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Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Lawyers, Headlines, Ungrateful Kids!"

A homeless man sees more than people realize.

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Mikey, this is rich on several levels. The narcissistic world of Blackwell is way scary and it may be something that is happening right now with elitist billionaires wanting to spread the love. I know you are an equal opportunity writer, so make sure you let a Democrat fall under your stabbing pen. LOL. Interesting subplots going on. :0 GracieAnn


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Another interesting chapter friend. Been talking to someone else in FS about doing what y9u do ...letting the readers/ reviewers suggest stuff haha. I liked the Bieber bit haha also Hehe tin can and string ha I remember that as a kid.


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OMG you goof...I had to laugh with this one...200 gallons of Blackwell what???LOL...I'm pulling my hair out...LOL...ok I need Bard back...let me move on ...I'm behind....how do you keep up with all the reviews and replies Michael ????luff Linda xxoo


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Your tabloid headlines are disturbingly accurate, a depiction of the times. 200 gallons of sperm - is there a Kong in the Blackwell family? And for the record, Braniac is a D.C. character, a Superman villain. Another good chapter.


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    Damn! I know that. I should go fix that. I'm a D.C. guy anyway. Green Lantern is my childhood hero. I was thinking of the girls being X-Men chicks. Loving your reviews and listening closely. I'll get caught up someday. Trying to keep up with reviews at least. Glad you are liking this. Keeping out of trouble so far!! mikey

reply by ravenblack on 30-Apr-2014
    I'm Batman all the way. G.L.is cool too. If you are at all inclined, pick up some of the Green Lantern graphic novels by Geoff Johns. The Sinestro War is really good.
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Wow, 'The Inquirer' is at work on this one. Lots of wrong going on and it will take a lot of digging and police work to bring it all down. Keepin' us on the edge...


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This keeps expanding yet it keeps getting tighter somehow. This chapter was a blast!!!! Always time for humor. Laughing to tears. The story remains exciting in spite of the madness!!!! NG


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It is an intricate story which makes if more effective and interesting. It will be interesting to see how it will all come together, you are a master writer. The characters are so likeable and the narrative flows so well. Great write as always. Faye


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I loved the news articles ("Are You Harpster's Kid? Odds are Good?" and "Sonja Bieber of Cricketscreams, Wyoming,") so humorous, makes this fun to read. I did think this chapter, while engrossing, was a bit confusing to the reader overall. If you hadn't been following this story closely, I think you would have lost readers. Maybe you could try, somehow, to tell Harpster's war story without "telling" it so much? I'm not sure how this would be possible, maybe weaving it through the narrative overall. I do see that this is crucial to the story. I was just a bit confused at the end of the narrative segment.


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I am not a celebrity buff. I could care less about the glitz and glitter of Hollywood. The news media is very low on my attention scale as well. This is a good example of the hype and lies that come out of Hollywood daily. You write a great story Mikey. Nancy


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I love the story. The lady detectives are getting help. They are still weeding out false claims to the Blackwell estate. We are finding out more about Winston. He has been hiding behind one brave thing he did in the war. Great work.


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