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The Bard of Bel Air


Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "A Genius & A Diva"

A homeless man sees more than people realize.

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Mikey, the added details make the plot start to wind and make things a bit more complicated. Now the possibility of another eye witness is an unexpected twist. Interesting. :0 GracieAnn


 Comment Written 29-Apr-2014



reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
    Thanks for reminding me! HAhaha! I got carried away in the following chapters and forgot all about him. Duh. I hope his mom brought him lunch. I have to be careful. I have a tendency to just throw things out there. Then I have to spend a couple chapters figuring out how to fit it in. Way behind. Just skipping way ahead to say hello and let you know that I do read these and pay attention. I will get caught up someday. I try on reviews. That is more within sight anyway. Thank you kindly, mikey

reply by GracieAnn on 29-Apr-2014
    Mikey, sometimes you have the two sides of your brain in high gear! LOL GracieAnn
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I love the story. The two detectives are treating The Bard with respect. They no nothing about him but he is treated well. The detectives are finding al ot of evidence. Great work


 Comment Written 28-Apr-2014


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such an amazing picture these words drew for me mikey she seeks the heart that yearns with hope a delightful piece of reading dear friend really enjoyed dear friend beautifully penned


 Comment Written 27-Apr-2014


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I hadn't seen you on here lately, you must have missed my poems, but don't worry you are busy, I know. I didn't get notified of this chapter till I realised I had missed one. Great chapter, I like the idea of the Police Chief being in on it, it happens all the time, I hear. Enjoyable as always. Faye


 Comment Written 27-Apr-2014



reply by the author on 27-Apr-2014
    I'm way behind and not getting much internet time. I see one of yours coming up. Did I miss some?? I'll check today and see if there are any I haven't seen. Sometimes they drop the ball notifying. Glad you're enjoying. This is getting fun to write. I hope I don't go too crazy. Hahaha. mikey

reply by Nosha17 on 27-Apr-2014
    I hope not either, with all the pressure. I just read the next chapter and that was even more exciting than the last one. I knew that Chief was a rotter! Try to relax a bit, too. Faye
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The bard's waxing poetic on fast foot and his dissection of vanilla flavaless flav ice p rapper is hilarious. I think I sniff the beginning of a series. Seriously. Monk lasted a long time. Of course, this is way different, but he does seem to help Tenaya think. He could be her unofficial consultant on all cases.


 Comment Written 26-Apr-2014


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I do agree about the rappers being poets. You must have talked with a schizophrenic at some point in your life, because you have the Bard down pat. This is exactly how he would talk. I like the story, and so far I like the plot and the pacing. The way it's written is intriguing and holds the reader's interest. I'll be eager to see what happens next. (I also like the two detectives being women).


 Comment Written 26-Apr-2014


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At least the two ladies is starting to understand the bard and he makes a lot more sense and is quite helpful. This is another great chapter.


 Comment Written 26-Apr-2014


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Another excellent chapter. The scene on the Santa Monica Pier with Lucy reminiscing about her grandfather is an excellent touch.
I can see danger resulting from Lucy's prying at the mansion. You have a lot of threads on this loom, but I'm confident you can weave them all together.


 Comment Written 26-Apr-2014


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Another good chapter. No real answers yet, just more people to question. Nice deep breath chapter. I can see some revelations coming in the near future. I'm guessing the rapper kid next door tried to get signed on the Blackwell label at one point. I can see some sour grapes motivation to helping the detectives.


 Comment Written 26-Apr-2014


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I love how you throw an astonishingly beautiful poem in to the mix. You ciuld post that on its own and had a galaxy of stars just for that. Well, this is just getting better and better. Theses are great characters and you give each one of them special attention to help us know them. Lucy looking out over the dark waters remembering her grandpa. Wow. The Bard adds his poem. So touching. Then before we get too weepy... we are off for burgers imitating zombies. This is how real friends share time together. You are a hell of a writer!!! NG


 Comment Written 26-Apr-2014


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