling a bit of pressure on my part to keep working hard on the novel, but what I really need is a little space and lots of time. It's been an intense project. So glad to have the benefit of your perspective and own experience. As you mention, I am quite surprised as both how bad, and how good the earlier chapters are, if that makes sense.
    Rama doesn't mince words, but she's not a nasty person either. So, I'm being guided in the right direction, I think.

    Thanks so much, my friend.

    When will we be seeing the fruits of your recent labors?

    Hugs, Bev

reply by barkingdog on 02-Sep-2014
    Hi sweet one. I'm glad that you have someone that you feel comfortable with as an editor. That's so important in such a close working relationship. Best of luck. It all takes time.

    There is nothing new here as far as writing goes. I'm busy still trying to adapt to Taylor, my son's girlfriend,who's living here. I'm so stuck in my ways. It's difficult to change, but I'm trying.

    Are you going to be posting again? Or is this it for you for a while, as you concentrate on editing?

reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
    I would have a really hard time adapting as I like my space. Good on you that you're open to this Ellen. At my age, it's getting a bit harder to change on the bottom-line things.

    I'm putting back out an edited version of an old novel I did a while back but never finished. Paranormal Adventures - now there's a change of pace LOL.

    Hugs, Bev
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I haven't read every chapter, but I know this is a good one! Had I the time, I'd def. add it to my reading list. Anyway, this a fine chapter, as you wrap up things very neatly. Every reader of the book should be more'n satisfied!

Keep writing!

Mike


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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
    Hi, Mike. Just that thought that you'd want to spend time reading my novel is really gratifying to me. Thank you for that and for all your encouragement. I much appreciate it! :) Bev

reply by mikemagine on 31-Aug-2014
    My pleasure!!
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Congratulations Bev, on completing your book. I'm sure those who read it will find it interesting and entertaining. You did a great job writing it.

Thanks for sharing it and for giving me a catch to read /review it. JW


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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
    Hi, Jonathon. I know you've been in this position a couple of times yourself. It's a bit of an odd feeling for me. Knowing I have the editing job ahead is offsetting a bit of the sadness. In the end, I want to have the best product I can possibly put out 'there'.

    Thank you for staying the course with me, Jonathon. I've always enjoyed your unique insights and have benefitted from your sharp eye for spaggies. Please know that you are appreciated.

    :) Bev

reply by JW on 30-Aug-2014
    Thanks Bev.

    And you are definitely right about the sadness when a book come to an end. It's hard to tell your characters/your friends good-bye.

    Perhaps that's why I started a third book in the The Question/Plutonium Revenge series. I missed my old friends. :-) JW

reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
    I will do a sequel for my novel. At least one, for sure. But, I'm not posting it on the site until I find if I can get a mainstream publisher. That's something they like to hold first rights to. Say, I can dream can't I? Have a good one... :) Bev

reply by JW on 30-Aug-2014
    Good luck in finding a mainstream publisher - and yes, you are allowed to dream. :-)

    I personally gave up on the idea. It seems like unless you were rich and/or famous - someone they were sure they could make a profit from - they weren't interest.

    On the bright side - even though the money I make from my books only earns enough to let me enjoy McDonalds dollar menu now and then - I do get some enjoyment in the fact that during the past year, something over a 1000 copies of my novels have been downloaded - and my books have been downloaded in over 10 countries.

    Please have a great Labor Day, Bev! JW

reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
    You should be very proud of that, Jonathon. I'd be happy with anything at this point.

    :)

reply by JW on 30-Aug-2014
    I am. I just wish my current circumstances where different, so I could spend more time writing. .. Right now it's extremely difficult.
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Sorry, I am out of sixes, Bev. What a great wrap up. It not only answers any lingering questions in the readers mind, but, at least for me, produces a sigh of satisfaction. Everything resolved. No loose strings. Enjoyed following this well written novel. Good luck in getting it out there for others to enjoy.


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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
    Hi, Dallas. You've been such a supportive and encouraging friend through all this. I've enjoyed your special insights, which often turned my story in a better direction. I'm glad the epilogue was satisfactory, too.

    Thanks so much for the good wishes and generous wish for a six. Your words are worth more than any star possibly could.

    Warmest regards, Bev

reply by DALLAS01 on 29-Aug-2014
    My pleasure, friend.
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Merci beaucoup to you, my wonderful friend! You have done a magnificent job with this book.

My warmest good wishes for your publishing dreams to come true.

What next, I wonder? Can't wait to find out!

Congratulations, Bev. Three cheers, hip, hip ... :)

xxx

Sonali

p.s. Rosie and I met last night for coffee. Will reply to your e-mail over the weekend, with more tentative thoughts and plans. Hugs xx


The physical injuries sustained by Danika Marten during her kidnapping healed(,) though she would require plastic surgery for the scars left by burns to the soles of her feet.

investigated each report(,) but was unable to confirm

Edward Pearce's (corpse..?) was donated to a body farm once the Granite ... suggest: change the first 'body' to avoid repetition of the word twice in quick succession


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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
    Hello my sweet friend! Can you believe I finally finished? It's a bit bittersweet, but I have much editing ahead of me and will have the story in my life for some time to come.

    Up next, probably a paranormal adventure I started some time back but never finished.

    Thanks so much for always having my best interests in mind when you did your reviews. You've kept me on track with your support and encouragement, not to mention generosity, Sonali.

    Look forward to hearing more about the 'plans'.

    Big Hug,

    Bev
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Oh this was so unique and refreshing. I've never read an ending like this before. What a great way to end a magnificent story. Bless you.


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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
    Thank you so much, Amahra. Your words are very kind and I much appreciate your generosity. :) Bev
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this is an excellent ending to your long journey, writingfundimension, and I was with you all the way. I look forward to our next journey. I wonder where you'll take us.


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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
    Thank you, Sweet. Yes, you've been following my work for a very long time now, and I appreciate it so very much. Thank you for being so supportive and generous. :) Bev
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Great statements about what happened to each of the characters. I think they did right in withholding the information about Rick's involvement, as he had been a good officer until he kidnapped Danika. Jana's action of cutting off her braid was interesting. Glad that Tony and Agnes will be back home. Father Brian deserves peace after the torment he was put through. I think you might want to try presenting your conclusion maybe through the eyes of a particular person (maybe Jana) or have it as the findings of Dresden. The story had so many fireworks, I think you might do more than just tell what happened to the different characters. Something to think about. judi


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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
    Judi, thank you very much for your insights and review. I did consider doing another chapter, but at 70, I needed to end it at some point. An epilogue is likely not in the picture long-term as that's not what publishers would look for.

    I appreciate all your support, generosity and encouragement.

    Have a great weekend.

    Bev

reply by judiverse on 29-Aug-2014
    Hi, Bev. You're so welcome. I wasn't suggesting another chapter or epilogue but maybe punch it up a bit with maybe having a character giving his or her thoughts about the aftermath, with the same things you suggested but a more personal approach to what happened to everyone. Maybe the answer lies with Jana cutting off her braid. judi

reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
    Thanks again, Judi. I like your suggestion and will definitely consider it as I go through the editing process. Take care, Bev

reply by judiverse on 30-Aug-2014
    You're so welcome. Editing I'm sure can be more difficult than the writing. Best of luck with it, and keep us posted on your results. It's been a thriller to read. judi

reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
    I will let my 'regulars' know when and if I ever get to the point I'm publishing. It's going to have some changes in the final product -- fewer chapters and even some new ones. Editing is a different animal altogether. I'm lucky to have a good one to work with.

    Thanks for the wishes and support!

    :) Bev

reply by judiverse on 30-Aug-2014
    You're so welcome, and best of luck. Sounds like you have an agent, so that's good. I suspect the seasoned professionals rely on them quite a bit. judi

reply by judiverse on 30-Aug-2014
    You're so welcome, and best of luck. Sounds like you have an agent, so that's good. I suspect the seasoned professionals rely on them quite a bit. judi
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