now i know what the sense of this feel of a hospital, but none of the urgency or smells you draw quite beautiful mikey sorry i have not been around much beautifully penned a delight to read excellent piece dear friend
I love the way the Bard keeps inserting his poetic messages that sound crazy but are really the most realistic version of events that is possible. The dialogue in this chapter seemed especially well done, and kept the chapter moving along at a steady, and intriguing, pace. Good job.
Hi Michael, just leave it to the girls....they know how to (is the word I am looking for) snoop...LOL...clues are coming to the surface...gi with it man...I'm loving this...Next...on my way,,Luff Linda xxoo
Mikey, I did like this one. It seemed to have more cohesiveness and drops a few hints about where the freezer is located. A mental institution would be the last place anyone would suspect. But then again, he may not be dead after all and still calling the shots. Getting good. :0 GracieAnn
This was a great chapter, too. The plot thickens and it was very informative. Both women are very skilled at their jobs, we need more of their sort in the force. Characters are well drawn and lifelike and the narrative is great. Most enjoyable, Faye
Wow. The plot unfolds almost faster than I can keep up, and in a highly interesting way.
At the pace you are writing I expect you will catch SPAG on revision. I did notice that you are still having a problem with there and their.
I'm beginning to think the Bard is not so crazy after all, that his entire persona is a ruse. Guess I'll have to wait and see.
You really don''t know what is going to happen next do you? No wonder everything flows so naturally. You have nerves of steel!!! Genius having theBard show up at the institute. That gets teneaya there without a warrant!!! NG