Romance Poetry and love have been synonymous since poetry was first invented. Your acrostic poem should relate to this subject. An acrostic is a poem which spells out a word or idea. Sometimes what it spells out is the the title of the poem itself. Usually the first letter of each line spells out this key word.
A good chapter. Nice pacing. I'm curious if the bard is about to show the detective a revelation, or a red herring. I liked your Bruce Willis cameo, very nice. As for moby dick, quequag would be displeased with you. :) Good job, looking forward to the next chapter.
The funeral is a good place to start. First, keep a record of who is at the funeral Then mingle and listen. Ask a few innocent questions. The guilty are usually smart enough to attend. The work begins. Great work.
Love the poem. Good alliteration with "pretty pistol packing, Harpster's Harp, doctor draped."
I like how this is shaping up and suspect it won't be long before Detective Adrian begins getting pressured to back off.
Don't be in any hurry. Write this at your pace and not to satisfy the site. You are developing the characters perfectly and the story has a good pace. This isn't the end of the world like your last piece. No hurry. So far so good. Lovethe two main characters. Give each new charcter the same attention. NG
This is a very good use of opportunity to further understanding of these two characters. Explaining mental illness also good strategy.For those who are unenlightened, it will help them understand Bard and for those who are enlightened, recognition of some of the survival ploys of this population will validate. I'm sucked in, perhaps because of years of working with mental illness. or maybe due to being a bit off center me-self.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
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