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An epigram

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Hahahaha - uh, oh, careful David; we might be glimpsing a bit of your real persona! (*grin*) All kidding aside, I remember that feeling (from the other side)! How clever this little poem is - too accurate, I think...I loved it, and the picture you chose is priceless!


 Comment Written 27-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
    Thank you so much, my friend. More than anything, it's about how quickly the conversation even came up.

reply by Ideasaregems-Dawn on 27-Mar-2014
    Yikes, that's a red flag...unless...how long have you known each other? You knew each other previously, right? (*asks big momma -smile*)

reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
    Several months, from a fitness group online, but never met before last weekend.

reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
    Several months, from a fitness group online, but never met before last weekend.

reply by Ideasaregems-Dawn on 27-Mar-2014
    A fitness group online? How does that work? Finger pull-ups? Eyeball weight-lifting? Okay, I'm sorry. My first response was to type , "RUN!" Then I thought, no you can't say that! What if she's a great gal? So instead, here's what I say - walk softly, carry a big stick and try not to use it. :)

reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
    Good advice!

reply by Ideasaregems-Dawn on 27-Mar-2014
    I hope so. :)

reply by Ideasaregems-Dawn on 27-Mar-2014
    Make it a really big stick though, right? :)

reply by Ideasaregems-Dawn on 27-Mar-2014
    All kidding aside, I am a big believer in giving things LOTS of room and lots of time.

reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014
    It's the only kind I have, my friend.;)
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Just four line and every one a treat. Really very clever and the perfect picture - I read your author notes - so this was inspired by a little Texas Tornado! Clever last two lines. Regards Dorothy (she was only being friendly - I'm sure you had no cause for alarm - are you the nervous type?)


 Comment Written 27-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
    Thank you so much, my friend. She's just being a little too hurried for my taste.

reply by Dorothy Farrell on 28-Mar-2014
    Ugh! I see - that's enough to put you off - too pushy - maybe if she had been hard to get - but probably not! LOL Dorothy
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This is so cute, David. I'm presuming because this is written in italics: Let's delve into your thoughts on love in open-ended, earnest conversation. that is what you THOUGHT you heard her say. She probably said something along the lines of, I love the ceiling fan in here. How about you?

But, now that we got that boring love talk out of the way, I want to hear about the sex. :P No need to really answer that small request, unless you want to.

Love it!

Gloria

PS: You look good in ropes, but what I don't understand is the blindfold.


 Comment Written 27-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
    You're right, Gloria! It was an imagined conversation, but an implied intent on her part. She's truly a whirlwind in terms of how quickly she's trying to get into my turf. ;) I think I like my hens better. ;) Thank you!
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She said, Let's delve into your thoughts on love
in open-ended, earnest conversation.
I visualized a naked bulb above
a wooden chair -- and harsh interrogation.

Ha! What were you afraid of my dear? Usually someone doesn't mind being interrogated if they have nothing to hide. Love the picture. 8-)


 Comment Written 27-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
    Not so much hiding something as not ready to delve too quickly into the conversation, my friend. Thank you! :)
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I hate to admit it (as a woman) but so many women (especially those in longterm relationships) can approach a "discussion" exactly as you describe here. You've done a brilliant job of over-dramatizing (altho it's not really over the top, but instead, just about on the mark) in order to achieve your "witty" poem! *smile*


 Comment Written 27-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
    Thanks so much, my friend. I do like going a little bombastic every now and then, and will probably do even more tomorrow when the rogue arrives. ;)

    I appreciate it, bg.

reply by barleygirl on 27-Mar-2014
    Oh yeah . . . Friday . . . *smile*
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Careful David, You're going to chase her until she catches you! LOL Sounds as though she has her heart set on you. She is a women who probably gets what she wants if she traveled that far to see you. LOL I'll have to look up the rules for an epigram. Witty poem. Nancy


 Comment Written 27-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
    I'm afraid she does, but I honestly don't think we're ready to get to that point yet, and she's liable to drive me away. Thank you, my friend.
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Short, sweet (?) and to the point. As you so often do, you've said so much in so few words. Almost everyone will be able to relate to this, as most of us have been on one side or the other of such a conversation at some point. The picture is also perfect. Congratulations on havi9ng said so much with so little (words, that is).


 Comment Written 27-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
    Thanks so much, Tatarka. I love writing these short pieces, and that's the goal to say much in little. I appreciate the validation, my friend.
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Haha. I wonder why so many men are like this. I think there's just something different between the sexes hard-wired into our genes. But the poem does capture nicely what I imagine some men think about talking about feelings.

I read your Author's Notes as well. Sounds like your visitor from Texas was an interesting one.


 Comment Written 27-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
    Thank you so much, my friend. I think one of the bigger issues is the speed with which some people move, men or women. Still, there are always differences.
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vi·su·al·ized
She said, Let's delve into your thoughts on love 10
in open-ended, earnest conversation. 11
I visualized a naked bulb above 11
a wooden chair -- and harsh interrogation. 11

These bits: 'a naked bulb' 'wooden chair' lead one to believe that perhaps an S&M event is about to occur. Well presented.

Regards:



 Comment Written 27-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
    Thanks so much, my friend. Visualized is one of those words that may officially be a four syllable word, but reads and sounds like a three syllable. I often do that, but they elide themselves automatically.

    As always, my friend, I appreciate the look and the thoughts.
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I'm sure there were lots of "torture" devices as well. This was well written and appropriate, I'm sure, to the situation. Good job. You need a six-pack after that.


 Comment Written 27-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
    Thanks so much, bro. I appreciate the sixer and the smile.
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