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The Bard of Bel Air
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "More Relatives and Visiting a Friend"
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A homeless man sees more than people realize.
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Nagahito smell my feeto << LOL! I love the Bard! :)
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She looked angry. She continued with a little smile
You lost me for a moment here. Suggest you use EMMA for the first SHE so we can keep track... you have two SHEs in a row.. better to break it up with an EMMA anyway.
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There is no question that you have talent, Mikey. This is a great chapter, as are all of them in this new book. I have a suggestion though.. stop telling readers that you have no clue where you're going! LOL! A writer should at least pretend he has the story in his head somewhere. I refer to this, in the notes:
How do you like the direction this is going. It is a surprise to me.
I wouldn't recommend you say you are surprised by your own story! LOL! You are so adorable. :)
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Comment Written 25-Apr-2014 |
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| I see--an addition of a new character, Esmeralda Blackwell. You got a sense of humor Mikey. nonsense, ponsense strikes me funny and some of them wacky words the Bard comes up with. they must think the Bard is nuttier than a fruitcake. Daniel smokes Lucky Strikes non filter. For some unknown reason, it looks like it could be a clue. Maybe, a Lucky Strike cigarette will be found near the crime scene discovered by Lucy or the other detective. Clever, Lucy pretending to be a nanny. Smooth and quick thinking on her part. This is going good as can be expected. Is this one easier than the last novel? Seems like it is easier for you. I wonder, if they will ever get the chance to find Blackwell 's body on ice. Getting past security could be an issue. I'm sure, you are working on that one. Well, I'm almost finished with my chapter, some quick editing. This review will help me get a certificate. I fell to peer pressure, they finally forced me to reveal me mug shot. I got my cat Domino in my arms. he's a tuxedo cat. yep, yaw can have your laughs for tonight. he!he! The Lone Ranger has been unmasked, almost. great! wackydo
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Comment Written 25-Apr-2014 |
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