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An epigram

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michaelcahill
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The term open-ended sounds so ominous, but it is hard to determine why exactly. Just scary sounding. Ha! Love the "naked bulb". Great little piece. mikey


 Comment Written 29-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
    Thank you, my friend. I'm still laughing at your Brogue! :) I appreciate your review, brother.
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Oh, one has to know when someone wants to 'chat' about a relationship, that the battle lines have already been drawn. An excellent look into the relationship of man vs. woman - with predictably the man feeling like the exercise is not going to end well.
You do such a great job of focusing our minds on this one, David. An exceptional poem - It certainly fit your description of an epigram well.
Rose.


 Comment Written 28-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014
    Thank you so much, Rose, for the insight and great review, my friend. Hope you're well.
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hello. Oh god, the 'let's talk' or 'I think we need to explore this issue'...it has me screaming for mercy and running for the ice cream container, before you can say 'Honey, just one thing.'
You can probably tell, the poem resonated in me:-)


 Comment Written 28-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014
    I can, and I appreciate it, my friend. That's when it's all worth it. Thank you, Pad.
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Good one, David--with an apt photo to enahnce your witty internal imagery. I suggest quotes on the dialog (optional):

She said, (")Let's delve into your thoughts on love
in open-ended, earnest conversation.(")


I love how the tone of the opening line shifts quickly into sharp counterpoint in the last two lines:

I visualized a naked bulb above
a wooden chair -- and harsh interrogation.

Very good satirical irony-play on the HE and SHE divergent POVs.

Love,
rd


 Comment Written 28-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014
    Thanks so much, my friend. I had quotations there before, but thought it was just optional when the text is italicized. Is there a hard and fast rule about that? I'm honestly not sure.

reply by rama devi on 28-Mar-2014
    Not at all--it's fine with the italicized text. Quotes are optional. For me, I would probably avoid quotes if it were a longer poem with italics for lots of dialog, but for one dialog line, I'd probably opt to use the quotes. Matter of style-taste and choice.

    Love, rd

reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014
    Thanks, Rama. I actually like it without, at least in this case, so it's good to know it's optional.

reply by rama devi on 28-Mar-2014
    :-))) Yay!
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Your view into the distaff brain
(a lesson to unwary)
Be guarded lad, of what you had.
Use caution if you marry.

But then, if you have gone so far
as to consider that.
There's little hope that you will see
the fall before the splat.


 Comment Written 28-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014
    What a great answering epigram, Norbanus. I think you should post it! Thank you! David
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this is very well written, marillion, you did an excellent job writing this epigram about the light hearted conversation that turned into an interrogation. i enjoyed reading it.


 Comment Written 28-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014
    Thank you so much, my friend. :)
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LOL, yep that's what you'd see! Men have this phobia when it comes to discussing love. It truly is more than just the sex! And this is exactly why I'm still waiting for my love sonnet. hahahaha


 Comment Written 27-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
    Sorry, my friend. It was a busy week, and this was all I mustered so far except for tomorrow's Rogue poem. Love sonnet on tap for the weekend, I promise! Thank you!

reply by Dawn of Tomorrow on 27-Mar-2014
    I understand a busy week, I think I've only popped on here 2 times all week myself.
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Very good from a guy's point of view... think you captured the feeling perfectly. Great pic too. Men and women are not made the same way, despite what the libbers would have us believe.

Men fear a serious talk with women because they are not as used to dealing with emotions in words, more in action. A woman will complain her husband doesn't say he loves her enough. Same guy who fixes her hair dryer, washes her car, chaffeurs her mom to bingo, and gives her oral sex while she watches TV.

Men DO things to show love. Women SAY things. If a man said to his wife, why don't you wash my car and polish my tools and then give me a blow job to show you love me, she hit him with his own hammer. So it goes both ways.


 Comment Written 27-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
    You're a very wise lady, Phyllis. Thanks so much for your accurate insights, my friend. You're so right.

reply by Phyllis Stewart on 27-Mar-2014
    Just what I've learned from living with a rare creature -- a macho guy who's also verbal.
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My initial reaction was ...commitment phobic? Perhaps. Maybe what we most want is also what we most fear. But then I read your author's notes, and, combined with these, your poem spelled out instant intimacy, which sets off warning bells in the initiated: a wariness about those with a tendency to bond too quickly! The giveaway is when they divulge a little too much personal information in the early stages. But when they try and extract the same ... Whoa!!! Tornado indeed! Fascinating to watch but hell to get caught up in one!
An incisive little write, David (great title too) ;-)
Cheers
Paula


 Comment Written 27-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
    You got it!!! And I'm not surprised at all. Yes, it wasn't the discussion as much as it is the sheer speed with which she's trying to move this along. You're so sharp, my friend, and I appreciate it so much! Thank you for always knowing exactly where I'm coming from. It's validating and awing.
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earnest, yes! How was the light after a few hours? Good enough to delve in. I know you've got a handsome reward afterwards, but was the headache worth it?


 Comment Written 27-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
    That's a good question, albert, and I'm still not sure. Thank you, my friend.
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