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Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "The Will, Jagger and a Shakedown"

A homeless man sees more than people realize.

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Mikey, this will business should prove to be interesting as to how the information gets to his daughter. No spags that I could see. :0 GracieAnn


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Good chapter. I like when you jump between characters and storylines, it keeps things moving, and keeps the characters fresh in the readers minds. Good story, off to the next chapter.


 Comment Written 21-Apr-2014


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HI Columbo, will there is always that one person that comes out of the woodwork when someone dies...and of course not everyone wants curtain things to be found out....and I'm with Detective Adrian...just can't put my finger on it Yet!!!LOL...every chapter gets better...Luff Linda xxoo like playing Clue!!!luff Linda xxoo


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This is building into a fascinating story. Lots to think about and not too confusing...thanks. I look forward to the next post. Nice work with this one.


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This is really exciting and is taking off nicely. So many possibilities -- I love the way you brig in the oldies Like Mick Jagger and the Stones. I thought this was well-told and formatted, with just enough action and mystery to keep the reader intrigued. Well done.


 Comment Written 19-Apr-2014


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The applause drifted through the room. It was genuine really loved how this almost clapped in my mind beautifully penned really enjoyable read mikey


 Comment Written 19-Apr-2014


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I think it will be an interesting story when you get the foundation laid. I will let the writer critic the writing and I will just say what I find interesting. LOL That should cover everything. Good job. Nancy


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Hi, Mikey.
This is another good chapter. I like how you are showing different characters, all linked to Blackwell. You've shown well their individual lives and attitudes.
Bye
Rosalyne :)


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Fifty one per cent for the oldest child. That is Ruby. That could be a major war if she came forward. But she may be the best one to run the company. Seniors death is already suspicious. It will be hard to shut down the investigations, official and unofficial. Great work.


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I think you are right to include the different facets of all the characters so we the readers can understand the intrigue and plot better and see what roles they play in the unravelling. Your characterisations are always well drawn. Interesting chapter, keep up the good work. Faye


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