Let me tell you something, Sandy - add comma for direct address
Love your description of the reading of the will and the pop-culture Elephant Man references LOL
Excellent dialogue that conveys strong emotion well
a most engaging narrative style and a fun plot line
I would like to say i knew it. Hahaua!!!! But who onows what you are going to come up with. Awesome chapter. Pleased to see Harpster alive. Interesting to learn even more about the Bard. Cool. Now the breakout. Awesome!!! NG
Sorry, for the delay. I been having boo coo company lately. They tapping in me fanstory time, it's frustrating. Got to earn me a certificate and cent pumps. Let's see what surprises you got waiting for me. You getting there, Mikey. Chapter by chapter. You build a strong foundation one brick at a time.
I knew Harpster was still alive. Just how do you come up with the Bard' s dialogue- sonambulise a shirtless Sade and an Abe Vigoda moment? Were you dropped on your funnybone...And then your head as a child?
OMG Michael, how many hires are there???LOL...and we found Harpster and Bard...both know to much...but they are friends..and now talking to each other..I changed my mind...It's not Bard...I said it before...not dead....and the Enquirer...LOL..what next??? ok Next...moving on...a wonderful story and a great write...luff
I love the story/ You gave a personality to a homeless man. You showed the value he had in his life. You pointed Out the problems Ex-military have. The Bard has a friend in the detective. You showed powerful doing not very good things Great work.
I get confused between the father and son names. Winston is the father or the son? The Bard is over the top in his ranting. I do understand now that the father has been kidnapped by his son and now they have kidnapped the Bard as well. I understand the Harpster is the father. Maybe you need to give them one name and stick to it like Jr. and Senior. ...LOL I will stay with it though. Nancy